Lots of fun seeing everyone from the office bounce off each other in this context. Jim and Pam are still being very adorable.

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Still all very sweet. I was grinning the whole time I was reading it. Can't wait to see where this is going.

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Very sweet. I like how their relationship is just developing naturally. Jim and Dwight as roommates. Oh sweet merciful crap the pranks that Jim and Pam could come up with! That could be a fun angle to explore.

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Short but that's not necessarily a bad thing. As Shakespeare said, "brevity is the soul of wit." While you don't spell things out, there's enough said that one can fill in the gaps. Very nice for a very quick tale.

Author's Response: Thank you <3

I like how this chapter is set up. Jim knows this job took a toll on their marriage once and he can tell it's starting to go down that path again. Good on him for being aware enough this time to realize that. Also great to see that Jim and Pam can still connect quickly like this. Show's they do have a strong relationship.

Author's Response: Thank you for the thoughtful response! I hope you're liking what's up so far. Hopefully I'll have more out soon!

Very nice piece here. I love the way they reconnect and Jim's thoughts in this chapter.

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I like this first chapter. Yes, it's angsty and a little depressing, but it's also right where Pam is at this point. I also like how you've Michael in this chapter. Yes, Michael is boorish and a man-child, but every so often he surprises everyone by actually being a nice guy and you captured that well in this chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks, W4! Glad you appreciated that rare moment in Michael. And your assessment of him as a boorish, man-child most of the time is so accurate.

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I really liked this chapter. You really show Pam starting to get a handle on herself here. The change into the more confident Pam is great to see here. I love all the introspection Pam does. Yes there were good moments with Roy and those deserve to be remembered in some way. There were a lot of great moments with Jim and I liked how you had her keeping those in her mind with the cigar box display stand for the teapot.

It can get hard to show the mental progress someone makes, especially after the turmoil of Casino night but like I said you did it well. Great job, looking forward to more.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks, Warrior! Clearly we know Pam is someone who needs time, so this slow process of growth makes sense to me for her. I appreciate how you notice her need to keep those memories close and accessible (but still maybe a little out of sight) about Jim. Shoo, I'm glad you understand where I was coming from with Roy, too. Ten years is a lot to walk away from, right? There have to be a few things she will miss or reminisce about, even if they aren't enough to make her stay. Thanks so much for being so supportive with your comments.

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I liked this one. Getting a new perspective on some of the Teapot Bonus Gifts as well as other things Jim collects. Getting a glimpse into Jim's mindset was good too. Looking forward to your next update.

Author's Response: Thanks, Warrior! There will be more getting into Jim's head in the next chapter as well. Glad you liked it, and, as always, thanks for the feedback!

Kind of hard to tell how I feel about this one. It's very angsty up until the last couple sentences then all of a sudden it turns around. I get this is Jim's internal thoughts, but it seems a little disjointed.

Not to say it's not an honest peak into Jim's head, because it clearly is and that part you did well.

First the technical part of the review. In general one should start a new paragraph when someone new starts talking. Makes it easier for the read to know when someone new is talking. Likewise there are some grammar issues that can be improved to make it easier for the reader as well. Here's an example from this story.

"Pam" he breathed out, a few more tears falling down his cheeks "my god, Pam. I'm so sorry" he whispered as he let go of her hands so he could wrap her up in a tight hug.

Grammatically correct, to the best of my knowledge, it should be typed thusly. "Pam," he breathed out, a few more tears falling down his cheeks. "My god, Pam. I'm so sorry," he whispered as he let go of her hands so he could wrap her up in a tight hug.

A subtle difference, but it makes it easier to read. A few things that can help in the future is to have someone proofread for you, or there's grammar software you can download to help out as well.

Content, it's a very powerful story. Sexual assault is always a very charged subject. I applaud how you wrote Pam's courage to talk about it as well as Jim's support for her. That's not an easy tone to convey, but you were able to so from how I read your story.

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I loved the digs about the twilight series. Any time someone roasts that thing my heart soars just a little more.

Great detail throughout. Once I warmed up to the idea it was actually quite fun. The Halpert family wolf pack was also quite fun to see too.