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Oh, well done! Adored every moment (ok, maybe not entirely Jim being hurt, but it worked in the story) and am glad to have stumbled on it while browsing stories!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I hope you check out my other stories, or the many other fandoms I write for at fanfiction.net, also under Donnamour1969.

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You did really well balancing the romance and the sexiness and the humor in this chapter and in this story in general - feels like them!

I liked this one a lot. Please come back soon?

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Very cool that you went back and read this, and that you were so kind and encouraging in your reviews. I'm afraid my Office muse has escaped me for now, and I've moved on to other fandoms. If you like my writing, I've written for many other fandoms over at fanfiction.net.  I'm Donnamour1969 there too. Thanks again :)

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I love the line about how they're once again five feet away with each other. And the description of Pam waking up in the night and dragging her IV cart with her to climb in bed with him is beautiful. (The ending is fun too... nice to not forget the consequences of Pam's drunken revelry...)

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I like this a lot, and I'm not a big believer in this scenario (my headcanon is always that if Jim doesn't leave, Pam goes ahead and marries Roy). I do think I can buy that if Jim had gotten more of a signal that Pam was interested he might have changed course some... and certainly it's nice to see him give five seconds thought to how much he dropped on her at once. ::fistshake:: I think you address part of my thoughts here by having him make it clear that she is facing losing him if she doesn't choose him - that was a good choice.

This is a really interesting take on Jim. There are times in this chapter I'm not sure I like him much... there are also times when I want to stand up and cheer for him.

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I liked this, although honestly not sure they'd be that ok with him not pressing charges after the second threat in public; but I'd still buy Jim refusing that pressure so it works.

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Well that went a lot of places I was not expecting. Good work though. I like the bachelorette party idea.

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Very sweet way to end it all. Personally I would have like some more closure with Roy. He's still out there and still probably pissed off. It would have been nice to have that resolved. So that's really the only critique I have for this chapter.

Other than that, it's all very sweet and steamy to see them start out their relationship this way. I really liked it that they got most of their previous miscommunications out in the open. Great way to start building a nice solid foundation for the rest of their relationship.

Great job with this story. I've really enjoyed coming along for the ride.

Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat

Author's Response: You are too kind. I guess, honestly, just like Roy disappeared from the show soon after he attacked Jim (except for his wedding later), I was done with him, as I think was Pam, so that's kind of my approach here. Roy was released and hopefully is moving on with his life. Glad you still enjoyed the rest of this story. Thanks so much for your helpful critique and praise. I always enjoy hearing from you.

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Another lovely update. That whole section about the muggers made me laugh. The way that Pam just goes along with it. So very Pam and Jim and such a fun inclusion. Can’t wait to see how you finish this one off.

Author's Response: Sorry I'm late in responding to this. Thanks so much for reviewing. Glad you liked my Pam and Jim here.

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Really enjoying this! I really enjoy stories which explore what might have happened if Jim hadn't run away, and this is great. Looking forward to seeing how you finish it.

Author's Response: Ah, thank you! I'm glad you liked this premise. The final chapter will be up soon!

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Being the medical professional I am there's one big thing here that stands out to me. In general hospitals don't allow male and female patients to share rooms. That's the real world poking it's head in. That Pam and Jim are in the same hospital room like this we'll just chalk up to artistic licence because it does make everything very sweet.

Seems like the previous night was just the kick Pam needed to clarify her feelings for both Roy and Jim. Nice to see her come to that realization and reach out to Jim like this.

As for Jim, I hope he throws the book at Roy.

Author's Response: Interesting about the rooms. My parents were both in the same room in our small town hospital. It must just depend on where you are. Thanks for the input.

So that took a turn. Kinda figured Pam would have a ton of conflicting emotions with everything. That part played out well. Nice job at getting into her head with everything.

"In Vino Veritas" there Pam. In case you're unaware, that's "In Wine Truth." Or in this case Drunk Pam seems to have let her guard down enough to let herself really feel what her heart's been telling her. While sober she's guilt ridden and feeling the pressure. However her real feelings are there under the surface.

Classic set up with Jim and Pam there in the limo. I get that Jim is having a hard time trying to figure out what to do. Yes she's drunk, but he wants her, and she seems to want him. All very confusing and head spinning to be sure.

Then there's Roy. Two very different looks at him here. First a sweet Roy that's rarely seen in fics with leaving her breakfast and all. Which of course only adds to Pam's feelings of guilt. Then there at the end the more angry Roy that's been seen quite a bit. His anger at Jim is understandable. However his words to Pam seem to hearken to something more serious. Great way to bring that all out with economy of words too.

Great way to add a lot of drama with this chapter. You've most assuredly got me hooked for the next update.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the encouragement, and the nice things you've said. Hope you like the next chapter, which I just posted :)

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You know I'm not sure I've actually read something like this before. Where Jim doesn't run off to Stamford after getting rejected. Most of the time Pam will choose Jim right away or like in canon Jim leaves, but then Pam finds her courage early. This does seems different and I like the concept.

Jim here is really interesting. It seems he gets over his pain fairly quickly. I think it's because he's listening to his head a bit more than his heart. While his heart is hurting, his head says the things you've captured. She kissed him back, he's her best friend, shouldn't your fiance be your best friend. Makes for a good change of pace. I do worry a little that he's laying it on Pam a bit much. He seems to know she's still reeling about things. So while I'm glad he's being honest with her, I worry that unless he backs off a shade, the courage that Pam develops through S3 might take a bit longer to develop.

However this is only the first chapter and if your other works are any indication, I think you have enough skill as a writer to bring things through rather well. I'm really looking forward to seeing how this all plays out. Especially looking forward to seeing what's going on in Pam's head.

Author's Response: Yes, this is definitely a more logical Jim, a more courageous Jim. I'm thinking that in this AU, once the dam broke on pouring out his feelings to Pam, he just didn't want to give up so easily, and therein lies the conflict--is it too much for a still engaged Pam? Will she have the courage to make the right decision? Thanks for your confidence in me, that you are willing to give this idea a chance. I really appreciate your great review!

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Yaaaaay! I love determined Jim!
A chapter every day?! What a treat!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Glad you like where this is going. I just posted chapter 2. Hope you like it.