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Reviewer: PrettyBlueDress Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: December 25, 2007 05:23 pm Title: Chapter 1

Beautiful and sad!

Reviewer: I_Still_Believe Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 14, 2007 03:24 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh, this story is beautiful and heartbreaking! Well done!

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: August 30, 2007 09:16 pm Title: Chapter 1

I loved this part - "Your faces are so close that she looks like a cyclops, but you don't care, because you're still looking into each other's eyes like that, and holding each other tight, and your breathing is labored, and she keeps letting out shaky sighs."  Such a sweet and romantic line with a touch of humor (cyclops).  And I loved the title.

Reviewer: mess of jess Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: August 25, 2007 04:33 am Title: Chapter 1

Ugh. I loved this. So sad, but completely true. I think this is a really good example of what could have happened after that episode had Pam stayed, because of course she wouldn't have cheated on Roy at that point. This is great. I loved it :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much! :o)

Reviewer: Cousin Mose Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24, 2007 08:28 pm Title: Chapter 1

Whoa.... um...yeah. ::thud::

1. Go make sure you don't have any other "hidden" documents.

2. Now.

3. Do it right now.

4. Go on, I'll wait here.

Brain broken. Your fault. Mose no can make pretty wurds now. Him talk like funi cat piktures! :)



Author's Response: Hahahahee!! That was the best review everrr. Thank you! Heee. I think I'm going to quote you in my instant messager profile. cuz this was awesome. Especially that last line.
Thank you again!!

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24, 2007 05:57 am Title: Chapter 1

That could  have totally happened. 
Great idea.



Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Beeswax Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24, 2007 05:10 am Title: Chapter 1

That was beautiful.  I loved this:

 You both lie there, gazing into each other's eyes. You'd always been amazed at the depth of connection you felt whenever you met her eyes directly, though it had never lasted long. But now, it's as if you're daring each other to keep the connection, and the longer you do, the deeper you fall for her.

Great story, thanks!



Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Reviewer: bitterpill Signed [Report This]
Date: August 23, 2007 07:15 pm Title: Chapter 1

I love fics surrounding this episode.  So much to run with!  You captured the voices so well and the emotions are just spot on.  Wonderful work!!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: August 23, 2007 06:49 pm Title: Chapter 1

A very impressive 31 stories! Awesome! And Email Survellience, an amazing episode, so yay!

Totally minor thing - that I just learned a few days ago - Dwight and Angela were making out in a dollhouse (left over by the people that Jim was renting from), it was in one of the casts myspace or something. But shed is easier and requires less explaination.

Two small minor things also - at one point you say Beesley instead of Beesly, and when Pam says Finally after Dwight leaves, you need a " before it. Just small things.

I always wanted glow in the dark stars on my ceiling. ALWAYS. I so want to go out and buy some...

This was so perfect, and so sad.... and it just makes me love that episode even more in a way. Because I love it so much, and its like.... gah those two. Both of them so heartbroken.



Author's Response: Thanks for the detailed review! I think I spell Pam's last name different in every story I write, because I've seen it spelled two different ways on the show. And thanks for pointing out the missing quotes.
You definitely have to get glow in the dark stars for your ceiling! I got some a long time ago, and I love them.

Reviewer: Azlin Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: August 23, 2007 06:01 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is so, so, so, so, soooo good! I loved it! Are you sure you don't have a few more stories just sitting around in your google docs, waiting to be shared with the rest of us, because I think you'd better check just in case. ;)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! :o) I actually have a half-finished story from about 6 or 8 months ago in Google Docs which I was actually going to work on today, and then I happened to find this one. I remember working on this like two months or so ago, and then I don't think I was happy with the angstiness of it at the time, so I didn't post it, and then I forgot about it. And then when I read it today, I really liked the way it ended. Anything less angsty in this situation would have been out of character for that point in their relationship.

Reviewer: Wendy Blue Signed [Report This]
Date: August 23, 2007 03:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

Umm.  Wow.  Thanks for breaking my brain.

The tension here was amazing.  And really really hot.  So good job with that one :)



Author's Response: Oh wow, thanks so much!

Reviewer: GreenFish Signed [Report This]
Date: August 23, 2007 03:22 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh my God, her reaction was perfect.  Obviously, we're of like minds, thinking about the possibilities of what could have happened during E-Mail Surveillance!  I like that your story took this turn and how she reacted when he kissed her... I'm glad you posted this!

Author's Response: Oh, thanks so much! :oD

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