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Reviewer: Ninjam Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2009 09:53 am Title: Candy

Awww. Very sweet. I loved it.

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 01, 2008 04:33 pm Title: Candy

that was so hot and lmao, jim saying pam was easy, love it :)

Reviewer: variella Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24, 2008 07:10 am Title: Candy

Pam fought the urge to pick it back out and pocket it, a little souvenir of the day.
such a girl thing to do. *sneaking a look at my own box of mementos on the shelf*

Like what she expected would happen when he walked through that door.
I feel so guilty for just assuming duh, you're going to bed with him since if they just wanted to chat they could have gone to Starbucks.

Her first fantasies of being with Jim predated her break-up with Roy by years
THANK YOU! *cheering*

she was glad that her fantasy of Jim's style seemed not very different from reality
This is a really sexy statement... maybe because it communicates the familiarity and novelty of the situation at the same time?

Unlike her previous sexual partner, she somehow knew she would be able to trust Jim to remember her needs, too.

wow. I'd say cheap shot, but I have a feeling he-who-shall-not-be-named deserves it.

fast in, slow out
using those four tiny words turned a useful sentence into a white hot descriptive one. nice. very nice.

Honestly, Pam, I had no idea you were soooo easy
You have such a great Jim!voice. And this line tempers the other emotions a little to make everything together more realistic.

Obviously I enjoyed this, not hard to do since it was so well written :)

Reviewer: chiquiti Signed [Report This]
Date: July 29, 2007 09:16 pm Title: Confetti

Somehow the sexiest part was where he touched the waistband of her underwear. I've been lurking for a while, and that part made me want to actually start leaving reviews. Awesome and hot and realistic (in the tv sense). Keep it up!

Reviewer: Sheppy Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 28, 2007 11:04 pm Title: Candy

See, I think after all these years that this is EXACTLY how it would happen.  Very well done.  :)

Reviewer: flamingosinparadise Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: January 26, 2007 07:28 pm Title: Candy

Wow...that actually sounds like something that it would happen!  Loved it!

Reviewer: Willow Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2007 11:36 am Title: Candy

This was beautiful, and hot, and beautiful. :)

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2007 10:22 am Title: Candy

This was insanely hot. Like nutso hot, moxie. Love how she's thinking they'll talk first, yadda yadda...then he gets there and KABOOM. 'God, yes,'  he replied, his voice husky. Passionate Jim is like a super-hero for the ladies. And you've given him to us in all his glory. My eternal gratitude.

Reviewer: Par5 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2007 08:17 am Title: Candy

She knew then as she invited him in that the sun would rise before he would be stepping back over that threshold.  Awesome line. I think you had me at that - but I'm still very glad you continued anyway! Thanks for giving these crazy kids some fun. And us too!

Reviewer: Par5 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2007 08:12 am Title: Confetti

Oh, Moxie. I love this in so many ways! I love the slow reveal of their feelings, of them finally interpreting the signs correctly. I just - I love it! Think this is what happened after?! Off to read the next part!!!!!!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2007 07:33 am Title: Candy

This line is so smoking hot I (almost) couldn't continue:
“I guess I should follow you?” he asked, his voice even deeper than usual. 

And talking is good, but there is a lot to be said for falling madly into bed. 

Reviewer: fireworkfiasco Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2007 06:41 am Title: Candy

This is hot. Uncalculably hot. Really, I love the steam in this, Pam's I want this, and just...yeah, the smex. Brava!

Reviewer: Jen74 Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2007 06:39 am Title: Candy

That was such a great ending!  And the last line?  LOVED IT!  I laughed out loud.  It was a great way to start my morning.  You rock.

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2007 06:07 am Title: Candy

Great fic.  If we could only see this on the show, I'd be so happy.

Reviewer: GreenFish Signed [Report This]
Date: January 24, 2007 05:14 am Title: Candy

Mox, I was so excited when I read the first chapter and this ... wow.  Yeah.  You got a little too much Jim Halpert in my head right now, and I have to go to work, and can I just say -- distracted?  Phew.  

Reviewer: theProgidalSon Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 23, 2007 09:36 pm Title: Confetti

love it. i only wish this would play out on the show. definitely one of my favorites of yours so far, because of its simplicity yet straightforwardness. good work! :)

Reviewer: Julie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 23, 2007 09:30 pm Title: Confetti

Awesome!!!!  I love this!!  write a sequel lol

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: January 23, 2007 02:11 pm Title: Confetti

Awww, Moxie, that was just perfect.  I loved it.  You rock!  Maybe Jim rolled up his sleeves to help Pam clean up and she read the signals??

Reviewer: Clare Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 23, 2007 12:45 pm Title: Confetti

Yoooohooooo chapter two? Where are you? ;-)

I loved this Moxie!! I can totally see it going down like this too. No big fight or long painful confessing, just honesty and kissing.... lots of kissing. I am so ready for you to get hired by NBC!

Reviewer: StarShine Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 23, 2007 12:43 pm Title: Confetti

*sigh* my reviews have got to be boring to read, since they pretty much say the same thing: YOU ARE FREAKIN' AWESOME!

i especially love the reappearance of pam's "yes. please."  i just love it all. but as i said, you already knew that. 



Author's Response:

i especially love the reappearance of pam's "yes. please."

Thank you SO much for noticing!! So when shall we start on the Forearm Report??  ;-) 

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: January 23, 2007 06:31 am Title: Confetti

Loved the conversation between the two.

Reviewer: HereComesTreble Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 22, 2007 05:33 pm Title: Confetti

I read this. I finished it. And I thought, "Holy hell, who wrote that?" How is it every time I read something by you I don't realize it until it astonishes me? Well done. As usual.

Reviewer: kaystar Signed [Report This]
Date: January 22, 2007 04:45 pm Title: Confetti

This was amazing. You are amazing. And my heart thanks you for a great story with such a satisfying ending.

Reviewer: Amalia Kensington Signed [Report This]
Date: January 22, 2007 04:04 pm Title: Confetti

You're so good. Really you are.

Thanks so much for this.
cheers.
--Lex

Reviewer: beth Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: January 22, 2007 03:30 pm Title: Confetti

Ok, i loved this!  I think it would be a really realistic way to finally get Jim and Pam together!  Great Job!!

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