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Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 18, 2021 08:39 am Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks

"They laughed. Pam told him she was certain that if the opportunity ever arose, Michael would leave Jan for Ryan. Jim answered that he wasn’t sure whom to feel worse for. Pam thought he should feel the worst for Dwight." This banter is complete gold, top to bottom.

This is an interesting contrast with Canon, the way Pam has found the Karen of her own she was looking for in The Job - someone who is not the Right partner, but a perfectly good one, someone who could conceivably make her happy. And it's definitely a different sort of sting for Jim - we never get to see him confront Pam saying someone with whom his issues don't completely align with her best interests.

Oooh, this scene at the end. Love it.

Reviewer: Comfect Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: August 15, 2020 05:21 pm Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks

So...no points to Paul if Jim was able to get there first. But mainly of course never any points to Roy. This is doing a good job of staying on story without being duplicative of what is canon, if you know what I mean.

Reviewer: Purplepapaya Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 10, 2020 03:09 pm Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks

Omg this amazing! I need more

Author's Response: Thanks for reading!!

Reviewer: jloh217 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 08, 2020 10:25 pm Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks

Really enjoying this story! Paul seems sweet, but of course he's no Jim. I'm excited to see how the next chapter goes, between Roy, Paul and Karen, with Jim and Pam trying to figure out how they fit in! :)

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Jim and Pam need some serious figuring out to do LOL.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 08, 2020 08:47 am Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks

Wow! Lots of emotions on this one. I loved how described everything with Pam as being increasing chinks in the armor around Jim's heart. Cleary Casino Night hurt him deeply so he put up guards. However here we can easily see that despite everything his head is saying, Pam is the one who can always get through those defenses.

Simillar with Pam. How she's not letting things get to serious with Paul. Easy dates, a few kisses, but that's really it. Deny it all she wants her heart still longs for Jim.

It's really felt like something needs to break and if feels like that's happened with Roy's drunken encounter here. Nothing like the heat of a moment to make things clear. Paul doesn't know her, Jim does, and it's finally in Jim's arms that she really feels safe. Hopefully she remembers that despite all the margaritas. I know I loved the fact that she finally feels safe in Jim's arms.

Speaking of that confornation, loved that as soon as he sees what's happening, Jim's at her side. Rage and agony as you say, but he's there. And in front of both Karen and Paul. The next chapter should be really interesting to read. Nice job with this one.

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for such a detailed review!

I always felt it was quite clear to both of them suring S3 that all the feelings were just right there but they judt didn't know how to go about it.

Hope you like where this is going! Thanks for reading. 

Reviewer: Nummington Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 08, 2020 04:08 am Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks

I'm really loving where this is going. I cannot wait for the next update.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading!

Reviewer: JennaBennett Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 08, 2020 03:44 am Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks

Oooh yes, I like that you’ve maintained the tone of canon here. Jim’s reactions make a lot of sense through that lens.

Somehow picturing Paul as Mark Brandanawicz automatically makes me find him just a little bland - every though he seems like a super sweet guy. I just... Mark is not my fave... That said, I’ve definitely got a clear visual!

I got too caught up in reading to review the last chapter, but the line where Paul says his last name is Bernard, but quickly distances himself from Andy was hilarious!

Both these chapters were lovely. I like that you’re essentially following the episode storylines with your original story weaved throughout. This ending has me so keen to see what happens next!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I am glad keeping the episode tone makes sense.

Hehe, well, sweet and bland was what I had in mind when I was writing Paul so that's good. 

Thanks so much for reading and reveiwing!  

 

Reviewer: Chale811 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: July 08, 2020 12:15 am Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks

This is getting soooo good. Can NOT WAIT to see what happens next.

Author's Response: Thanks so so much for reading!! 

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