Penname: warrior4 Real name: Eric
Member Since: May 31, 2018

Bio:

Author of the Month March 2020

I've been writing fanfiction for awhile now. Just recently discovered The Office and figured I'd try my hand at that as well.

At first I thought of having all my stories in the same universe, but then I had some AU ideas. So any stories that occur within a common universe will be in a given series.


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Summary: “Karen, I don’t even have his phone number. It’s been four years since we last saw each other. When we broke up.” Pam emphasizes this last part as if Karen needs the reminder of her best friend’s personal history. “It’s not like… Look, I’m not going to fall in love with him again.”  
Categories: Jim and Pam, Alternate Universe
Characters: Ensemble, Jim/Pam
Genres: Drama, Fluff, Humor, Inner Monologue, Romance, Travel, Weekend, Workdays
Warnings: Adult language, Mild sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 111518 Read Count: 27950 ePub Downloads: 31
[Report This] Published: November 09, 2018 Updated: July 30, 2023
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: April 07, 2019 Title: Chapter 3: You'll never beat but you'll never break

Wow, so yeah, that was a chapter that made up for the long delay. You're right, this is on the angsty side. The flashback scenes, showing how Jim and Pam were drifting apart was a slow kind of burn. Then the end of the date. Considering everything that happened, yeah it makes sense that Pam would be so hesitant about him.

Jim, come on man, put down the damn phone! Use all those people skills of yours, get over yourself, and pay attention to her.

Hope to see a new update soon.

Author's Response: Thanks for your review, Warrior! Yes, that slow drift apart was kind of painful. I think (*hope*) Jim redeems himself in the next chapter. Crossing fingers it doesn't take me as long between posting chapters. :) Thanks again!

After It Airs by Steph Rated: T [Reviews - 6] 10
Summary: Past Featured StoryWeeks, months, years after it airs, Toby's still feeling the effects of the documentary. And that's even before he's accused of being the Strangler.
Categories: Other, Future
Characters: Toby
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Other Adult Theme
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3669 Read Count: 1308 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: November 11, 2018 Updated: November 11, 2018
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: November 12, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

For all the JAM stories on this site, this was a bit of fresh air actually. Very interesting character analysis. Toby does often get blown over as the office sad sack. To get his perspective is compelling read. I also like how Pam reached out to him. In the show she was usually very nice to him. After all she let him stay in the Finer Things Club and kicked Jim out. Caring soul that she is, it was very nice to see her encourage him like that. Made for a good read.

Summary: Pam and Jim find their strengths after Pam suffers a miscarriage 
Categories: Jim and Pam, Present
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Possible Triggers, Secondary Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2709 Read Count: 1004 ePub Downloads: 0
[Report This] Published: November 19, 2018 Updated: November 19, 2018
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: November 19, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That's an interesting tale. Miscarriages are one of those things that one just doesn't talk about. Yet still a life has been lost and grief is an altogether appropriate reaction. That you don't shy away from it in this tale shows that such grief is a natural reaction. That Jim and Pam turn to each other there at the end is comforting to see and a bittersweet way to end it.

Summary: Past Featured StoryJim brings Pam home for Thanksgiving.
Categories: Jim and Pam
Characters: Jim/Pam, Larissa Halpert
Genres: Fluff, Holiday
Warnings: Adult language, Moderate sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 14854 Read Count: 7513 ePub Downloads: 22
[Report This] Published: November 20, 2018 Updated: December 01, 2018
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: November 21, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Morning

This looks like it's going to be great. I can already tell the Halpert house is going to be a ton of crazy fun. Also well done on Jim for sicking Vanessa on Tom and Pete. As a former trumpet player myself I know full well how much ANY trumpet player loves playing Reveille as loud as they possibly can. Great fun let me tell you.

Betsy Bingo also sounds great. Maybe I'll steal that idea for my in-laws this holiday season.

Just tons of fun all around. Can't wait to see more.

Author's Response: Thanks warrior! The trumpet thing has happened more than once in my family and I’ve gotta say, it never gets old. And in my experience, bingo cards make any situation at least 10 times more fun :)

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: November 23, 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Afternoon

Wow! That was a whole whirlwind of fun. Alcohol consumed, football watched, video games played, and healthy amounts of skullduggery and ne'r-do-welling. The Halperts pranking each other or other people is one thing, but when they all team up together? This could prove to be something truly epic.

Can' wait to see how this all pans out.

Author's Response:

I’m not going to lie, I’m very excited for the direction this story is headed  there was a lot of buildup that pays off in the next chapter and I think you’ll really enjoy it. 

Thanks for the review!  

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: December 02, 2018 Title: Chapter 3: Night

Johnny Walker, at least Johnny Walker Red Label is a decent budget Scotch. I prefer Black label myself, a little more rounded off, but they again I'm also a little biased since last year my wife let me pick out a bottle of whiskey as a Christmas present and Johnny Walker Black was what I decided on. So I'll just head cannon in that they were all drinking that.

Anyway, this was all sorts of good fun. I was kinda thinking Larissa pulling a prank on everyone with a fake breakup. I'm okay with being wrong since that left the Halpert clan to exact what I'm sure was great revenge with all those ping pong balls.

Great to see all the wonderful interactions with everyone. Pam and Jim are on point and wonderfully comfortable with each other. I love this take on his family. Well done you.

Author's Response: LOL, I couldn't make Betsy be a person who drinks Fireball. I just couldn't. Thanks for the compliments on this story and for reading! :) 

Summary: Thanksgiving with the whole Halpert family, all under one roof.
Categories: Jim and Pam, Present
Characters: Cece Halpert, Ensemble, Jim, Jim/Pam, Larissa Halpert, Pam
Genres: Fluff, Holiday, Kids/Family
Warnings: No Warnings Apply
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 7506 Read Count: 2646 ePub Downloads: 1
[Report This] Published: November 23, 2018 Updated: November 26, 2018
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: November 23, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: the trip

Good start to a heartwarming story. Cece acting and Helene drunk calling provided depth to it. I've said before one of the reasons I feel Jim and Pam resonate so well is that it's easy to see them as a real couple. You pulled that off with this chapter. Looking forward to reading more.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: November 26, 2018 Title: Chapter 2: the big meal (and day)

Technical part of the review first. There are some time things should be capitalized, "Bees, " instead of, "bees," for example. Those are names which always get capitalized. Same with Aunt or Uncle. There's a few run on sentences too where you're switching from narration to dialogue.

“Mhmm, very much so,” Pam said sleepily, taking her hand off his side to cover her mouth as she yawned, “want me to get up with you?” is an example.

It might read a bit better thusly. “Mhmm, very much so,” Pam said sleepily, taking her hand off his side to cover her mouth as she yawned. “Want me to get up with you?”

There are some other instances where something like that happens, but that one was short and easy to show as an example. Fixing issues like those is like adding the final polish to a good story. Just get it cleaned up, so the reader can enjoy the story for what it is.

Story and content part of the review now. Regardless of everything I just said, I did enjoy this look into Halpert Thanksgiving. Cece was adorable and Jim and Pam are connecting at their best. Holiday's are some of the best and yet most stressful times of the year and you brought that out. I also liked how you didn't shy away from Pam's family drama. It's 100% believable that something like that would happen and that Jim and Pam would need a walk alone to try and process it. Good on you for adding that.

All in all great job for your first fic. Can't wait to see more.

Summary: Starts during Season 3, Episode 18 (The Negotiation). Pam and Jim are in the break room alone, and Pam’s trying to apologize to Jim for Roy attacking him. Jim is dismissive and goes so far as to say Pam and Roy will probably get back to together. What would have happened if Pam exploded in a fit of anger?
Categories: Jim and Pam, Present, Alternate Universe
Characters: Jim/Pam
Genres: Romance, Steamy, Weekend
Warnings: Explicit sexual content
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 12724 Read Count: 26504 ePub Downloads: 15
[Report This] Published: November 29, 2018 Updated: December 07, 2018
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: November 29, 2018 Title: Chapter 1: Pam Explodes

Wow! So yeah, that's actually quite believable. You did a good job of capturing that. I know it's easy to see Jim and Pam as a sort of perfect couple, but like anyone, no one's perfect. Even after they got together there were still times they were strained. See most of Season 9. Well done with this. Looking forward to seeing where it goes.

Author's Response: Thank you! I really enjoy your stories here so it's very nice to get positive feedback from you.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: November 30, 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Aftershocks

Good introspection chapter here. Nice to know what they're all thinking. Hopefully now that we've cleared all that we can see what will happen next time Jim and Pam see or talk to each other.

I might suggest you upgrade the rating to M, due to adult language. If we're going by movie ratings you currently have this rated G when due to the adult language and forthcoming steam it should probably be rated R, or M here on the site.

Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback, and for the advice about the rating. I'm totally new to this so I appreciate that. I've changed it now so it should be good for the whole story.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: December 01, 2018 Title: Chapter 3: The Dust Settles

A very heartfelt conversation. Great to see them communicating clearly for once. So many things could have been avoided if they'd been this brave in canon. I liked how you brought this about. Bringing back jinx was also a fun call back.

Author's Response: Ugh, canon. They said nothing about anything in canon! Even in re-watching it I can hardly pick up the tiny cues they give. Thank you for your continued encouragement. It's good to hear from you.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: December 02, 2018 Title: Chapter 4: The Smoke Clears

Good to clear the air like this. Get everything set up nicely so there's nothing in the way of a nice date.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: December 04, 2018 Title: Chapter 5: Dinner, At Last

Awww, they're so sweetly awkward around each other. That they have similar trains of thought just shows their connection. Lots of good fun with this one.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: December 05, 2018 Title: Chapter 6: The Do-Over

Very cute way to end this chapter. I like that you had them go back and reclaim the parking lot like that.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: December 05, 2018 Title: Chapter 7: Sunday Morning on Memory Lane

Quick little filler chapter to keep things moving. Hopefully we'll see things heat up next time around.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: December 07, 2018 Title: Chapter 9: Sunday Afternoon Delight Part 2

Very sexy way to end things. They've clearly deeply in love with each other here and its very sweet to see. Excellent writing, very detailed and descriptive. Thanks for sharing this one.

Author's Response: Thank you for the comments. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Summary:

Pam, Dwight and company scramble to uncover what happened to Jim, while Jim engages in mind games with his reluctant but unstable captor in hopes of being found alive. 

WARNING: THIS IS DARK AND EMOTIONAL. CHECK NOTES AT BEGINNING AND END OF CHAPTERS FOR WARNINGS. Mod Note: Graphic Drawing in Chapter 4


Categories: Jim and Pam, Alternate Universe
Characters: None
Genres: Angst, Suspense
Warnings: Adult language, Other Adult Theme, Possible Triggers, Secondary Character Death, Violence/Injury
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 77580 Read Count: 10645 ePub Downloads: 5
[Report This] Published: December 03, 2018 Updated: May 02, 2020
Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: December 07, 2018 Title: Chapter 2: Jagged Little Pills

So yeah that was kind of dark. Also you may want to put in warnings at the beginning of the chapter rather than at the end. By the time I got down to the bottom to read said warnings, I'd already read what I'd been warned about.

Author's Response: Updated summary and notes for chapter two, hope this helps.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: May 02, 2020 Title: Chapter 17: Finale

Good way to wrap this all up. It's been more than a trial to see Jim go through everything he did with this story. At times I thought it was going to linger in unfinished story limbo. Glad you pushed through and finishised it.

Nice to see that time and distance have done a world of good for Jim. That momenet at the start notwithstanding, he seems to be in a much better place. However the real progress is of course after he hears Erin's news.

"I feel like I can breathe again." Yeah, bit weight off his shoulders there. The scars may remain, but the pain that caused them is over.

Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: March 25, 2020 Title: Chapter 16: Transcript: Victim Impact Statements

Very impactful statements from everyone. Basically what I would have expected from all the victims. To have a statement from Gabe's mother was a bit unexpected. However you did write her plea for mercy on behalf of her son well.

Personally if I were on the jury I would vote to convict. Far to many people today try to explain away their actions as "I'm not evil I'm sick." The way you've written this story, no Gabe knew what he was doing and enjoyed parts of it too. At the very least lock him up and throw away the key. Justice though would be the death penalty.

Thanks for the update.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: February 11, 2020 Title: Chapter 15: Unreasonable Doubt/Flight Risks

Very dramatic court scene to be sure. Well done on Jim for holding Gabe's feet to the fire. Also lovely to see the support system that's in place for them all there. Nice to bring back David and have his support too.

I don't blame Jim for not wanting to return to DM. After something like that, makes sense.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: December 28, 2019 Title: Chapter 14: Start the Presses

I thought this one was dead to be honest. I get that life shows up and it gets hard to write though. Nice to see things progressing. Jim looks like he's getting stronger. Mentally and physically. Good on you for keeping up that progress. Hope to see more of Jim's progress with that soon.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: September 16, 2019 Title: Chapter 13: Coping Skills

Feels like a good set up chapter to how things will turn out later. Great to see Pam still by his side. I know they've both been through the wringer, but they're still there with each other. Great to see. I loved Cece snoozing with Jim. That seemed to be such a calming and healing little scene. Very tangible proof that Jim's gotten back to where he belongs and that he has a reason to keep on going. Glad to see an update.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1
Date: June 24, 2019 Title: Chapter 12: Scar Tissue

I think you did a really good job of explaining Jim's state here. It would be foolish to think that even after two months he'd be back to "normal." However there is progress being made. It's not overnight, but it's steady progress nonetheless.

I was starting to wonder if this story had been abandoned. Nice to see an update.

Author's Response: I had pretty much every hurdle possible placed in front of me during the last three months in terms of my academic career and so this work got put on the back burner. I mainly worked on it for "fun" when I needed a break. I'm glad I did it this way because it gave me more time to perfect my narrative. Thanks for sticking around <3

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: March 19, 2019 Title: Chapter 11: Burn It All Down

Everything's still very raw here. I like how you have Michael in this chapter. Every so often he would lose his whole man-boy bluster and actually be a good guy. That he did the same here for Erin was wonderful to envision. I'm sure Jo is in for a whole world of hurt once all those details get out. It'll be interesting to see what she has to say for herself in that regard.

Great scene with Jim and Pam. Just the right amount of tough and tender love on Pam's part. I love that she's the one to get through to him to tell him to not bottle it all up. She may not be feeling like Jim's rock right now, but she's acting like it. Well done.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed
Date: December 10, 2018 Title: Chapter 3: In Plain Sight

Great writing, very descriptive. Good emotional context as well. However I feel like you've got Jim going along a bit to calmly. Speaking as a guy, husband, and father, if I were in this position, kidnapped and left alone for hours on end, I'd be formulating plan after plan to break out. Jim is also a very creative guy and a quick thinker. Yes I know he's been a bit beat up and drugged.

However there were multiple times I could have seen were Jim could have tried something after Gabe got home till he drank his next smoothie after watching the news. Pull the shower curtain off while in the shower and use it to smother Gabe. Kick him in the face while he's going to tape his feel to the stool before dinner. Heck, turn around really quick and kick Gabe as hard as he can in the groin while Gabe is forcing him somewhere.

Like I said Jim had been left alone for hours and didn't think of anything? Seems a bit off to me.

Still the writing is good and the story is compelling and I'm looking forward to seeing how it all turns out.

Author's Response: Don’t worry. The desperation to escape is starting to outweigh his initial strategy of trying to placate and manipulate Gabe.