Date: January 16, 2008 06:42 pm Title: Epilogue
Just wanted you to know that I thought this story was wonderful! Each chapter was absolutely beautiful, and I have to say that the first one was my favorite. Such a nice touch to have their first kisses be with each other. Wonderful! I don't normally enjoy Jim/Pam fics too much, but I loved this one. Excellent writing.
Date: August 02, 2007 09:36 pm Title: Epilogue
That was adorable! I loved that Jim and Pam's first kiss's were together. And I love that Jim's mom knew they had kissed before they had know. Great job!!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! It's so fun to get a review for a story that I thought everyone had forgotten about. To be honest, this is probably my favorite story out of all the ones I've written, so I'm really glad that you liked it too! Thanks again for the review, pinkiepie!
Date: May 19, 2007 05:49 am Title: Epilogue
HA! what a great ending!
So I just read the whole thing and I'll combine all my thoughts right here, if that's okay.
I love five things fics, especially ones that go backwards and forwards like this one does. And the first chapter about them meeting at the fair was just great. Truth be told, it reminds me of a five things fic I wrote along the same lines. (Does it totally sound like I'm bragging to reference one of my stories after reading yours? :) ) Anyway, i loved the recapping of The Dundies and Casino Night, but with more insight than we were allowed to see on the show itself.
And, like I said, this was the perfect way to end this story, tying it back to the first chapter. Bravo!
Author's Response: Totally does not sound like bragging, but it does make me want to go check yours out. Anyway, I'm so glad you liked this! Thanks for the review.
Date: April 14, 2007 10:47 am Title: Epilogue
The internal CN kiss monolougue is one of the better descriptions of wahat Pam must have been feeling that I've seen - kudos!
The whole thing is great, but that really stuck out to me!
Author's Response: I actually wrote that one last because I was nervous about getting it right, so I'm glad you thought it was good. Thanks for the review!
Date: April 13, 2007 08:52 am Title: Epilogue
Aw, this was really sweet :) I love how each of them was a first in its own way. And I love that they realized in the end about the first one! Totally fate.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it because I really had fun writing this one.
Date: April 12, 2007 09:46 pm Title: Epilogue
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww. That was so good I can't stand it. So utterly sweet. What a perfect first-kiss story for them!
Author's Response: Thanks! And isn't it just like them to have several "first" kisses? They never do anything the normal way. Of course, that's probably because they're fictional characters on a tv show... I keep forgetting that minor detail.
Date: April 12, 2007 07:57 pm Title: Epilogue
Why am I getting choked up over this? I loved that he was her first kiss. Loved. It. You write stories even better than you beta!
Author's Response: You got choked up? Aw, that's so cute! Sorry. But I love hearing that something I wrote resonated with someone. Thanks for the review! And I'll totally beta for you anytime.
Date: April 12, 2007 07:19 pm Title: Three xxx
"You don't marry someone you don't love and you don't love someone when you're marrying someone else."
Thank you. I liked that line too. ;)
Date: April 12, 2007 04:15 pm Title: Epilogue
Really lovely - sweet and funny and hot and poignant in all the right places. I like the way you came full circle from the first section to the epilogue, by calling back to that teenage kiss...made it almost seem fated. Very romantic.
Author's Response: Thank you! That's quite a compliment. I'm glad you liked it.
Date: April 12, 2007 04:13 pm Title: Epilogue
Oh, that's fantastic. They figured it out! I love that.
I also like Jim's immediate "crap, I don't want to hear about Roy" knee-jerk reaction! And the "stunned glances" - amazing.
I'm not sure what Pam's "So you...?" means. I assume "That was...?" means "That was you?", but I can't fill in the words after "So you...?" Maybe "So you told your whole family about your first kiss?", but I don't know for sure.
I'm going to go back and read the first chapter again. Now the 1st and the 6th are my favorites!
Author's Response: Actually in my head, they're both sort of the same question. Something like "So you were the boy on the roller coaster?" and then "That was you?" But I kind of like your version too. Sorry for the confusion. Thanks for reviewing Kev! ;)
Date: April 12, 2007 04:01 pm Title: Five xxxxx
Hurray! The whole paragraph about the "rough patches in their relationship" is really good. I like how she's caught daydreaming and "Jim's half-smothered, mocking smile". ("Daydreaming, Beasley, on our wedding day? Really?")
I didn't realize there'd be one more chapter. Hmm. (Hopes it's not a deathbed scene; goes to check.)
Author's Response: Nope. No deaths here. Just sweet Jammy goodness. Thanks for the review!
Date: April 12, 2007 03:37 pm Title: Four xxxx
With this one, I wonder what went before - why weren't they together when he broke up with Karen? Why was he waiting? Had he expressed interest again and she said something to make him think she needed time?
Other than that one confusion, of course I liked this! My favorite part was "he reached around to cradle her whole body up against him"! So sweet and wonderful. And I like the mention of how they're actually free to do this.
(For prior chapter review: Oh, that's what he could have said on Casino Night... "Do you need some time to think about things?")
One more...could it be a wedding kiss? (Goes to see.)
I thought about putting in all that before stuff, but then I decided to just go with what came out, so that's what you got.
And you're either a very good guesser or this ending was very predictable. ;) But don't forget the epilogue! Technically you have two to go.
Date: April 12, 2007 03:16 pm Title: Three xxx
Wow. What Pam was saying internally to Jim was so great. If only she had said a few of those things...
I've always thought when Jim said "You're really gonna marry him?" that he could have said almost anything and she would have said yes. Like "Will you think about this? Can you give me a chance?"
Author's Response: Hm... yeah. I think you're right. Too bad he didn't say something else.
Date: April 12, 2007 02:32 pm Title: One x
Oh, I really like this! She would remember that green-eyed boy later, but not enough to know that it was her Jim!! And she wasn't dating Roy yet, so... not cheating in any way.
Author's Response: Yes, it was important to me that she wasn't cheating with this one.
Date: April 12, 2007 01:18 pm Title: Epilogue
OK that was pretty much perfect. I've had a sucky day but you've made it much better. So thank you!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you for letting me know that. I'm sorry your day was sucky, but very glad I was able to help. ;)
Date: April 12, 2007 11:10 am Title: Epilogue
I love it that his whole family knows about that kiss. A family legend in the making. :)
I enjoyed all of these. Sweet, hot, short, well done. Brava.
I figured Jim's family would pry it out of him. Or he'd tell his mom and word would spread.
Anyways, thanks for all the reviews! I'm so glad you liked it. :)