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Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 28, 2020 12:07 am Title: Chapter 1

I absolutely love this - not that I was dying for more Jim and Pam angst or anything, but it's nice to see someone acknowledge that as a couple that was pretty obsessed with each other and had a kid they clearly didn't plan for, there would be even amongst all that happiness a certain level of recognition that hey, we wouldn't have hated it if that period of our relationship wasn't over.

Reviewer: Duchess Cupcake Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 24, 2018 05:21 pm Title: Chapter 1

Groaning at the perfection of this story. Really so very very perfect.

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: July 29, 2010 10:40 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is excellent. Just so, so sweet and sexy.  Thanks for this.

Reviewer: Hannah_Halpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 22, 2010 06:13 pm Title: Chapter 1

So beautifully done. The way you have them reconnect made my heart ache. Gorgeous. Thank you

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2010 07:07 pm Title: Chapter 1

Thank you for this.  A perfect chance for them to reconnect, just the two of them. That's the key to a good marriage, remembering who you were at the beginning, and appreciating how far you've come despite life's changes.  

Great job and very sensual imagery.

Reviewer: kaat Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2010 06:25 pm Title: Chapter 1

oh my god. oh my GOD. i feel like stanley on pretzel day. when you can get me really feeling that love in a few paragraphs, you know you've done something close to perfection.

love so many lines i cannot even begin to pick one out.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2010 11:36 am Title: Chapter 1

P.S.  Upon re-read, if forced at gunpoint to choose:  You ache and ache when he kisses you in the dim lamplight of a strange bedroom, with his face serious and his mouth relentless. Love. that.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2010 11:20 am Title: Chapter 1

Lets hear it for second honeymoons. 

 

Nicely done, unfold.

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2010 11:18 am Title: Chapter 1

See now, I love second-person pov stories (they can have an almost strange intimacy and sense of immediacy.) Problem is, they're SO hard to do well - the voice has to be just right, in all its nuance, or it falls apart. And this one sings Pam.

I could smell the musty wood cabin, see her beautiful tanned husband thru her eyes and feel her 'missing' him... also this phrasing is perfect: I love that girl. Simple, true - a daughter is a miracle. 

Anyhow, this was a lovely thing. Glad to see you back.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2010 11:03 am Title: Chapter 1

Unfold, this is gorgeous and achingly romantic.  You are just so good at that!  I can't even pick a favorite passage, because they're all beautiful. 

Reviewer: Deedldee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 20, 2010 10:58 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow that was super great! I don't usually like stories in the second person for some reason, but this was great. The quiet tone, the longing between them even though they're married. It's really all fabulous.

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