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Welcome! This was very cute and a nice balance of sweet and sexy that I feel is very in character. I can’t wait to read the rest that you have planned.

I know back when I was first on this site, there was a great beta reading program, which is basically just sharing your story/chapter with someone before you post it so that a second pair of eyes might catch things that you’ve missed. If you’re worried about your work being “rough,” you might ask in the shout box if anyone would be willing to beta read for you? If not, I find it helpful to finish a draft, leave it for a day, and then come back with fresh eyes and reread the whole thing. I’ve caught a ton of minor mistakes that way and have even rewritten almost entire chapters. It also helps to read it aloud to yourself. Please don’t think I’m being mean, I just wanted to give some tips that have helped me in the past. We appreciate you being here so much and look forward to your future writings! a86;a039;

Short and cute to be sure. Keep an eye on proofreading. There was one point where you said, "Are you applying," when I think you meant to say, "Are you implying." Other than than, not bad.