Penname: warrior4 Real name: Eric
Member Since: May 31, 2018

Bio:

Author of the Month March 2020

I've been writing fanfiction for awhile now. Just recently discovered The Office and figured I'd try my hand at that as well.

At first I thought of having all my stories in the same universe, but then I had some AU ideas. So any stories that occur within a common universe will be in a given series.


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Terra Incognita by Comfect Rated: T [Reviews - 125] 78
Summary: Past Featured Story

NOW COMPLETE! Jim gets in an accident on June 10, and Pam gets to help. Only AU in that it deviates from main timeline between S2 and S3 (no different worldbuilding premise).

Disclaimer: I do not own the Office or its IP.

Challenges Challenge Entry Q2 2018


Categories: Jim and Pam, Alternate Universe
Characters: Helene Beesly, Jan, Jim, Jim/Pam, Larissa Halpert, Other, Pam
Genres: Angst, Fluff, Inner Monologue, Romance, Hurt/Comfort
Warnings: Violence/Injury
Challenges: Hospital JAM, Sister Sister
Series: None
Chapters: 52 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 63095 Read Count: 109519 ePub Downloads: 31
[Report This] Published: May 20, 2018 Updated: July 21, 2018
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 19, 2018 Title: Chapter 51: June 13: After Dinner

I loved the "an entire Chevy Impala to the ribs? Consider it done." Great way to add in a bit of humor that way. It's lovely the way things are wrapping up like this.

Author's Response: Thanks! I quite enjoyed that line.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 18, 2018 Title: Chapter 50: June 13: Dinner

Lots of great fun all around. Pam's fitting in nicely and it's wonderful to see the back and forth they have.

Author's Response: Gracias! I have enjoyed writing these family dynamics, I'm glad they've worked for you.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 17, 2018 Title: Chapter 49: June 13: The Same, Continued

Nice chapter to see some of the Halpert family dynamic. Good to see Jim so well taken care of.

Author's Response: Thanks! Writing four Halperts is hard for me (I expect their senses of humor to be similar, which makes distinguishing them hard) so I appreciate hearing that the dynamic is working for you. Jim has a loving family, I think, so this felt like an important chapter to show that.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 12, 2018 Title: Chapter 47: June 13: Leaving the Relaxation Room

Very fun cute interactions here. More Halperts should also be interesting to see as well.

Author's Response: Thanks! 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 11, 2018 Title: Chapter 46: June 13: Relaxation Room

Good balance between describing conversation and zooming in so we can listen in on conversation. Nice to have Jim, Larissa, and Pam bouncing off each other like that. Good idea on how to keep ex-fiance's out of the picture too. Nicely done.

Author's Response: Thank you. I dislike maudlin Roy and had no intention of writing him, but someone (I think BigTuna?) said they worried the phone was going to be him, and so I very much wanted to dispose of that concern.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 10, 2018 Title: Chapter 45: June 13: Moving Rooms

At first I was going to comment about how I wished the dialoge was written differently, but after reflecting I think it works better that there are only those two lines there at the end of the chapter. After all it's a chaper about introspection and the way this chapter ends with those two lines highlights that.

Nice to see Jim get one step closer to getting out. This whole story has been a lot of fun and it seems to be heading to a very nice way to wrap up. Well done you.

Author's Response: That was the effect I was going for, so I'm glad you found it works for you. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 08, 2018 Title: Chapter 44: June 13: The Note

That was very sweet. I can very easily see that what you've written here was what was written on the Teapot Card. It was interesting to see all of Pam's mental gymnastics leading up to reading it too. It's always interesting to see what's going on in their heads. I wish I had more jellybeans to give, but I'm all jellybean'ed out on this story.

Author's Response: Thanks! I've thought a lot about the card, so I'm really glad my version made sense to you. Thanks for your consistently valuable feedback on this story. 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 07, 2018 Title: Chapter 43: June 13: Simultaneously with the Previous

Aww, the teapot card. I imagine the next chapter is going to be all cute and fluffy. Nothing wrong with that at all. Still being kind of new to the fandom, I don't think I've read any other fics where an author wrote out their version of what the card said. It'll be interesting to see for sure. As always, looking forward what comes next.

Author's Response: I'll admit to cuteness and fluff. There's a lot of fics that do this with the card, though I think most are much older, circa the time the Christmas episode first aired. I recommend checking them out!

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 05, 2018 Title: Chapter 42: June 13: Hallway (ICU)

Very creative solution to an interesting problem. The image of Pam doing a little jig in the hallway was also quite cute to see.

Author's Response: Thanks! I like the image too.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 04, 2018 Title: Chapter 41: June 13: Jim's Room

Aww, very sweet and cute. I like seeing them start to plan their life together like this.

Author's Response: Thanks. I like these two, and they didn't do nearly enough talking in the show about topics like these for my taste (or at least not enough up-front talking, rather than middle, oh-shoot talking).

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: July 03, 2018 Title: Chapter 40: June 13: Jim's Room (ICU)

Good chapter here. I like how you've gotten them to get things in the open like that. It's a great way to see their relationship progress. It's fun to be fluffy and cute, but one of the draws of Jim and Pam was that to me they felt more real than other TV couples. Real couples need to have serious conversations like this and you did well in that regard.

Author's Response: Thanks. I agree that one of the joys of JAM is that they can actually talk about real things as well as banter and fluff. I'm glad you see this conversation moving in that direction.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 30, 2018 Title: Chapter 37: June 12-3: Jim's Room

Ok, so the question still remains, what IS Jim going to do about Stamford? Looking forward to seeing what you have in mind for that one. Also looking forward to the next time Jim and Pam are alone to talk. Not that the time with Larissa isn't fun, it's just that it seems you've got Jim thinking he's going to want more alone time with Pam and those kind of scenes are usually good ones.

Author's Response: I have an idea in mind for how that will be resolved (I have to admit, it's not original, I've seen it in other fics in the archive, but I won't tell which ones just yet). But they will definitely talk about it, even more than they have in the chapter I just posted (which is admittedly short on that particular conversation). Thanks for your feedback, both now and throughout this process.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: June 29, 2018 Title: Chapter 36: June 12: Pam's Chair by Jim's Bed

D'awwww, how cute. Nice to bring back the teapot. It's a great story device.

Author's Response: Thanks! I have a couple more callbacks in mind coming up.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 28, 2018 Title: Chapter 35: June 12: Jim's Head

Nice to see what's going on in his head.

Author's Response: Thanks. Promise we'll get a little more plot next chapter.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: June 29, 2018 Title: Chapter 36: June 12: Pam's Chair by Jim's Bed

D'awwww, how cute. Nice to bring back the teapot. It's a great story device.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: June 11, 2018 Title: Chapter 17: Interlude III: Jim's Head

Just got done reading this. Very imaginative. I really like the interaction Pam has with Larissa. Theses interludes into Jim's head have been fascinating as well. Slowly getting clearer and clearer. I'm really looking forward to seeing what happens when he wakes up.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading. Jim will definitely get to wake up soon, and we'll see how he reacts to the Pam-Larissa thing that's been building.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 12, 2018 Title: Chapter 18: June 11: Waiting Room

A very nice chapter showing the growing friendship with Larissa and Pam. I'm glad to see the next chapter will have Jim waking up. It'll be interesting to say the least to see what his reaction will be. Also it'll be nice to see the plot move along more. As nice as these Pam and Larissa chapters are I think by now we, as a reader, know they're getting on as good friends so it'll be good to see the story progress.

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. I wanted to really hammer home the Larissa-Pam connection before I let Jim wake up so that I could play the three of them off each other now he's up.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 13, 2018 Title: Chapter 19: June 11: An Awakening

You did promise Jim would wake up, and wake up he did. Looking forward to seeing what comes next.

Author's Response: Heh, that was a kind of minimalist chapter, wasn't it? But I really wanted the hi/hey transition out of it. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 13, 2018 Title: Chapter 20: June 11: Continued

Ok, so that was fun. Kind of what I'd expect for reactions. I like that Jim hasn't lost his sense of humor. Lots of very sweet moments. Thanks for the double update.

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm not sure how much this is going to surprise you from this point on, but I hope the treatment of the unsurprising bits is still worth reading. I'll work on that.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: June 14, 2018 Title: Chapter 21: June 11: The Same, Continued

Very cute. I like how Jim is still in a daze about all this. Looking forward to whatever comes next.

Author's Response: Yeah, don't forget he's still recovering from major injuries. The man may not be thinking entirely straight. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 15, 2018 Title: Chapter 22: June 11: Jim's Room without Pam

Cute scene with his sister. I like how easily they play off each other. I'm looking forward to seeing what Jim tells Pam after she comes back in and they discuss the sketch.

Author's Response: Thanks. They will definitely discuss it (though the talk about Pam's mom may take precedence...)

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 16, 2018 Title: Chapter 23: June 11: The Hallway

Good on Pam getting her feelings and thoughts out into the open like that. It's one thing to think about deep thoughts, it's another to verbalize them and hear oneself say them out loud. Looking forward to more as always.

Author's Response: Thanks. I think this version of Pam has had the kind of revelatory experience that makes you find those words.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 26, 2018 Title: Chapter 32: June 12: Cafeteria

*Sigh* Are we going to have one of those,"he was fine when we left and when we come back he's crashed" things? I really hope not. Progress has been good and should keep being good.

Author's Response: Agreed.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 24, 2018 Title: Chapter 29: June 12: By Jim's Bed

Very nice. It's great fun to see how Jim and Pam are progressing through this. I really enjoyed Pam's internal thoughts through this one. They're such a sweet couple.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying to keep up the internal monologues without entirely losing the forward thrust of the plot; this last update has four people's internal monologues to bridge Helene's entrance, but going forward it will probably be more like the one you just commented on here, with one person's at a time. And I'm glad you like my JAM couple.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: June 20, 2018 Title: Chapter 26: June 12: Towards the Hospital

I do like Pam's mom in this chapter. Just kind of steamrolling her way through Pam's objections. Made it fun to read.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying to distinguish how the characters talk a little more, and I think Pam's mom knowing how Pam is and just blowing by her objections seems reasonable as a character choice for her.