Great chapter! I really loved the way you wrote Brian; you did a fantastic job of really creating his character and also his entire backstory revolving around the documentary. What a great twist on CN as well, and I can't wait to see what made Brian turn the lights on them, as well as Jim's reaction to "I know." Wonderful job!

Very cute! I liked their game of Would you Rather; the questions were really funny! Nice job!

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Here's another review, as promised! This was an awesome interpretation of their first date, and like it says at the end of this chapter, no wonder he bought a ring after only a week! You definitely proved it was plausible. As for "emo bits" that may stand out, I definitely noticed some (especially in chapter 2) that seemed out of place, but I didn't find most of them too distracting. And you could definitely, DEFINITELY expand this, especially if you have more ideas for it. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks for coming back and reviewing this for me!! I\'ll probably go back and chop some stuff out of ch. 2 eventually but right now I\'m just trying to work out something for the next chapter. I have about three different versions but I think what I\'ve got going now is going to be the final draft. Thanks again for reading and I look forward to hearing what you think about what I come up with. :D

Thought I'd return the favor and review your stories! I really like this so far! It's really unique, and I like that you gave us a lot of background info on Grace. can't wait for more!

Short and smutty, just right. Hehe. I loved the motivation you gave for her, that he looked so tired and just needed to relax, and she wanted to help him with that. The actual smut part was excellent too; definitely along the lines of poetic in terms of the language you used. Nicely done!

Author's Response: Thank you. I\'m also working on a new story I hope to post soon. It is a first date story. Very smoldering hot with similar poetic themes. Thank you for your feedback. Now I know I\'m on the right track.

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Love this one! What a great idea; I love the saleslady's 'what a way to go.' It most certainly is. And I liked that you included the part about not upgrading the ring. I agree that it would mean more if she knew he bought it when he didn't have his nice new salary. Great chapter! More please!

Author's Response: Thanks so much Dundie All-star. I\'m a jewelry artist and it occurred to me that this would be a great way to strtch out the prank proposals. Glad you liked it. Hope to hear from you again.

Great job! This was really angsty and sweet all at the same time. I like how you put in the bit about the parking lot; it's a good thing for them to reflect on because of how deep a meaning it has. you really conveyed that well.

I was really touched by this one, just because I know what it's like to be in a long-distance relationship. You really captured just how difficult it is and how complicated feelings can get when you don't see each other every day. The line, "I don’t know if I can keep watching you leave" really struck a chord. It was perfect. Nice job!

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Great chapter! I'm excited there will be more of these. This was so adorable and couply (I definitely play that game with Mr. Dundie All-Star), and I liked her reflections on Roy as well. And the surprise at the end with them already being engaged! Yay! That made me smile. Awesome job!

Author's Response: Thanks!! I\'m glad you like it. I had a few different conversations just pop into my head and (surprise, surprise) they all took place in bed, so, what better way to spend the summer than writing those down...? Thanks for reading, and stay tuned, I have at least three more. :)

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So I thought since your such a loyal reviewer of my fic, I should probably read yours. :)

I loved this sooo much!! Such warm fuzzies everywhere. I especially loved:

There is a small smile among the new crop of stubble, which will no doubt find its way to her sink sometime this weekend. He’ll go play ball in the morning and after coming home and draining the cold water jug in the fridge, he’ll leave his shoes in her way again before hopping in the shower where he’ll use up most of the hot water.

That's a really great example of all the fluid connections you make throughout this little oneshot. Nicely done!

Author's Response: Thank you DAS, I\'m glad you liked it and glad you reviewed. Reviews make me smile, and I am a dork, Hee! I had fun with this little thing and it got quiet the response. I like that part too, it\'s just all the more reason for Pam to love him, because she knows so much about him and his bad habits too, and that he won\'t change and she still just loves him to bits.

Great job, LC! Heh, LC, like Lauren Conrad, right? I know that's why you chose this name, don't lie. ;)

So I've decided to reread this just for funsies. And because it's that good of course. Way to put these two chapters together; they flow really well into each other. I still really like the Pim exchange on the airplane (sidenote: your Jim's Vacation Playlist link isn't working!), and I think this time around I'll especially enjoy the interactions Dwight and Judy have, and how his opinion of her will slowly change.

I'm also going to pick out Jack-esque lines for every chapter to prove to you how good you are (sans the first chapter because I obviously started into this story late in the game). Here's the one for this chapter: "He gave me the name of the store he bought my perfume from, though, so I really hope I can get up there. I’m almost out. (Phyllis smiles more suggestively than one would’ve thought she could.) Bobby really likes that scent." So disturbingly hilarious. Nailed it.

Author's Response: Yes, DA-S...LC like the girl on The Hills. You are so very clever. *smack* I\'m glad you\'re rereading this for funsies and not because you got confused on whether or not this was cross-posted. (IT IS.) I\'ll fix that darn link for next chapter. Glad you thought putting two chapters together for this one was a good choice; I like it. And thanks for the Jack-like call out...I\'m flattered, he\'d probably die. Of embarrassment. Okay, kiddo, you rule for reviewing this behemoth TWICE. All praise due. :)

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This was chock-full of Jack-esque lines, but this one stood out and was (for me) the clear winner:

Oscar: (outside MuppetVision 3D) It was great. The Muppet Show reminds me a little of our office, you know? Chaos and stupidity reign supreme, but probably pretty entertaining to watch. (He listens to a question from off-camera and considers it a moment. ) If I had to cast our office with the Muppets? Hmm…Dwight would be Gonzo. Michael’s a little like Fozzy Bear. Andy…Andy’s kind of like Miss Piggy, don’t you think? Loves to sing, prone to violence… (He listens again.) Jim and Pam…? They’re the two old guys that sit in the balcony and heckle…you know…

The Andy/Miss Piggy line KILLS me.