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Reviewer: Dwangie Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: July 21, 2009 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 1

Very nice! Wow! Deep and passionate.
Great work!

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 21, 2009 12:11 pm Title: Chapter 1

So simple and so sweet. This is just an honest description of being in love, newly, truly, fully in love. I love the cadence throughout, and especially this line:

I know I’ve always said that this, the art thing, is my dream, but can I tell you another secret? I think my dream has really always just been you.

It's just simple and true.

(Tiny nitpick- "our throats were dry and a little soar..." I think you mean "sore.")

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2009 07:01 am Title: Chapter 1

Gloriously romantic, unfold.  I think you should give your brain free reign more often.  The paragraph about their first night together was particulary swoony :)

Reviewer: jazzfan Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2009 06:34 am Title: Chapter 1

I especially liked your description of their first night together.

Reviewer: Mr Bill Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2009 06:19 am Title: Chapter 1

Beautiful...and oh so romantic!

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2009 10:37 pm Title: Chapter 1

Good Golly Miss Molly.  That was terribly romantic.  Can you IMAGINE Jim's reaction to such a letter.  Guh! Uh, gorgeous writing here. I loved it.

Reviewer: JHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2009 07:41 pm Title: Chapter 1

this was beautiful! gosh so nice, loved it

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2009 07:32 pm Title: Chapter 1

What a beautiful love letter. So very sweet with a couple dashes of hot thrown in!

It's been a while since we've seen anything from you. Hopefully you'll be letting your brain write more...soon.

Reviewer: Sarah42 Signed 7 [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2009 06:51 pm Title: Chapter 1

Really sweet. I love stories about Pam's time in NY.

Reviewer: naomi_dylan Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2009 06:38 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is just lovely.  I think my favorite line is "I want to box up my entire heart and mail it off to you."  I love to read letters and this worked really well!

Reviewer: callisto Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2009 05:18 pm Title: Chapter 1

This was gorgeous. I love how specific her memories are, the everyday things like flossing and scratching (nice), her continual running 'does this make any sense?' The last memory of their first night together was beautiful and vivid. Lovely. :)

Reviewer: nandance Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2009 05:08 pm Title: Chapter 1

Really, really beautiful. I hope you do more of writing whatever comes to you because this just left me completely awestruck!

Reviewer: Liv Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2009 04:52 pm Title: Chapter 1

I know I’ve always said that this, the art thing, is my dream, but can I tell you another secret? I think my dream has really always just been you.

Lovely.

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