Five times Ryan lets Kelly seduce him.
I never really *get* Ryan and Kelly as a couple (I don't think we see enough of them together, especially not lately), so I love this-- the two of them suddenly make sense to me, all because of you!
I love the song-- Old 97s=love.
There's some funky formatting and I'm not sure if it's intentional or not-- but I think the story would read a little more easily if there were line breaks between the dialogue.
I really like the parallel between the water bottle and the tea kettle-- nice touch!
This is beautiful. I hate Conrad, but this piece actually makes me want to try Lord Jim again.
Author's Response: Well, Lord Jim is all about second chances and redemption, so why not give it a shot? :D Thanks for the review!
9 Oh, yay, it came back.
I really like the detail in this one, although I have to admit that my brain came to a screeching halt and almost refused to keep reading when I got to the part about naked Creed ;)
Hee! I have a terrible memory (or maybe I'm also blocking out the vision of naked Creed) but I think more than one other fic has mentioned Creed showing up as a model for Pam's art class! Horrifying and hilarious all at once.
Thanks Pseudonym!
Wow, this is...emotional. I think you have done a really nice job with the background stuff, and I love the characterizations of the kids.
This is a really minor thing, but you might want to pay attention to your verbs-- you switch back and forth between past and present, and it's a little distracting. I think present tense would probably work really well with the tone of this story, and that's probably why you keep slipping into it :)
Thanks. I just got the second chapter up (not sure if you read then also). It is really hard to write it sometimes when its as emotional as it is. But, I enjoy it. Rather cathartic I think sometimes.
The verb thing has always been a troublesome part of mine. I try to catch some, but am ususally very unsucessful. I will probably try to edit it some when I catch them.
Pam spills her secret, but Karen is listening.
Wow. I feel so duped. Fantastic twist :)
Author's Response: Thank you! Sorry for the duping, but I love being sneaky! :)
I'm laughing so hard I can barely type.
I really like this! I love when people get inside Dwight's head, even if it is kind of a scary place to be.
Author's Response: Thanks! And yeah, it is a scary place, and yet I keep going back.
Another story telling the aftermath of "Cocktails".
I actually love this as a one-shot. Well done!
Three years have passed since Pam left Scranton for New York, and Jim is still very much on her mind. Will a work-related trip to Rome, Italy be the catalyst that reunites Pam with Jim once and for all?
I really, really like where this story is going.
One tiny thing: Why do you italicize the names of the companies? That's really distracting to me for some reason.
Can't wait for your next update :)
I was trying to respond to your response, but I can't figure out a way to do that. :(
As far as I know, there are no style guides that advise italicizing company names. Italics are generally reserved for major creative works (such as books, newspapers, movies, etc.) and for emphasis. I hate to sound nit-picky because this ultimately isn't that important, but I'm an English prof and it's important to me that people know these things. :)
Again, I really like this story so far!
Thanks Pseudonym for letting me know. I hadn't realized. I do appreciate the feedback though. Thanks so much and I'm glad you're enjoying it. :)
Poor Stanley. Here's hoping he has a few extra books of crossword puzzles to do while he waits for AAA....
Author's Response:
Of course! I was thinking he'd change the tire, but he'd just wait for triple A! I wonder if Terri does crossword puzzles also, or if she's sort of a crossword-puzzle widow? Hmm.
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
I really like it so far (especially the adorable Gilmore Girls reference there at the beginning). I'd love to see where this is going.