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Reviewer: FlonkertonChamp Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 14, 2010 12:43 pm Title: Chapter 1

huh. it seems as if in my review, instead of posting the entire thing, it only posted the first sentence. twice. wtf?

anyway, i LOVE that line. it's so true... that's what i love about the first 2 years of a child's life... every day they discover something new.

also loved the line "...A love so profound it transcended all forms of contraception."

Reviewer: Katie J Signed [Report This]
Date: May 09, 2010 07:00 pm Title: Chapter 1

Cecelia loves Pam. It’s fascinating how her face lights up at the sight of momma. She got that from me. Guh - Jim. How did he get to be so awesome?

Author's Response: I know... I'm very much enamored by this fictitious couple...Yup, I'm a dork. But they are awesome, aren't they? Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: floppyhair Signed [Report This]
Date: May 09, 2010 05:18 pm Title: Chapter 1

Amazing, as always! Just wondering, this exchange:
She pulled back, biting her bottom lip, looking sheepishly at me and said, “I saw the note you made for the travel agency.”
I had burned that note. “How?"
“I saw the impression on the sheet below the one you wrote on.”

seems very familiar? Did you get that from something, or am I just going crazy? Thanks for the enjoyable read!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading! Aaand you are not going crazy at all!! the idea behind that little scene you mentioned above is from "Time Traveler's wife." I don't really remember what were the circumstances, but the guy, Henry, was hiding something from Claire and he burned a note, but she found out form the impression on the sheet below. Great book, uh? Once again thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: yanana Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2010 10:03 pm Title: Chapter 1

I loved the image of Cecelia holding the sand. You do great characterizations of this little family.

Author's Response: Thanks you very much, and so thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Vampiric Blood Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2010 02:48 pm Title: Chapter 1

I love the scene where Pam gets to meet "Mr. Pacific."  Just lovely.

Thanks for joining in on the fun and adding your story!



Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it! I loved participating in the fun! Birthdays are always great!

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2010 07:48 am Title: Chapter 1

The image of this little family enjoying sunset at the beach is nothing short of enchanting, Dedeen.  Meanwhile, I bend down and lower Cecelia’s tiny feet in the water. She recoils at first and grasps tightly to my shirt. But when I sprinkle her with water, she immediately recognizes our bathtub game and squeezes her eyes shut. I blow a raspberry on her cheek and her response is filled with merriment and music. I hold her up and she stands on wobbly legs. She’s can’t walk yet, but if crawling were an Olympic event, she would definitely medal, no doubt about it.  Guh--so adorable!  Oh, and the hotness?  Whew! 

Thank you so very much for this pretty birthday present.  I truly appreciate the time and effort.  xo



Author's Response: YOU'RE WELCOME! I hope you had a lovely birthday! I'm glad you enjoyed this little drabble! Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: AtTheStars455 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 04, 2010 01:27 pm Title: Chapter 1

Beautiful story with great imagery - I could really picture them there on the beach at the Pacific. Nicely done!

Author's Response: Thank you so, so much!

Reviewer: Beeswax Signed [Report This]
Date: May 03, 2010 07:16 pm Title: Chapter 1

This was a beautiful, languid day dream.  I also concur with FlonkertonChamp about this line: "In Cecelia’s world there are no seven wonders, but seven million."  Wonderful. 

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Reviewer: Newtruefan Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 03, 2010 06:40 pm Title: Chapter 1

Wow! The passion and the romance are a heady duo.

I'll be taking my shower now.

6 Stars!

Author's Response: Haha! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it!

Reviewer: Deedldee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 03, 2010 11:23 am Title: Chapter 1

I adore the image of Jim, Pam and Cecelia at the Pacific. You painted quite a picture here. Perfectly lovely. I love the part of how Cece is skeptical about the sand, and I could clearly see her little confused expression as she held her hand up. This is really nice. I hope you write more soon!

Author's Response: I so glad you enjoyed this....I really love writing for this fictitious family, it's great, uh? Thanks you so much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: FlonkertonChamp Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 03, 2010 10:08 am Title: Chapter 1

In Cecelia’s world there are no seven wonders, but seven million.

Reviewer: FlonkertonChamp Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 03, 2010 10:08 am Title: Chapter 1

In Cecelia’s world there are no seven wonders, but seven million.

Reviewer: Mr Bill Signed [Report This]
Date: May 03, 2010 03:25 am Title: Chapter 1

I loved your description of little Cece discovering the sand and the water...such a great memory for Jim and Pam. 

 And this was fun, too:

"The only artistic piece I’ve created (with Pam’s help, of course) is now soundly asleep—our flesh and blood, born out of love so profound that transcended all forms of contraception.


And that’s the best art of all the other arts."



Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2010 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh my goodness, that was great, Dedeen! I started to copy and paste into the review box and then I found another thing to copy, and another, and another... you get the picture. Basically every other sentence would be in the review box and I doubt you'd want to reread your whole story through the review... I'll stop. Anyways, great imagery and I love the scene at the beach - all of it. So sweet.

Quick note, you forgot a period at the end of the "But for her birthday, I’m taking her there" sentence (it's the second paragraph). Secondly, you said warn instead of warm about three quarters of the way through. Other than that, this was flawless. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much Pamalamorganhalpert! You always know how to flatter a girl like me. I'm really glad you liked it! And thanks for pointing the mistakes... it's all fixed now. I knew there would be some since I wrote this in a hurry and wanted to post it ASAP! Thanks so much again for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: yummyyummyJAMinmytummy Signed [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2010 07:54 pm Title: Chapter 1

so cute! i'm with Hannah_Halpert, the hand thing KILLED me- i loved the whole description of Cece as a joint work of art between Jim and Pam.

the line "born out of love so profound that transcended all forms of contraception" reminds me of another story, animperfectlove's My Kids Are Gonna Be Right About That. i just reread it- and it's still adorable even though we know Cece now! :)

Author's Response: I love Cecelia! It's so awesome writing for this fictitious family, isn't it? I hadn't realize that line was also from another fic...lol... I went back and I read it.... That was a good angsty one! Definitely going to favorite it! Thanks for the pointer!

Reviewer: adampascalfan12 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2010 06:49 pm Title: Chapter 1

LOVED it, I can defintely picture Jim taking Pam and Cecelia to the beach and seeing the Pacific for the first time. Keep it up with the great work!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 02, 2010 06:33 pm Title: Chapter 1

That was AMAZING!!!

I love that Jim took Pam to see the Pacific... and this, this killed me.

Cece crawls to the edge of the towel, but stops where the sand starts. She’s hesitant about crawling over, but ventures a hand onto the sand. She examines the speckled grains stuck to her palm and shows it to me. < I saw that SO clearly in my hand. The way she shows her hand, it was beautiful!!!!

The smut was hot, keep em coming :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I love writing for Cecelia... and I love daddy Jim...Sooo that's how that came about! Thanks for reviewing!

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