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Omigosh! I'm sitting here crying like a blubbering fool! This was outstanding. Wow. I loved so much about this - not a bad life indeed.

I need a tissue.

Author's Response: *hands Deedldee a tissue* Sorry about that, but I'm glad you enjoyed it. I toyed with putting a warning at the beginning because I know some folks don't like this kind of story, but that would have given it away, so I didn't. Thanks muchly for your comments.

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oh wow this is beautiful. You have an amazing breathtaking way with words. The tone was just so rich with happiness but at the same time this romantic and passionate tone as well. I hope I'm making sense. What I'm meaning to say is you're an awesome writer and this is wonderful! *instant favorite*

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This was so great, short and sweet. I really loved this part,
Her memories with Jim are edged in sharp relief. His posture, his tone, the glint in his eyes, are etched into her mind’s eye with a clarity that defies the monotony of their time together in the office. The few moments they escaped to be themselves, away from co-workers and cameras and fiancés, made the best days. Nearly all her best memories from the past five years are bound in some way to his eyes, his smile, their shared laughter. His unerring ability to make her smile, even when she doesn’t want to. I also like how she doesn't jump to any conclusions when he says he's a horrible person. I enjoyed this a lot, your writing style flows perfectly, and hope you post something again soon!

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So emotional in the beginning and so sweet at the end with them and cece. I'm loving the tone of this chapter. But I'm fearing that I'm being lulled into a false sense of security! Please write more of this soon. I'm anxiously awaiting more!

Keep going. Looking forward to reading the rest of these.

Author's Response: Thanks! It is complete and I uploaded all 5 parts, not sure why they're not all up yet, but thanks :D

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Wow... *clearing throat* That was an eye opener. If I give you fifty cents will you post another chapter tomorrow? How about 5 stars/10 rating? Would that work? Not sure where you ladies are going with this but I'm in for the ride! ... you make an excellent team!

Author's Response: Thanks, Deedldee! We probably won't post the next one for several weeks. We've both got vacations coming up and this one took a few weeks to put together. We definitely have a few more in mind, though! Thanks for taking the time to leave a review! We appreciate it.

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I loved the Oscar and Michael thing, the Jim would kiss Kevin thing and Michael commenting on Karen's butt lol But I honestly have to say I can not wait to see what happens when Jim walks with Pam back to the dorm! ;-) Hope the next update is soon!

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Great chapter! Can't wait to read more. Again, the characterizations are wonderful. I love how quickly Jim is falling for Pam and how cool Karen is in this story. Oh, and Michael being so infantile - so so funny!

Author's Response: Like I said, I really did like Karen, just not with Jim. When she's a Jim/Pam obstacle, she has to be bad, somehow. But I really like the idea of a cool, pro-Jam Karen.

Yep! My favorite chapter so far! Adorable! More please! This was really funny. The part where she says you only use one hand and he says it's not that unruly is officially my favorite line in fan fiction history. :)

Author's Response: So glad you liked it. Though apparently not unruly Jim has particular talent. One of my men friends just told me about an unpleasant experience today in which he was nearly, uh, "baptized" by a fellow gent in a public washroom.

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I know this is a Pam & Jim story, and I'm loving the slow burning build up between them, the subtle descriptions are wonderful. I love how enamored he is with her, that glimpse into his mind is great. And I'm really really looking forward to see what happens with Kelly, Ryan, Dwight and Jim. Awkward! Love it all. But this is just pure Dwight and Jim:

“Ridiculous, engagement rings,” Dwight scoffed. “The Amish give practical gifts to propose, like a clock or a stock pot.”

Jim stored that information for future use. = Wonderful.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you! I did have to look up Amish engagement traditions to find out that information. I hope you won't be disappointed though, I really don't have plans to extend the story too far into the future. But I don't think you'll be upset by the end. At least, I hope not.

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I truly loved every word of this! The end is fantastic! Hope to read more stories from you!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :) I'll see what I can do about posting some more...

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I loved every single thing about this chapter. The what if conversation was really in character and so believable I could actually imagine that's what they would have said. (you know, if they weren't fictional characters, lol)

This is just perfectly sweet:

“So what now?” he asks.

She smiles lightly and mimics his earlier words. “I don’t know. I guess… we start dating?”

He laughs and pinches the flesh at her waist.

“It’s an okay start, though,” she says, “right?”

When he thinks about it, he knows he wouldn’t have had it any other way. Because tonight, right now, lying next to her, is just about perfect.

“Yeah,” he replies, moving his thumb over the soft fabric of her blouse. “It’s okay.”

Love it and can't wait for more and I really hope this isn't nearing the end just yet!

Author's Response: Wait, they're fictional?! Haha. Thank you so much! In truth, I'm not sure how much longer the story will go. It seems to be meriting less response of late and I fear I've done something to let people down. I'm prepared to close it with the next chapter but I'm also open to keeping it going. If I keep it going, however, I could use some suggestions of things you'd like to see them do/address. I do know how it's going to end, so some things are set, but I'll gladly take input for possible interim chapters. Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts. I wholly appreciate it.

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Hey Ivy, I just noticed your reply to my comment and my initial response echo's VB's - go with your vision, I don't want to be getting in the way of your vision for this wonderful story, but now that you mention it maybe you could add in what you replied to VB - the taking advantage part. But if it doesn't fit in with what you've set out to do, ignore my ramblings and I apologize for sticking my nose in where it doesn't belong. Either way, I am so looking forward to where you take the rest of your wonderful story. :) I'm not sure why there aren't more reviews for this and all of the other stories on here lately. We should start some sort of you must review when you read campaign haha! And I also want to see how I can help you get a ribbon on this story. Okay, I'll shut my yapper and move along.

Author's Response: Thanks, Dee! The good thing about the story is that it could work with just one more chapter or it could work with ten more (there won't be ten more). In terms of the vision, like I said, there are a few things I know will and will not happen. But I'm open to suggestion. I'm going to give it some thought and see if I can work in the taking advantage thing in a way that feels natural. If I can do it, it'll be there. If not, it won't be. I think it makes sense. And please never worry about thinking you're saying too much. I want to know what you think. Thank you for taking the time.