A response to the "He was mine first" challenge. This came to me and demanded to be written. No betas, so I hope it turned out ok.
10 So, on my way to FINALLY read Cardiac Care (since you have a firm date of completion,) I wanted to read some of your other stuff first and I'm glad I chose this one :)
I read it long ago, but it was a pleasure to re-read. I love this part "... And taking care of her is all he really focuses on. He just keeps looking at her and saying She’s perfect. She’s just perfect.”
Pam drew a deep, shuddery breath. “I look at them and I think he was mine first. I had him all to myself and now I have to share him with you – forever. What is wrong with me, mom? What kind of person thinks that about her three day old daughter?..."
It's sad, but I think a lot of mothers feel this way (I know I did.)
And this- “Everything I do or say sets her off. The house has been full of crying pretty much all day.”
Yes, Jim, my husband knows that feeling, too! lol
10 Oh God, poor Pam! Poor Jim :( I hope you have a direction for this, cause I'm hooked. SEE! This is why I have my "don't read until complete" rule. But I get ahead of myself since it's you and I have to read anything with your name attached.
There were a few spelling mistakes, and he's when it should have been she's and visa-versa which confused me a bit, but reading again, I figured it out. Another thing (and this is just me, I'm sure,) but "boyfriend" was used a lot in their argument. I know that's what he is, and really, there isn't much else you can use, but to me it sounded too... adolescent. It didn't take me out of the story, just something that stood out to me.
Miscarriages can wreck even the most solid of relationships and I'm anxious as to how this is going to play out. Will Pam feel like she jinxed them? Will Jim think he put too much stress on her? There are many avenues for this story to take and both have a lot of guilt they could carry around for a long, long time. If they have a realistic chance of working through a new shaky relationship with a tragedy on top, you're the person who can make it happen.
I always talk to much. :)
Author's Response: I'm sorry! I'll try to update as soon as I can. I promise you won't be waiting two months for an update again!
I definitely need to do another run-through, that's for sure, so thanks for saying that. The boyfriend thing -- it's weird to write that in there, because we didn't hear them reference each other that often in that way. I know Jim calls Pam his "girlfriend" in Weight Loss, and even then it was cute but, yeah, it seems a little adolescent. But I didn't want Jim to call them "partners" or something like that, and he couldn't really say "the guy you're in a relationship with" five times. I think by calling himself a boyfriend so many times, he was just frustrated and trying to put it in layman's terms for her over and over again.
Your last paragraph makes me nervous! I hope I can pull it off. I have a lot of ideas, and a pretty clear idea of where it's heading. I've had most of this story planned out for a long time, a summary of the chapters written out before I started typing the first. It's just hard to try and do a good job on something so sad when on the show they're so happy, and things are going really well for them. So I hope I can pick this up and carry it out well. Thanks so much for the thoughtful review. =)
8 Glad you've continued. I'm really enjoying this.
Author's Response: Thank you. That means a lot. Cheers for the review =)
8 No way, you're really going to stop there?
Ah first date jitters. Love it!
Author's Response: Mmhmm I am that evil =)\r\n\r\nI have SO much planned for the next one and I hope you all like it =)\r\n\r\nEllie will definitely be back then yay!\r\n\r\nThanks for the review, I appreciate it so much!
Oh I am SO glad you've updated this story! I've really missed it! Hope the updates come more frequently from now on ;)
Author's Response: Heee fingers crossed. I'm going to try and writer shorter chapters more often - we'll see how this goes. Thanks so much for your lovely review, it means a lot <3
Wow! I've been wondering about this story! Thank you for continuing it. It's such a treat to read, esp when I haven't been reading much here lately.
I feel like I've said this before, and I probably have, but I love that you have Jim and Ellie signing to each other. If you ever have questions on signs, let me know!
Author's Response: Thank you SO much. I'm really glad you're still following the story, and that you're enjoying the Jim & Ellie signing to each other. I think it's such an important part of the story. I can't remember if I have you on my AIM, but if not, it's SnoWhiteSally. I'd love to talk with you :) And thanks again for reviewing.
10 Hmmm, study for my midterms and do my overload of homework, or read the new one by Callisto?? Yeah, no thought needs to be put into that.
Loved this, just as I knew I would. Everything that stems from your typing-tips is sparkly. :) Hope to read more from you in the summer. It's going to be hard these upcoming months. (twss)
I really need to go back and watch Michael's Birthday again. Sweet smiles always happen during that episode.
Author's Response: Well, officially I have to encourage you to be responsible and do your homework. Unofficially, I\'m pleased you like my writing. And in any case it\'s no longer relevant because it\'s JULY and I\'m just now doing replies for this story?! Thanks for reading, glad you liked it, and thank you for letting me know. And Michael\'s Birthday is always a good episode. Watch it again. :)
9 I don't care how angsty this is- I LOVE it! I like Roy stories, and even though I love Jim and Pam together, I do feel sorry for Roy. He's a good guy, he just wasn't right for Pam. But even though he wasn't right for her, it doesn't make him hurt any less. Great read!
This is the ideal follow up to the finale.
"I know! It's like...I don't know, I felt like this...this spell would be broken or...I don't know...I don't want to think about anything else other than...this and..." I love everything this sentence chooses to be! I can hear Jim laughing/stuttering/shaking voice trying to grasp words while his head is spinning, trying to maintain a bit of decorum. PureBliss!Jim speaks so perfectly in ellipses and exclamation points!
Who else sees Jim storing the red Scranton shirt in his keepsake collection? Yep.
"I love your smile." The words had tumbled forth like a new revelation. Like I'd never thought them before, when clearly I had. Clearly all my thoughts just felt...new...today." and "I felt that familiar burning at the backs of my eyes when I pulled away and I pressed the heals of my palms to them, laughing at myself." Beautiful.
Author's Response: I'm glad you thought Jim thinking of keeping that shirt forever was a realistic touch! I just thought it was one of those kinds of days...you'd remember exactly where you were,where you were standing, what you were wearing, etc. etc. Thanks so much for the review!
It's marked as complete, but there is more, right? Please let there be more. lol
Author's Response: Ok, I changed it to "incomplete"... there will be more to come. :)
10 How have I not reviewed this yet, and how did I just now notice the third chapter is up.
Love this so far, and your taste in music, based on chapter titles, rocks :)
I can almost see Pam being jealous of Karen, thinking "oh, he's just picks a new girl every year, and I'm his find of the summer." Ahh, angst- how I miss you (a little.)
Can not wait for more!
Author's Response: Um, I\'m not sure how you missed it, but I\'m glad you found it! And thanks - I\'m trying to keep the music summery. :) That\'s a GREAT take on what\'s happening - you\'ll see that idea creep up again... Thanks again!
10 FINALLY! :D
Wonderful update, as always! I love the day by day recap. I will not bore you with everything I love about this, otherwise I'd be here all day ;)
So sad that Roy was away from Pam, yet he's leaving her to go to a cheap seats baseball game... Typical.
Squee!! I'm so excited you're back! I loved this story (all three parts) and was hoping it wouldn't be left unfinished. You pick up where you left off and nothing sounds different, if that makes sense. The voices are still spot on from the way you started them way back when :)
Glad you're back!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoy this particular Jim/Pam reincarnation, despite the huge AU factor.
This is so exciting to have back! Hooray! They progressed quickly into the pregnancy! A little girl... Jim is sooooo screwed! lol
OH NO!!They'll be ok, though! More, more, more!
Author's Response: It will be okay. Have faith!
I love the ending of the dream sequence! Jim's right, somethings ARE meant to be. I can't believe how far this story has come!
Ugh I HATE when strange people feel the belly and offer not so welcome advice/stories. :)
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A series of Season 5 episode related stories.
10 I haven't reviewed this yet, in instead of leaving a bunch of reviews in a row, I'll just leave one comment on all the stories I've read so far. First, I love everything about this collaboration.
sophia_helix- Love that you addressed the torn ticket. So Michael, sweet but dumb. Perfect Michael/Holly voice and it makes me ache that they took her away from him.
Blanca- Oh Michael and his cluelessness, how I love thee. Strange, but I don't enjoy Michael as much on the show as I am in this chapter. I can see him throwing himself into Jim and Pam's plans without a second thought. Great stuff!
Paper Jam- With the travesty of Baby Shower, I was almost hesitant to read this. Kidding! I kid. I didn't hesitate at all cause I knew it would be great. 1am sleepy-time phone calls are the best when shared with the one you love. I get a total kick out of the dream. Also weirded out since I can picture a Michael head on a baby body and it's kinda scary!
thirtypercent- YAY for this chapter. You wrapped it up nicely. I knew he still had some residual feelings after turning the car around and heading home. I love the way those two talk here. "Well, you can't have my brain." "I don't want your brain." and "...My liver is crying." HA! Loves it to pieces!
I cannot wait for more and promise to be a better reviewer :)
9 I can't wait for the next chapter. I get excited every time I see a new update! I love that she remembered the rain :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm happy you are liking the story. I had to make her remember the rain, cause I'm sure it would be lodged in my brain somewhere such a momentous occasion. Hopefully I'll get the next update up soon.
Scary. I am so sorry your friend had to go through that. I couldn't imagine. I am enjoying this story immensely and can't wait for you to continue.
Author's Response: It was a bit scary, but her daughter is fine now. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
9 This gets me teary-eyed yet again. Can't wait for the next update. Hope it's soon!
Author's Response: I hope they are happy tears. I\'ll be trying my best to update soon. Thanks for reading!
9 I really like this- like a lot. I look forward to reading more from you! Right? I always thought in her mind Pam was thinking that she was doing it for herself when she said she didn't come back because of Jim. Love how you added Roy into the story.
Author's Response: Exactly- I always thought that she really was telling the truth when she said she didn\'t come home for him- she missed him, but that wasn\'t the whole reason. Thanks so much! :)
9 Sweet and fluffy. Like virtual cotton candy for the soul. Doesn't matter that you're late to the party, cause this was lovely. Thank you for sharing!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I appreciate it!
10 Oh Colette, I simply can't wipe this smile off my face. Time away has done nothing to diminish the beauty of your Jim/Pam imagery. You've taken me out of my living room and put me on the beach, watching two people in love.
Author's Response: Wow - thanks for such a generous and lovely review, Andastainonmshirt!
10 Yes! A new one from you makes me happy! You always manage to hit the nail on the had with these two. Your writing is so in character and it almost makes my heart break for him. So good.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks for the kind review. I\'m glad you enjoyed it. =)