Date: January 23, 2007 01:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
Sad and sweet and wistful and hopeful and all that good stuff....that sometimes it felt like he had his arms around you, his lips on your forehead. Yes! This is what their understanding (their emotional intimacy) was like. Perfect. And this: he really says yes. Somehow using the simple word 'really' there speaks volumes. Lovely, lovely.
Date: January 23, 2007 12:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
this filled me with so much hope and sadness, but in a good way. i loved it
Date: January 23, 2007 12:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was wonderful!
This line was amazing: You and he used to talk about things like that, and your ideas and his ideas were always so similar that sometimes it felt like he had his arms around you, his lips on your forehead.
Date: January 23, 2007 12:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is sooo true! He can be yours if you decide to be brave. Now, if we could hire a skywriter in Scranton, all would be right with the world.
I really like what you did with the inspiration, breaking the lines apart, and letting Pam's thoughts run. Beautiful.
Date: January 23, 2007 12:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
kind of confused, initially, when i read that challege bit. but kerouc is good times and so's this piece. really, didn't know how someone could approach this challenge.
"You've never liked feeling weightless alone." wonderful line.
great 2nd person narrative. they're easy to goof up, but you do well with it here. respect.