Reviewer: iamapam1883 Signed
September 15, 2010
Chapter 1: Grin.
It's been about a year since I've read any Office/JAM fics. And to be completely honest, I decided to see what yours was since it's currently sitting directly above mine and I knew you had taken it down and resubmitted it. I was kind of expecting it to be like the one-shots I saw when I left last year, all sappy JAMbaby-esque. Oldleaf, you've left me pleasantly surprised. :)
I think your characterization of Pam is pretty awesome here. I like that she's still unsettled and vulnerable with her feelings, though instead of having her run from the, you have her embrace them as she says these things to Jim.
there's a ring on your finger that represents me and a ring on my finger that represents you
I'm a softy for lines like this.
you're an open book and I'm the kind with the pages stuck together that you have to pry open carefully because you know there's a page there, but open too forcefully and it tears.
I believe someone else commented on this but I have to reiterate the greatness of this line. It's actually a fantastic way to describe Pam.
I actually didn't get the show reference of Jim smiling when she walked in the room the first time I read it, but what stuck out to me in that moment was that you nicely describe how her mother's influence still has a hold on her and I'm glad you took a moment to establish that she would be cautious about her own relationship after seeing her parents' long standing marriage fall apart because that is how life works and we often reflect in our own relationships what we see around us.
Mostly, I just love that you have Pam, after five years of us knowing her and her going through changes, still is learning and finding herself (and her relationship with Jim) That just because they're married doesn't necessarily mean they've got it all figured out but they're happy and that's the important part.
Anyway, to make a long review short, good job! I hope you decide to give it another shot. Maybe try something from Jim's POV? I'd be interested in your take.
Author's Response: iamapam1883, I so appreciate such a detailed review. That's so kind. I adore your fics and I'm thrilled you enjoyed this one. I'm a huge Pam fan - she's actually the reason I kept watching the show, I related so much to her character in season 3, so I've always felt like I "get" her to some extent and it's nice to see that came across in the story. I'm really excited everyone enjoyed those two lines. I love playing around with words and metaphors and things like that. And yes, Stress Relief is definitely the episode that guided me in writing this. I don't know that I'm going to continue this one, but never say never. Maybe I'll randomly think of something more to add. This was really just a way to force myself to be creative again, because I haven't written anything in awhile (I like to write original stuff too) and it's just always been something I love. Anywayyyy, thank you so very much! I really, really appreciate you taking the time to leave such a lovely review.