Date: April 26, 2020 02:04 pm Title: Coming Home
Multiple POVs are nice!
I'm glad Pam had that final conversation with Roy (also felt bad for him, but... well, it's kind of his fault that the engagement and relationships ended that way) and even more glad that Pam is moving on in all meaning! The kiss in the cheek was adorable, and her own reaction on it was priceless! Thank you for writing!
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I'm glad you enjoyed it, writing this has been a lot of fun in an otherwise usually uneventful life nowadays.
Date: April 26, 2020 03:47 am Title: Coming Home
“Pam was nervous how Jim would react to her moving so close...” I don’t know if you deliberately wrote this line as kind of a jab at Karen, but I hope you did because I am here for it.
“... she wasn’t entirely sure if she bought what she was trying to sell herself.” This moment made me chuckle. I love this giddily excited version of Pam so much.
The multiple POVs worked well. The chapter flowed really nicely.
Author's Response:
I did indeed deliberately put that throwback in, because screw you Karen! I hope to have giddy Pam make a comeback in the future, with her life going from train-wreck to put together all in a very tight span of time and all that.
I appreciate your review, thanks!
1 [Report This]Date: April 25, 2020 10:49 pm Title: Coming Home
I do like how you handled both POV.
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm glad you appreciated it.
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: April 25, 2020 09:39 pm Title: Coming Home
I like the POV switching. It worked well. And I loved the Pam POV in particular, both her reaction to her reaction to Jim (if you follow me) and her Roy interaction. Well done.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I liked writing the mental rambling Pam as well, that was a lot of fun. We may get to see a bit more of that in the future as feelings percolate. And Roy... Yeah. He's a class act in this one.
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: April 25, 2020 08:43 pm Title: Coming Home
Not bad with the multiple POV's. They were different enough to know who was thinking what so that's good.
Loved Pam's excitedness and her little trick in parking in Dwight's spot. Just a little bit of mayhem to keep things fun. Roy is still the clueless kind of oaf here. Thinking they're still together like that. Kinda feel bad for him, but on second thought, no I don't. Saying you'll try to do better rather than saying I will do better shows that even now he's just not committed to the relationship and Pam's right to dump him.
Looking forward to seeing how Jim interacts with everything.
Author's Response:
Thanks, I tried to lead off every paragraph with a clear shift if that's what was happening and I'm glad it worked out.
I'm glad you enjoyed Pam's brand of pranking. Roy is committed to the idea of Pam: A live in maid - not Pam herself. I'm sure he'll find someone who wants to fill that mold eventually.
Thanks for your review!