Penname: Coley Real name:
Member Since: May 12, 2018

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Sometimes I write stories. People seem to like them.

Author of the Month April 2019


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Terra Incognita by Comfect Rated: T [Reviews - 125] 78
Summary: Past Featured Story

NOW COMPLETE! Jim gets in an accident on June 10, and Pam gets to help. Only AU in that it deviates from main timeline between S2 and S3 (no different worldbuilding premise).

Disclaimer: I do not own the Office or its IP.

Challenges Challenge Entry Q2 2018


Categories: Jim and Pam, Alternate Universe
Characters: Helene Beesly, Jan, Jim, Jim/Pam, Larissa Halpert, Other, Pam
Genres: Angst, Fluff, Inner Monologue, Romance, Hurt/Comfort
Warnings: Violence/Injury
Challenges: Hospital JAM, Sister Sister
Series: None
Chapters: 52 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 63095 Read Count: 109738 ePub Downloads: 31
[Report This] Published: May 20, 2018 Updated: July 21, 2018
Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: July 11, 2018 Title: Chapter 45: June 13: Moving Rooms

Those last two lines though. So good!

Author's Response: :D Thanks!

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: July 09, 2018 Title: Chapter 44: June 13: The Note

I totally wasn’t thinking “just read the letter already, Pam!” through that first half. That’s just me being impatient though. I loved her powers of deduction.

And then she read it and it didn’t disappoint! Well done!

They’re so dang cute together in this. I’m going to miss this story when it’s done.

p.s. - hope the move went well 😊

Author's Response: Haha. I must admit, I had been setting up a lot of Jim the previous chapter so it didn't seem fair to make Pam jump right into the card. But I too was wondering when I'd get to it ;). Glad it didn't disappoint! And yes, the move went well, thanks.

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: July 07, 2018 Title: Chapter 43: June 13: Simultaneously with the Previous

The note! While I really think taking it with him and burning it in Australia is something he would have done, I'm really glad he never made it there. Now I can't wait to see what it says!

Author's Response: I hope that what I wrote works for you :). I do think Jim would have gotten some solace from that sort of ritual, though of course in canon he never did it (since it reappears later on).

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: July 05, 2018 Title: Chapter 42: June 13: Hallway (ICU)

Oh Jan. I was about to be really mad at her for shattering their work-free bubble but she turned out to be pretty helpful by the end there, didn't she?

Here's hoping Jim thinks this is good news too?

Author's Response: Of course he does :)

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: July 05, 2018 Title: Chapter 41: June 13: Jim's Room

I really like here how they're handling Jim's transfer to Stamford like adults and not freaking out over it.

Author's Response: That is important to me too, thanks. 

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: July 05, 2018 Title: Chapter 40: June 13: Jim's Room (ICU)

Aww, they're flirting!

I really liked Jim admitting that he had been unfair to her with the choose me or lose me mentality he had on Casino Night.

Author's Response: I think that's a really important part of their healing, so thanks. 

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: July 02, 2018 Title: Chapter 39: June 13: Cafeteria

Who doesn’t love a good Dwight impression?!

Author's Response: Neither Jim nor Pam doesn't! (Yay double negatives).

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: July 02, 2018 Title: Chapter 38: June 13: Hallways to the Cafeteria

Oh, I liked Pam comparing Stamford to Roy here, and her internal struggle with which was worse. That was a really great section and a new way of looking at the situation.

Author's Response: Oh good. I wasn't sure how that comparison would come across, so hearing this is a relief.

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: July 02, 2018 Title: Chapter 37: June 12-3: Jim's Room

Ugh, Stamford.

What I love here is that Jim and Pam are so happy that she can’t even leave his room to let him rest, but that’s fine because he won’t sleep because he can’t stop looking at her. You’ve nailed down the best part of a new relationship even if they are stuck in a hospital.

Author's Response: Thanks! This is an element I feel we missed a bit in the actual show because of the summer break, so I like adding it in here.

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: June 28, 2018 Title: Chapter 35: June 12: Jim's Head

Things have to be pretty overwhelming for Jim right about now, huh? It’s good he had some downtime to process everything that’s going on - definitely enjoyed the peek into his brain here.

Author's Response: Thanks! His inner monologue is fun to write.

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: July 02, 2018 Title: Chapter 36: June 12: Pam's Chair by Jim's Bed

Pam’s pro and con list is pretty dang great! So is that ending, aww 😊

Author's Response: Aww, thanks!

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: May 28, 2018 Title: Chapter 7: June 10: Still in Jim's Room

Finally got caught up on this and it keeps getting better and better! I love how you had Pam describe herself and Larissa is definitely growing on me. I laughed when she admitted that everyone who knows Jim knew about his feelings for Pam before Pam did, and I loved her just coming out and saying that she already likes Pam. This friendship feels natural, despite the circumstances they're in.

I can't wait to see what happens next!

Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you caught up, and I'm very glad Larissa is growing on you. It's a hard line to walk between too much bonding and too much ignoring Jim, so I'm glad it's working for you.

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: May 29, 2018 Title: Chapter 8: June 10-11: Relaxation Room

Aww, I love Pan wanting to take care of both Jim and Larissa. I also love the small details that make the characters seem even more real - like Pam getting them lost on the way to the relaxation room.

Author's Response: Thanks! Pam does have that aspect to her personality, doesn't she? Taking care of others is among her favorite things.

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: June 12, 2018 Title: Chapter 11: June 11: Relaxation Room

Oh, this is so lovely. I loved seeing Pam struggling to write out her feelings only to realize there's really only one way for her to do that... the description of the picture is so striking - I really like it.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm a little worried my version of Pam here is not struggling enough, so thanks for picking out the moment of struggle I did include to comment on :)

Reviewer: Coley Signed 1
Date: June 12, 2018 Title: Chapter 15: June 11: The Cafeteria

I love the ever-growing ease and familiarity between Pam and Larissa as they continue to get know each other! The 2 golden lines in this chapter - Larissa asking her what her intentions were and Pam at the end saying she'd like to do the proposing -- those are gems!

Author's Response: Thank you! It's really good to hear which moments stand (or at least stood) out :)

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: June 12, 2018 Title: Chapter 16: June 11: By Jim's Side

"I’m here, and I’m not running away. I need you to meet me halfway, OK?"

Yay Pam! That's all I've got.. I was grinning at her declaration at the end of this chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you think she's still 'Yay Pam' as we go forward, because I'm trying to evoke that feeling.

Reviewer: Coley Signed 1
Date: June 12, 2018 Title: Chapter 17: Interlude III: Jim's Head

This might be my favorite chapter so far. It's just so good! Jim's headspace is fascinating and I love how his subconscious is starting to meld with everything going on around him. I'm excited for him to start waking up for real!

Author's Response: Thanks! I liked having Jim a little separate from the other characters to allow me to give him an internal monologue as well.

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: June 12, 2018 Title: Chapter 18: June 11: Waiting Room

Okay, that Gatorade story is adorable, and now for as excited as I am to see Pam and Jim when Jim finally wakes up, I'm starting to get excited to see the Halpert siblings interact as well!

Author's Response: Yeah, it's fun to play around with Larissa since she's just teased and not present in the TV show, so she can be whatever we want. Thanks.

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: June 25, 2018 Title: Chapter 31: June 12: Helene

Aww! Helene and Jim bonding - I’m here for it. Her answers to his questions were lovely and everything I wanted them to be, especially for the third one. I do love that we got a little glimpse at young Pam from Helene’s perspective and I also love that she’s picking up on the little moments between Pam and Jim.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm not sure how much we'll see Helene again (depends on when I decide this ends) but I'm glad you've enjoyed her.

Reviewer: Coley Signed 1
Date: June 20, 2018 Title: Chapter 26: June 12: Towards the Hospital

“I know dear, that’s why I didn’t invite your father.”

I love that now things are a little less grim with Jim, they’re all relaxing a little bit and things are a bit lighter. I also love Pam’s mom and I’m anxiously awaiting her appearance at the hospital.

Author's Response: We will definitely get to Mrs. Beesly soon! Thanks for reading; despite today's slight medical setback they'll be more relaxed going forward too.

Reviewer: Coley Signed 1
Date: May 21, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: June 10: Pam's Apartment

I don’t know what it says about me that I love a good angsty hospital story, but I am already here for this. Big time.

I think you nailed what Pam would have been feeling that day but I especially love that you have her a feeling a bit of anger toward Jim for bolting the way he did. And that cliffhanger, well, that was just rude.

I can’t wait to see what Larissa has to say!

Author's Response: Thanks! I look forward to hearing what you think of my Larissa (and the story as it goes forward). 

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: June 27, 2018 Title: Chapter 33: June 12: Afternoon

Well. Alright then. But I’ve got my eyes on you for further shenanigans. 😉

For real though, you’re a great storyteller and I’ll love whatever twists and turns this might take. I’m super glad he’s still okay though!

Author's Response: No shenanigans in the story! I like happy JAM, and I plan on providing it ;). Twists and turns will not involve potential death here.

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: June 26, 2018 Title: Chapter 32: June 12: Cafeteria

Comfect! Look, I watch This is Us... I know exactly what can happen when a loved one steps away from the hospital room for a snack. I sincerely hope that your game plan isn’t THAT evil.

I was feeling so good about this chapter too - Helene pulling the “I’m the mom” card for both of them, and Pam’s thought process... all good things!

Ooh boy. But now I’m not so sure what’s going to happen. I cannot wait to see!

Author's Response: Coley! I'm not that evil. I write this stuff for my own entertainment, and I hate that particular turn, which is why I decided to signal it and then [spoilers for anyone reading this before reading the relevant chapter].

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: June 24, 2018 Title: Chapter 29: June 12: By Jim's Bed

“I promise, you won’t misinterpret this” had me grinning like a fool. That was a perfect line. Thankfully followed by a sweet kiss. Things are moving along!

And here comes Mama Beesly. I’m excited.

Author's Response: Thanks! I was pretty proud of that one, I'll admit. So much angst to make up for makes for so many good lines to include.

Reviewer: Coley Signed
Date: June 22, 2018 Title: Chapter 27: June 12: Outside Jim's Room

Oh hey, does Jim have arthritis? Just wondering. Of course, I’d be super cranky too if I was made to run on a treadmill the day after waking up. I feel Jim’s pain.

Larissa and Pam continue to be golden. I love their growing ease with each other and how quickly they can gang up on Jim for the greater good - like getting him to cooperate.

Can’t wait for the next one!

Author's Response:

I'm not sure. I'll have to check...

 Thanks! I continue to be concerned Larissa is coming off weird, so this is good to hear.