The children of Halpert and Schrute meet and fall in love as only 5th graders can...
9 I love this story!!!
"Levi keeps talking about how he has a girlfriend in Canada, and I don't think she's real!"
Ha ha ha ha!!! Definitely sounds like one of Michael's boys.
I like how you keep switching up the point of views, and I love how this one is told from Chrissy's. I can definitely see the wheels turning in this eleven year olds mind. And she seems to have quite an imagination. You can definitely see why Patrick is enamored with her. And of course, she would be a little spit-fire that is going to give Angela and Dwight their more than fair share of headaches in the future. But that's only because she's the perfect combination of the two. Excellent character development.
Can't wait to read more.
Not for the faint-heartened - extremely dark Jim. Having read a self-help book on "moving on and getting on with your life" Jim Halpert starts a journal to get over Pam.
8 Absolutely fascinated by this writing. I've noticed that it's been a while since a new chapter was added, but I've also read your review responses and how it this is a difficult thing for you to take on. (Bravo, by the way, for taking on the unfamiliar) I'm hoping that you haven't written a new segment in a while because you are still working on one. I am also hoping that you are not deterred by things ended this season. I am doing a lot of hoping, I know. I just love character studies and investigations to how people really feel and behave. And this just piqued my curiosity so much.
A few people run into Jim Halpert at the Super Walmart.8 I love the contrast between someone who appears crazy (Pam) and someone who actually is (Creed), and then to have that followed up with a parallel of two people running around frantically looking for something in panic (Pam and then Jim).
And I can't get enough of Jim as a daddy. It would be awesome if we get to that point in the show some day.
“I need someplace to stay.” She said this so softly he had to strain to hear her in the stillness of the evening, leaning toward her slightly. Something inside of him suddenly wanted to protect her.
Wow! I loved this! and I can't wait to read more.
9 I am really enjoying the stylistic choices that you have made. Especially in the second portion of the chapter with the repectition of each stand alone sentance starting with she and being followed a verb in the past tense: She slammed. She took. She called. I love how it creates a rhythm and I think it establishes a sense of urgency and determination.
On a completely different note, I love how Jim 'threatened a woman with macaroni and cheese'. That was great!!!
Furthermore, you did an excellent job of creating visuals. I also love all the added pauses and stuttering during that awkward and confusing moment on Jim's doorstep.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
10 I'm in love with this story
Author's Response: Thank you so much ;-) There should be something new by tomorrow. And congrats on being the 69th review ::grin:: Kevin would be very proud.
25 10 Ok first off, that's awfully similar to my ring (except I have a princess cut).
But in this day and age where it seems that extravagant proposals are becoming the norm, it feels like the meaning behind them is lost. I can't help but think about an recent interview with John Krasinski and Mandy Moore on The Fuse, where John was asked if he thought about what kind of proposal he would do, and he's not even considering proposing to someone (that we know of). I couldn't believe the stupidity of that question.
But that's why I love this story. I love how it brought the meaning of the proposal back. I love how Pam says it so poignantly "Don't you see that I don't care where we are or what you do? If and when you propose, all I'm going to care about is hearing those words. You don't need to make elaborate plans because what's going to matter most to me is that you'd reached the point where you think marriage is our next step. Jim, you know me better than anyone. How could you think I would care how you proposed?"
For me a good proposal is about being inspired by the moment and by the love for the person recieving the proposal. And perfections aren't in the extravagant details, it's in the atmosphere and the meaning of what is going on. That's why that last proposal was more perfect than any big plan could ever had been.
Very well done, Moxie!!!
Sorry for such a long review, but I really needed to explain why that last chapter just made me so happy.
Well I certainly don't need to explain the moral of my tale to you, BJB - you are so very, very correct!! And really, could it happen any other way between those two?
Thanks for taking the time to leave such a lovely review! You're the best!
Excellent story idea!! The Andy character really is fascinating and I love how you've decided to tap into why he is the way that he is. This first chapter makes me so sad, but it's really wonderful. Andy just wants to be liked and loved. I wanna hug little Andy.
Oh, btw, I've befriended a few That Kids when I was younger. (and then there were a few that I didn't)
BlueJeanBaby, you're awesome for befriending Those Kids! I'm guessing that the ones you didn't, there was a verrry good reason!
I want to hug little Andy as well. I see The Kid in my children sometimes, as well as in some of their classmates, and now, as an adult, I have a lot of empathy for them.
The story idea just came to me, and it was great that it happened to be about one of our lesser-represented characters in fanfic! Hopefully, the next chapter will be up in about three weeks, and the other ones much sooner than that.
Thanks so much for reviewing. I'm really glad you liked it, BJB!
A series of Michael talking heads. Speculation for Season 4. 8 I loved the On Departures talking head!!
Jim gets some advice from a little seen source.
8 Wow! What a great way to explain Marjorie. And you made her seem so sweet and serine. Now I'm really curious. I hope there's more.
Author's Response: This was intended as a one shot, but my interest has been piqued. Perhaps I can have a career as a very specific fanfic writer [/Pam]. Thanks for commenting, BlueJeanBaby!
Jim passes on the family tradition in 55 words9 Daddy Man Halpert!!! OMGosh, I love this little girl!! There's no doubt that she's Jim's
8 Longer story?? Yes, Please!
:: gives Puppy-Dog-Eyes::
10 ROTFL!!!!! Best one yet!!!!!
Author's Response: Hehe, thanks!! :)
LOL!! So sweet. I really love these. More please.
9 LOL!!!! Daddy's little girl. Loved it!
Author's Response: Thanks!
10 Oh wow. So excellently sad. I don't even know what else to say. Very very well done.
After being dumped by Jim, Karen tries to take back control of her life... by kidnapping Jim! What nefarious plans does Karen have in store for him? Can Pam rescue Jim before Karen makes him a castrati? Why is Dwight obsessed with semen? All this and more inside! You'd think that maybe it'd be more of a crime drama than anything else, but I'm voting for the anything else.
And how come there's no option for Genres:Twisted? I'd use that.
7 This story is so much fun!! Especially now that Dwight is enlisted as the detective.
Author's Response: He has a detective kit in his car. It's one of three alternate profession packages he carries with him.
A short little ditty about why Pam wears that unicorn charm on her necklace.
One of the many things that I love about the office is the little details that make up the characters. These details suggest that there is a story behind them; a story that goes beyond what is told in front of a camera. We may never know these stories, but he have little artifacts that belong to them. Artifacts like Pam's unicorn necklace that we can almost always see her wear. It's so true to life, because these character's lives to go beyond their work and beyond what is told infront of a documentary crew. I love how these artifacts allow our minds to wander and to wonder and I love how you've decided to tap into that.
Have you ever considered writing about other little details? Like Andy's blue-braided bracelet? Are Jim's messanger bag? Or maybe something about something on someone's desk. I think you did very well with this one and I would be interested to see what you come up with for other back stories.
Aww, this review means so much to me.
I wasn't going to consider writing about other little aspects, but I am thinking of now, it is a really intersting idea, and I may even submit it as a challenge or something. Or I may hoard it all to myself :).
Thanks so much for the review, seriously, thanks.
Jim, Pam, and a bold conversation. For the BadFic challenge, just so you are warned.
8 LOL!!! My favorite part:
How did you know? About you loving me?
Oh, Kelly told me.
Well that, and the stuff about not loving Karen. Great Stuff!
8 Why on earth did I wait so long to read this? I swear this could have been about me. Well, except for licking the chocolate off Jim Halpert's face. I could only WISH that was me.
This story is just way too much fun!
Tandem Writing. A die-hard Jammer and a not-so-Jammer write alternating paragraphs to write a coherent story... 8 LOL!!! That was awesome!!! I love how the mood made a steep but gradual change and then reminded us of what was really going on here.
I can't stop the laughing going on in my head.
Jim didn't choose Pam, and Pam didn't (really) choose Jim. Time collides and some things just kind of...happen.
Complete and total rip off of The Time Traveler's Wife by Audrey Niffeneger, which everybody and their mom should read.
AU but attempts to follow canon plotline and eventual spoilers for almost everything.
7 This is interesting. I can't wait to see where it goes.
A year or two before the cameras arrived, Michael takes the staff to the Poconos for a camaraderie event. Much unresolved sexual tension and angst ensues (uh, between Jim & Pam, not the entire staff).
10 His words seem to trickle over her in a cold shock as she realizes in an instant the magnitude of all she's done to him: the way she's encouraged him to fill the emotional void Roy leaves, even though she knows what it costs him to do so; the way she's deliberately pretended not to see that he wants her, because doing so would mean that she can't safely keep indulging her own attraction; the way she's given him just enough to hold onto, a smattering of small moments that are sufficient to convince him that there's a chance.
Perfect. So spot on. The rest of the chapter was fantastic too.
While MTT was down for a brief time one night, I wrote a couple 55 word fics in the TWOP thread about Jim and Pam reading fanfic. I will likely continue this as a long running series, referencing my favorite stories and also newer stories as they come about.
8 Oh wow!
That reminds me. After all is said and done with this show, it would be awesome to have an episode or a post-series special where the characters have to deal with the aftermath of the dockumentary.
The little things were threatening to drive him insane.... a few 55-word chapters on learning to live with the one you love.
10 Moxie!, I absolutely love this. It's so true to life, but still perfect in the real-world sense.
(And I'm one of those that hates the ceiling fan on, but my husband claims that he absolutely needs it).