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Reviewer: Bellascura Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: March 03, 2009 12:19 pm Title: Chapter 1

that. was. amazing.

I just love them together.

you are fantastic. thank you so much for this!

Author's Response: Thank you! I love the two of them together too and am working on a sequel to this story right now.

Reviewer: schrutebucks Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: May 23, 2008 06:29 pm Title: Chapter 1

I've always been a diehard Ryan/Kelly fan, but this story was so sweet! I really loathed Toby for most of Season 4, so seeing another (not-Pam-loving) side to him was nice. I could totally see this happening. Nice work!

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2008 05:32 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh, this is so nice!  I like the progression of it all, and how this particular relationship is maturing Kelly -- but not too much! ;)

Good job! 



Author's Response: Thank you! I think just as being around Kelly would cheer Toby up, I think being around Toby would mature her a little. I love writing those too. But yeah - I couldn't mature her too much. Otherwise she wouldn't be Kelly.

Reviewer: dstny2689 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2008 10:29 am Title: Chapter 1

I don't comment often on stories...next to never. This is the best story I have ever read on this site.  You are a fantastic writer and capture emotion so well. 

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: wallflower Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2008 10:17 am Title: Chapter 1

Seriously. I just re-read this. This is awesome.

Reviewer: wallflower Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 20, 2008 11:04 am Title: Chapter 1

I love Toby! I absolutely lovedddd What The Kids Were Watching, I'm so glad you wrote this all about Kelly and Toby! Seriously, I never would have even thought of them, and nowwww... I really wish Toby had a Kelly.
I love that they were both so true to their characters, I LOVE you writing from Kelly's POV, it is so freakin perfect and spot on, like "She didn't know why exactly. He was lots older than her. And while he wasn't bad looking or anything, he certainly wasn't gorgeous. And he wasn't fun or anything."
I love that just by being surrounded by her and happy things and frivolity, he just improved. And I like that Jim and Pam were understanding but that Toby was still ashamed of himself. I love that he couldn't understand why she would want to date him when he is so broken and she's so young and happy, but she's just firm and honest and determined.
So freaking awesome. You have identified the characters' inner voices so well - just perfect.

Author's Response: Oh man. Thank you for such a nice review. I'm sure it's obvious by now but I really ship (shipped?) those two and I think those two could have really been good for each other. I love writing Kelly's pov - just getting in touch with my inner 15 year old. I'd like to think Jim and Pam would be understanding about Toby's behavior if they knew it was a deeper problem.

Reviewer: Alex Wert Signed [Report This]
Date: May 20, 2008 10:28 am Title: Chapter 1

Now I want to watch the Naked Gun and go on a bit of a Leslie Nielsen bender.  Thanks.

Also, good fic.



Author's Response: Thank you! Yep, if Naked Gun/Airplane/Hot Shots won't cheer you up, I don't know what will.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: May 20, 2008 10:23 am Title: Chapter 1

Steph, yet another solid fic from a unique perspective. 

Yellow was a happy color, but she looked horrible in yellow and if she wore yellow then no one would be happy. Instead she wore pink and a wide, happy smile as she opened the door to his room.  Very sweet and very Kelly. 

You made me believe that these two could actually be a happy couple.  Great job.



Author's Response: Thank you! I think they could have been a happy couple too. I still wish the writers had gone in this direction rather than his crush on Pam, but oh well.

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