Date: May 31, 2018 05:17 pm Title: June 11: Jim's Unit
I love the choices you’re making here! I think that I stories like this there’s always a rush to wake the injured party up so that there can be some dialogue, and I appreciate you taking your time to get Jim conscious. I love Pam’s inner monologue-dialogue-and I think it’s really fitting for what we know of her characterization. Can’t wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks! I think Jim will wake up on the 11th of June, but there may be a lot of June 11 in the story before he does. I didn't realize when I started doing the chapters by date how much they would overlap. Oh well...
1 [Report This]Date: May 30, 2018 07:47 pm Title: June 11: Jim's Unit
I’ve always felt Pam was the type to have a million different thoughts in her head about one situation or many all at the same time. And she’s able to see and understand many sides of a situation which is why she’s the sweet caring compassionate woman we all adore.
In jims head is a lot like my migraines, poor guy.
Author's Response: I hope your migraines aren't as bad as Jim's car accident, but that was the effect I was going for so I'm glad it worked. And yeah, Pam's always going a mile a minute inside, but slow as molasses outside, so that's what I'm trying to convey with all the bold and italic in that chapter.