Reviewer: BlindManCassidy Signed
Date: January 31, 2021
Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28
So. Wow.
Firstly, their phone call was really cute. I mean - he was talking to her for a long time, if she had time to get back to her apartment and everything.
I’m very glad that Jim got into Athlead with Mark. I was a little worried that Mark would be bitter and reject him, but that’s not true to Mark’s character as I’ve come to realize. This is again proven when they all go out for drinks and Mark teases him about Pam - which, he has a point.
I’m glad to see that Jim is so proud of Pam. He wants to show off her art to Mark and her pictures to Tom and his parents (also, where does Tom think she is? Was that a joke I missed?). And he has every reason to be proud of her; she uprooted her life to move to Paris, a foreign country with a language she doesn’t speak, to pursue her dreams. Obviously, that’s a direct parallel to Jim joining Athlead.
And Jim going through old boxes inevitably leads to old memories. I like that you had him acknowledge just how unhappy he’d been with Karen; he would rather do crosswords with Pam than anything else with her. And that scene with Jim finding Pam’s birthday present (also glad to see the callback!) damn near made me tear up. It’s great that they’re together, but it must really suck to see just how many opportunities he’d missed and how much Pam must’ve been hurting.
So, he did what any logical human being would do and flew to Paris to see her. Without telling her, of course. God, what I wouldn’t give for my own Jim(or Pam, for that matter). And he just professed his love and the two of them unanimously decided that they wanted to be together forever. “ He’s here, and they’re finally in the same place, and neither of them are overthinking or backtracking, and there’s nothing standing in their way. And she thinks, as they kiss, that maybe - after all this time - it really can be that simple.”
I really hope that you make an epilogue of some sorts, but I understand if this is where you want to leave it. Regardless, this has been one hell of a ride. I would love to read more of your stories in the future. You’ve earned my respect.
Well done,
BlindManCassidy
Author's Response:
Thank you so much - that’s incredible to hear, and really nice of you to say :) I’m really glad you’ve enjoyed it. I would also love my own Jim or Pam haha. I’m so pleased you liked the final chapter - I had a lot of fun writing the call-back! (And sorry lol, the Tom thing was more me playing off the canon that he’s terrible at pranks/has a weird idea of what would be a funny prank for Pam to play on Jim, so has convinced himself that Paris is a prank too). I am also currently working on an epilogue, I couldn’t quite stop myself…
Thank you again for taking the time to leave reviews throughout this - I’ve really enjoyed reading every one, and it’s been so great to have your feedback :)