Date: August 18, 2007 01:07 pm Title: If the hell that is Dunder Mifflin hadn't intervened...
I agree, in some ways the non-date'-date seems to fit them. I'm still loving the star-gazing on the ceiling idea -- especially since there is a huge storm and the lights are out!
Author's Response: I know! I wish I'd thought of it when I was like sixteen and had stars on my ceiling ;-)
9 [Report This]Date: August 18, 2007 11:14 am Title: If the hell that is Dunder Mifflin hadn't intervened...
Yeah! So love this, but you know that. And yeah, what's up with people liking Manilow? It's all about Neil Diamond.
Author's Response: LOL yeah Neil Diamond!! Hope you liked the changes ;-) Thanks so much!!!
Date: August 18, 2007 10:43 am Title: If the hell that is Dunder Mifflin hadn't intervened...
This was a really nice nervous conversation. It really felt like Jim and Pam, and especially Jim and Pam at a time when they don't feel comfortable, but are working to become more so. Nice work.
Author's Response: thanks ;-) This story is all about the nervousness, apparently. lol
Date: August 18, 2007 09:19 am Title: If the hell that is Dunder Mifflin hadn't intervened...
As always, so well done. I loved that them coming clean to each other was slightly awkward but that it gave them both that sense of calm that I bet they've been lacking for a long time. And this line was so, so good:
But this was new, they were older and she was being more honest and he was being less desperate and he was trying so hard to just tell her things without pausing to feel the knife slip into his back.
Author's Response:
thanks! I'm so glad you liked it, and yeah I mean how could it not be awkward realistically? I think this story is a little bit accidentally about their awkwardness just in general lol.
Date: August 18, 2007 09:11 am Title: If the hell that is Dunder Mifflin hadn't intervened...
This is really great. I love how you are true to the fact that they have issues to work through still, yet show how strong their feelings and connection are.
I also love how swiftly they go from serious to light-hearted back to serious. It's just so Jam. Great story, and I think this is my favorite chapter. (So far!)
Author's Response:
aw thanks!! I think this is my favorite chapter so far too ;-) Jim's just so cute.
10 [Report This]Date: August 17, 2007 09:21 pm Title: No apologies.
This is so well done, not that I'm surprised, I've read other things you've written, but nevertheless. You write the in-between with them so well and knowingly. I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: thank you! such a nice review! I'm finishing up the next chapter right now, and it should be up before the weekend's over. Keep your eyes peeled ;-)
10 [Report This]Date: August 16, 2007 09:13 am Title: No apologies.
Wow... i LOVE this story more than words... haha.. ok, really bad attempt at a joke there. i'm tired. but seriously, i love, love, love this whole scrabble idea, and fancy new beesely, and your way with words, and verbally constipated jim.
Author's Response:
haha cute ;-) Thank you so much! Keep reading and let me know what you think of the rest!
Date: August 15, 2007 08:31 am Title: No apologies.
Awww, lay beneath the stars together. It's so beautiful and perfect and them. I love how you're bringing them together slowly (well, except for the make-out session, you know what I mean).
Author's Response: lol I def know what you mean ;-) thanks for reviewing.
Date: August 13, 2007 01:48 pm Title: No apologies.
I just love it when Pam takes charge. Nice work here. Loving this! Makes me want to play Scrabble with a cute boy. :)
Author's Response:
lol Jim Halpert, in particular.
Date: August 13, 2007 11:55 am Title: No apologies.
Just lovely. You are so good at descibing situations I can totally see them in - and their respective insecurities in the most poetic of ways. Really well done. Thanks so much for sharing. Please hurry with more.
Author's Response: thanks so much for reading! I'll try to get an update out soon
Date: August 13, 2007 10:39 am Title: No apologies.
you are amazing. So much love for this chapter.
Author's Response: thanks ;-)
10 [Report This]Date: August 13, 2007 10:37 am Title: No apologies.
Pam would kill me in Scrabble.
This has become one of my all time favorite Pam characterizations. Storng willed and not-so neurotic Pam rocks. Keep up the great work.
Author's Response: woo hoo, how about that?! thanks for the review, you're the best!
Date: August 12, 2007 10:36 pm Title: No apologies.
This is just...perfection. I hope you know that. Seriously from word 1 to the very last...perfection. I adore that she just went for it. I also adore that Jim put the breaks on (and lost man tallies in the process - rofl). What I adored the most was Jim saying that he liked new Pam but also loved the original Pam. This just GREAT stuff. i can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: aw thank you. your reviews rock and make me like this story a little more than I have been. hopefully I'll have a new chapter soon.
Date: August 12, 2007 10:22 pm Title: To each his own
Absolutely loving this. I have tried to compare that yogurt lid note to something and you finally nailed what had been on the edge of my mind...cute notes of encouragement from my mom...::sigh:: not that this is about me - sorry - I just love this story you've created here. I also loved the thought Jim had about how they were on the verge of something but it was so THEM to laugh it off or play scrabble.
Also your dialogue is spot on!
Author's Response: Yay! Thank you! I always wonder if the things Jim and Pam say in my stories sound as much like them to other people as they do in my head. Also, glad I could pinpoint the yogurt lid note for you. I think it's a rule of reviewing to make it a little bit about yourself, no? I always do...is that wrong of me? lol ;-)
Date: August 12, 2007 08:30 pm Title: No apologies.
Not "maybe". DEFINITELY MORE!! Please.
Author's Response: haha ok! thank you.
10 [Report This]Date: August 12, 2007 08:25 pm Title: No apologies.
Oh, such a delicious chater. And sweet, too.
I love this because it's SO Jim: “I’m not really sure that was what…oh wait…yes. Yes you did,”
And I love this: he liked the original side of her, too. He liked the way that she blushed and the way that she was sometimes afraid to speak the thoughts that she was so obviously having. The way she wore pink and the way that she ate popcorn one kernel at a time. The way she was adorably Pam.
And of course, I love all the kissy parts.
Author's Response: who doesn't love that? ;-) Thanks for reviewing!!!
Date: August 12, 2007 08:08 pm Title: No apologies.
W-A-N-T
I WANT your next chapter up soon, ok?
Author's Response: ok.
9 [Report This]Date: August 12, 2007 07:34 pm Title: An opportune moment
I enjoyed this so much. Just perfect--very sexy but not over-the-top. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: thank you glad you liked it!
8 [Report This]Date: August 12, 2007 07:26 pm Title: To each his own
"And he and Pam had a habit of calling all of their overtures jokes…and turning all of their feelings into pranks…and making everything a laughing matter because laughing was just easier than dealing." Awesome, and very honest, thought.
Author's Response: thanks
Date: August 12, 2007 06:47 pm Title: No apologies.
Freaking adorable. And who can blame Pam for trying to jump Jim. He's freaking adorable too!
Love the ceiling stars, too!
Author's Response: thanks ;-) ugh I know I'd be all over that boy like white on rice. I'm just saying.
Date: August 03, 2007 02:39 am Title: To each his own
*g* This is adorable. I love the part about the notes. My mom used to leave them in my lunchbox when I was in kindergarten.
I love the awkwardness, and Jim in plaid pajama pants, and Pam making him play Scrabble. I love Scrabble. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: happy you're liking it. My mom used to leave me notes too ;-)
7 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2007 08:22 pm Title: Since you're here, and since the power's out...
"She blew out the match and looked up at him, and he was smiling down at her, amused and endeared and a little bit embarrassed at how what she’d just said made it seem like he was really really transparent…not that he didn’t already know that…" Loved this line. Glad to see that Pam basically said, let's move beyond the awkwarness and be honest with each other.
Author's Response: thank you.
Date: August 02, 2007 06:07 pm Title: To each his own
oh my god I am so in love with you. Most of the after the "job" ep fics are all with jim saying "I didn't take it because of you" and i Feel thats just so unrealistic cause it is kind of like awkward and embarrassing. Anyway the way you use both these characters and their dialog has just got me grinning like a fool. update soon!
Author's Response: lol thank you I'm glad you're grinning!!!! And yeah, hopefully there'll be a new chapter within a few days.
Date: August 02, 2007 02:52 pm Title: To each his own
“Cat?” she read. He checked the letters to make sure he hadn’t misspelled it.
Haha, loved this line. I would do that, for sure.
I really want to play Scrabble now...and kick my friends' ass! Yeah for word nerds :)
Author's Response: lol I know! Yeah for word nerds indeed
Date: August 02, 2007 02:39 pm Title: To each his own
Catechism!? Excellent word, Pam!
I wonder if Pam has any wine in the kitchen... that might help the nerves... Or it could be more fun to watch them squirm.
Loving this. Nice work.
Author's Response: lol thanks. Yeah alcohol is definitely going to appear...but not too much. Don't want the drunk card to give anybody an out ;-) I always enjoy the squirming a little too much I think.