Reviewer: BecauseOfYou Signed 
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Date: March 30, 2018
Title: Chapter 1: Sweetness and Fright
First, I am so very happy to see another story by you! There was so much I loved about this!
Second, I was thinking very much the same as Dwangela wrote so very well in her review. The powers you came up with we’re spot on for our characters. Jims power fit him perfectly but I like the fact that you made him not really wanting to advance is power or take advantage of it in anyway. And especially the fact that he had never used it on Pam. And for Pam I love that you use something that really accentuated her creative side and that she found it useless and mentioned so time and time again when in fact it could be quite useful. That is so very Pam. And Roy, I can’t really figure out how to express what I want to say without putting too many spoilers in here...but what a mindf**k. And really isn’t that just an exaggerated version of what he (or the relationship as a whole) did to her? Overtime, being in that relationship essentially led her to believe she was worth so much less and deserved so much less than she was.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for taking the time to elaborate! It took me a long time to come up with the "best" power for Roy. In the end, I went with the best way to play into Pam's close-mouthed nature. Because she never had to express herself out loud, she never got good at it.
With Jim being naturally empathetic and a natural slacker, his power pretty much wrote itself.
In my first mental rough drafts of the story, Mark actually had the lame power to change the color of his fingernails at will. But he ended up developing from an ancillary character into a major character, and it made more sense to give him a power that would 1-make Jim feel inferior, 2-make Pam like him as a friend, and 3-be the game-changer in the final confrontation. If I hadn't given him something useful, I'd have had to wrangle yet another character onto the stage for that scene, and I'm a big fan of the KISS principle.
