Date: November 09, 2009 10:36 am Title: Chapter 1
Untold: Great job! I really liked this passage: “You’re mine,” she says with disbelief in her voice. Your misbehaving mouth is smiling again and her fingertip has found that dimple in the left corner. She kisses you soundly, “My life, my family.”
Date: November 02, 2009 05:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
*sigh*
I can almost smell the saltwater. Very beautiful.
10 [Report This]Date: November 02, 2009 07:06 am Title: Chapter 1
Gorgeous and so very joyful. Fantastic, as always, unfold.
Date: November 01, 2009 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Sweet and fun! Loved it!
Date: November 01, 2009 07:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
*melts into a puddle of bioluminescent goo*
This is what we needed from a week without Pam & Jim. Nicely done.
10 [Report This]Date: November 01, 2009 07:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wonderful, and so so so sweet! 'my life, my family' is absolutely perfect!
Date: November 01, 2009 02:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great job. I could easily picture the two of them in that setting, just enjoying being together in their first days as husband and wife. Not much needs to be said. Thanks for this little bit of honeymoon fluff.
10 [Report This]Date: November 01, 2009 12:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
“My life, my family.”
ARE YOU TRYING TO KILL ME WOMAN?
That was freaking beautiful, guh! I love how she is just so amazed to be with him!
8 [Report This]Date: November 01, 2009 12:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
really beautiful, and I could see it perfectly. I loved it
Date: November 01, 2009 11:41 am Title: Chapter 1
This captures the magic I've imagined from that tiny snippet about them night swimming...and more.
This: She breathes; you breathe. So simple, and my goodness, there IT is. And then this: She kicks away again, your laughing bride, leaving a glowing trail for you to follow. That image is pure hope and gorgeous joy. Just so. Good to see you around ;-)
10 [Report This]Date: November 01, 2009 10:40 am Title: Chapter 1
oh my goodness, that was incredible! this is so, i don't know, dreamy? magical? romantic? i'm not sure - probably a mix of a lot of those and a whole bunch more, but whatever it was, this story was perfect. great job, unfold! this was amazing! you definitely captured the honeymooner phase perfectly, this was incredible!
Date: November 01, 2009 09:59 am Title: Chapter 1
Cute, cute, cute. :)