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Finally getting around to reviewing this one...

“Yes, and I kissed him,” Pam stated matter-of-factly. “And I wanted to do it again, so I called off the wedding.” BAM. There's the Fancy New Beesly we know and love.

I like the way you have Jim think about Pam's degree of responsibility here, and the way it comes back less to her telling Roy and more to her leaving the wedding with him in the first place... which is of course what he's really upset about.

I'd forgotten how bad I feel for Karen here. I guess canon Karen should be happy at least... it could've been WAY worse than getting dumped by a fountain in New York City.

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"Cocktails with a twist." I see what you did there.

Here's the thing, Jenna. I've already told you how well you write Jim and Pam. You write them SO well. But right now, I just need to stop and give you the appreciation necessary for your Dwight and Michael because they are always, always perfect. And this is no exception. "The store poisoned David Wallace" and "give me back my shirt" These are priceless lines and deserving of a shout out.

You also really write Karen well. It can be hard, when you don't like her, to write her fairly, but you always manage to hit the right notes with her. I love that we're kicking this story off with her already a bit wary of Scranton and Pam, and everything that goes along with it.

Listen, you already know I love the whole bulk of this chapter - Pam's confession and Jim overhearing it and Roy's reaction - of course I do. So I'm just going to keep praising you for your use of the secondary characters because you write them all incredibly well.

Kevin is the MVP of this chapter. Who woulda thought? And then the bartender's comment about letting him know if this was going to be a weekly event? I love Oscar being protective of Pam, too.

"Jim shot Pam a pleading final look that he hoped communicated everything left unsaid, especially that they weren’t done with this conversation. She gave him her best nervous smile in response, her lips twisting in much the same way they had when she’d whispered me too on the casino night and for a split second he’d thought maybe everything he was hoping for would eventuate." Well GD, Jenna. I can't wait to see how this conversation goes!

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Coley, I discovered your little review influx during my lunch break today and saying that it made my day would be an understatement... Thank you for being the bright spot in a rather dull work day. 

Dwight and Michael are SO fun to write. I’m glad my attempts at them seem to work. I hope you love how they (& potato salad - the real hero of this story) factor into the next chapter.

I completely agree about Karen. It’s hard to strike that balance and not make her into a bit of a horrible caricature... She’s a polarizing character - there’s not much middle ground in opinions...

Oh god, I hope the conversation lives up to expectations. I keep going back and changing it, but hopefully I’ll have it up sooner rather than later... 

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JB! This is so great. My favourite part is where you write: "For a split second the world stood still." I could absolutely see it happening.

Also, I like your Pam.

Author's Response: Thanks Sprinkles! I’m glad you liked my Pam - I was a bit worried about having her character feel natural in this. I didn’t want to make her too bold, or have her fall apart too much. I was hoping the balance I struck was okay.