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These are all excellent. I like how they can be taken individually or as part of a narrative. I particularly like the bit in this one about Karen knowing that Jim "really wanted to look at her if he turned around," considering that now this is his arrangement with Pam.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!  I added that bit from Karen with the new arrangement in mind...it'll be interesting to see just how much Jim turns around now, when Karen is pretty much staring at him all day.  :)

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this is lovely! definately made me smile. wonderful job!

Author's Response: Why, thank you! Glad it made you smile.

Aww! This whole collection is really good - I love the distinctly different voices for each crew member. In very few words, you've created characters who really feel like they could be on the other side of the cameras, interacting with the usual bunch. Nice job!

Author's Response: Thank you! I wanted each little snippet to have its own tone- I'm so glad that came through to you. Thanks for commenting!

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this is gorgeous. the colors in the first line are just perfect, and set such a soft, wistful tone. bravo!

Oh, Karen. I really can't wait to see what's going to happen when she learns the missing piece to this whole saga, both on the show and in your story. This is very well done. Poor girl has no idea what she's in for, does she?

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Oh, I LOVE that Dwight composed a theme song for them. Oh, Dwight. You've made my heart break for him. I feel so sad for him that he and Jim aren't the team he wanted them to be, despite the fact that they are actually a wonderful team. This is so sweet and sad in it's own little Dwight way and I love it. Wonderful job!

I can't wait to see where this is going! This story is really different and creative. I love "The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock" and the line about the coffee spoons is my favorite, so I liked how you threw that in there. Nice job!

Author's Response: Oh great - anoter Prufrock afficianado!!  So glad you like the story!  Thanks for taking the time to read and review.  :-)

Wow. You've turned this cameraman into a really compelling character and point of view with only a few details - nice job! It's always interesting to see things from the crew's perspective, as on the show they're clearly a character but at the same time, we don't know what they think. I also like how your ending works as an ending, but at the same time it's kind of a beginning - ambiguous endings are a nice change from the traditional happy ending once in a while. Great job all in all!

Author's Response: Thank you! I didn't want to tie the end up in a big sappy bow, especially since who knows what Karen actually thinks of this guy.  I wanted it to be more about this guy taking a step forward with his life and, in doing so, forcing people around him to do the same.  I'm so glad you enjoyed it. 

oh. this is really, really good. the words just ooze that terrible clenched feeling in the most fitting of ways, and the last line is just perfect. wonderful job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!  I personally was unsure about the last line because it was something that just came to me and I threw it, and I'm so glad to know you think it's good!

This is gorgeous. It's achingly sad, but it still feels like Jim and Pam. Everything is perfect, from the descriptions of the drive and the hospital to her choosing an outfit to the rain. I wore a blue dress to my grandpa's funeral for much the same reasons, but it's one of those things that's incomprehensibly distressing when you're already a mess, and you've captured that. Wonderful, wonderful job.

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Oh my god, you cannot possibly leave it at this! This is adorably wonderful, and it still feels like Jim and Pam even though it's years later and oh, you have to keep going! Great job with this whole story!