Date: January 18, 2007 11:08 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, my God, so cute! I LOVE Toby, and I love seeing him happy, because I think he'd be good at it if he had a little practice. Thanks for this!
Date: January 15, 2007 09:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, you are killing me. I already secretly lust after Toby (the green tie! goodness) and this has just taken it up a notch. I envy your prolific awesomeness of writing. (That doesn't even sound like english, but oh well.)
Amazing and wonderful, as always. :)
Date: January 15, 2007 01:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
I did not see that coming. And yet...it was so natural! Really nice work. It wasn't forced, it was sweet, it was a happy ending! I think I wouldn't mind another chapter even.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was thinking about doing another chapter, maybe in Toby's POV???
Date: January 15, 2007 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hey - that was absolutely the most believable Karen/Toby story I've read. Good job!
and I loved the little Jim/Pam tidbits you threw us Jammers! Pink roses on Valentine's Day? *swoon*!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'd hate to be Karen, watching all of the Jam love that she'll never know.
Date: January 15, 2007 03:59 am Title: Chapter 1
See, here's a problem I had with Two: on re-read, it doesn't seem entirely possible that Karen can be friends with either of them; wouldn't it hurt? She moved here from Stamford, for a guy whose background story she seems to know zilch about, and only to find out she doesn't really stand a chance. >< My only consolation is that I wrote it before A Benihana Christmas, so...uhm.
Then last week I saw a comment on LJ about possible Karen/Toby, because both of them deserve to be happy, and I was sold. I personally think they need it.
And you mixed both the K/T and the gradual-loss-of-the-probable-awkwardness [if she stayed] in one, lovely, super, awesome story.
First of all, all the JAM [since obviously I'm a fruity-bread-spread-fan at heart]: I adore thinking that it's them who get Dwight back, working on that together [it's like the opposite of Halloween: full circle! or something.] and I loved seeing that bit on Valentines' Day.
I love Karen's POV, especially the way she notices Toby's green tie, because that tie of his is my absolutely favourite - oh, Toby. Also, my sister first called him a shaved-mopey-dog-face the first time she saw him, and though I hardly agree with her eight-year-old perception of him now, I didn't find him all that attractive at the beginning, either; I love that it starts off that way for her, and then moves forward. It's just like Karen, I think, to automatically diss a guy she may end up liking: like Toby, here, and Jim, in Gay Witch Hunt. [sorry, lit tendencies.]
And noticing the way his voice squeaks, and the contradicting way he feels fit and solid and bulky [although that makes sense since it was said before that he runs] - I loved that detail.
Actually I loved a lot of things, especially the way you made things progress. All kinds, all kinds, of freaking awesome. I'm entirely serious.
I'm going to go read this again. KATIE! =P
I don't know. I think it may be possible for them to be friends eventually, as long as the rest of the story comes out to Karen in a more truthful, straighforward way than Jim's initial confession. Mmmmmyeah, okay, who are we kidding?
Seriously though, the idea of Karen/Toby has appealed to me for a while. Not that she needs to date someone at DM, but for fanfic purposes I'd rather see her with Toby than Roy. Mostly because Toby just needs to get some already. I'm with you on not thinking Toby was so wonderful in the beginning, but he really does grow on you and thank you for noticing the green tie thing too. I think he wore it in BfV and I was like, guhhhhhhh.
Thanks for the review, moofoot!
Also, shaved-mopey-dog-face? My sister said about the same thing when she first saw him and she's 23.
I didn't find Toby attractive until his infamous Dundies smile.
Date: January 15, 2007 03:28 am Title: Chapter 1
This is awesome!!! I was just talking to a friend a few days ago about how jim and pam should be together, and karen and toby should be together. Karen and Toby definitely have that same kind of soft, caring look in their eyes. awesome story!
Author's Response: Thank you! I definitely think Karen could make Toby in to a verrrry happy person. I'd like to see him happy for once. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: January 14, 2007 10:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
Um, yeah, I never thought of these two together. Somehow Toby seems very.... asexual... to me. So, with that bias, I must say that I like reading your stories. This one flows well, it's easy to keep up with and keep in to. Maybe I should mentally give Toby another chance. :)
Author's Response: Thanks. I can see why some might consider Toby asexual, but I have my own person bias in that to me, there's something very strong and manly about him. I don't know. His quietness just does something to me. But thank you for reading this!
Date: January 14, 2007 09:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Adorable! Love Karen's commentary and the kind of bumbling attractiveness you give Toby! Perfect!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm so, so glad that the way I was trying to have Toby come across to Karen actually did come across that way to readers. I was afraid I was making it too confusing as to whether or not she was attracted to him. But your review was exactly what I needed to hear. Thanks again!
Date: January 14, 2007 09:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
Have always loved Toby, but you fleshed him out here in ways I'd never thought about. And this just felt like Karen too (and I honestly don't even think she's that clearly drawn on the show.) Her edge and his sweetness (Kindergarten teacher voice) might actually be a perfect balance. I like the way you develop their relationship with the Jim (and Jim/Pam) thing as sort of a dimming note in the background.
...she begins to realize that no meant absolutely and thing meant love and I'm really glad you're here meant nothing. Fantastic line. Just so. Really enjoyed this.
Author's Response: Thank you colette! That's actually my favorite line, too. I agree with Karen and Toby kind of being a perfect balance for each other. He's so hesitant and she's a risk-taker so together they could be pretty good. I'm sure it will never happen because I have a feeling once Karen finds out the rest of the Jim/Pam saga, she's outta there. Oh well.
Date: January 14, 2007 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
Everything he does to her in his bed betrays his sweet, Kindergarten teacher voice. But his voice still squeaks a little when he gently urges her, come on...come on.
Okay, that? That is one of the hottest things I've ever read and I read a lot - a lot - of smut. *ducks head* But really, that was hot. Way hot. Way to make me lust after Toby. FOR SHAME.
This is really well written; the pace of it is very strong - it really makes me think about a few of the ways I've gone about characterizing Karen. Very nice!
Thank you! Hey, there's nothing wrong with lusting after Toby. This may be TMI, but I had like 3 dreams of Toby last week so I figured maybe the only way to make myself stop dreaming about him would be to finally write this Karen/Toby fic. Then I can go back to dreaming about Jim like a normal girl.
Thanks for the review!