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Better job this time around with this chapter. Seemed to flow better. I liked that Pete is looking out for Erin. Andy is being Andy so that's fun to read.

Where this chapter really shines though is the JAM parts. Both Jim and Pam have some good introspective type moments. I like how you had us get into their mindset as they watch everything at Roy's wedding. There's still a hint of the conflict that was in canon S9 so nice job still bringing that in.

Even though it might be a while before we get an update, I'm still looking forward to seeing what happens.

Author's Response:

Much appreciated!  It took a while but I think I'm finally getting my own "voice" for this adaptation of events in order.

Erin is a character that I love with so much potential and felt she wasn't given the effort she deserves by the show.  I had a lot of fun with her and the new guys, I'm wanting them to form their own dynamic of sorts.  Also, writing Andy was less difficult than I was fearing.  Hopefully I'll do him better justice than S9 did...

The JAM comment is appreciated, since that is what this is in its core (although I love working with all of these characters).  A person like Roy Anderson with a wedding like that... there won't not be a conflict, even without Athlead in the picture; I wanted them to still stand by each other and love each other, but it's a sign for the difficult times to come.  But they'll make it, of course, and the challenges themselves won't be as severe or strenuous.

Thanks for the review!