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I enjoyed Jim's tension being extended beyond the Money episodes, because what he disclosed to Dwight was serious. Insomnia, loss of concentration, profound depression to the point of losing awareness of simple necessities. As Michael correctly said in The Secret, "Look, Jim needed a relaxing lunch. He has been depressed." Jim was an easygoing, pleasant and largely unmotivated man. For him to lose it as much had he did really demonstrates the level of pain he was suffering inside. That kind of pain doesn't just disappear. He spent three years pining for Pam, and by the time of the Money episodes, he had only been dating her for several months. Of course, bringing up the past would signal a return of those dark days. Nice job. Only advice I would give is to separate out Pam's reaction from Jim's dialogue, so that the prose reads smoother. Other than that, I enjoyed this.

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Stablergirl, because I like your recent stuff so much, I'm going back to read some of your past stories (I really haven't read THAT much fic yet . . . I swear) and I LOVED, LOVED, LOVED this. When Jim came out of that stairwell I could see all this brewing beneath his lovely surface. And when he kissed her in Money, I was actually surprised. So I really liked how this played out. Because I love the beauty of words, here are a few specifics (of many) that I liked:

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Wow. This was so heartbreakingly sad that it truly brought tears to my eyes. Very nicely done. I liked how you tied the butterfly pendant in with her feelings.

Author's Response:

thank you so much.  Yeah I always like a little bit of a metaphor ;-)  And I wanted to do something other than the butterfly emerging from the cocoon business, so I gave butterflies in the stomach a try.  Glad it worked and you liked it!!!! Thanks for the review.

I loved this! I've felt the same thing about these opening episodes and especially the last one. It didn't surprise me in the slightest that Jim is still in love with Pam and this is it for him. I'm still waiting to see on-screen Pam make a big gesture and show that she's "all in" too. Great story!

Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah I think we're all waiting for that big gesture.  I want to see it so badly!!!!!! Anyway, thanks for reading and reviewing, I'm glad you're with me on this one ;-)

Ooh, Jim angst!  This was the scene I was waiting for in the ep, to be honest, and I was so relieved when the writers just kept it light.  Darkness is for fanfic.  I quite like this, although Pam's last lines ring pretty hollow.  What was the significance of the butterfly necklace, by the way?  I think I missed that.

 Anyway, good job.  Sad Jim makes me bizarrely happy (not in season 3, please, though!)

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This was beyond beautiful. I'm literally speechless. Crying, but speechless.


Author's Response: Aw thank you.  I'm glad you liked it!

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Wow, that was really good. 'Cause I think Jim may end up expressing something like this on the show. Pam has gotten brave... but has she gotten brave enough to tell him what she really feels? Really nice story.

Author's Response: I hope she's brave enough, but I have a feeling we're going to get some tension back in our lives...  Maybe not, you never know ;-)  Anyway, thank you so much for the review!!!  I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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i have to say that the x-files reference at the beginning got me way too excited about the possibility of mulder-esq angst! and the story did not disapoint! i loved this! i mean, i love fluff as much as the next person, but total angst, whew, i can't even explain! ok, i'll stop rambling now. you're amazing, this story was amazing, angst is amazing. thanks for sharing!

Author's Response: lol yeah XF!!  I feel like I can't even help putting a little Mulder into everything I do ;-)  Glad you liked the story and the angst!! And ramble anytime, I loved this review.