1 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2020 12:27 pm Title: Pam
Nice use of parallels between the perspectives, showing how in tune Jim and Pam are at this point. Pam's sudden appearance is also explained, so that's a mystery tied up neatly! Looking forward to the next chunk of plot of what I've deduced from the chapter structure rings true!
Date: September 14, 2020 06:58 am Title: Pam
Quick thing about the ambulance ride. In general there's usually a crew of two on an ambulance so while transporting to the hospital there would be one driving and one in the back attending the patient. Mind you that's usual. However if this ambulance was training a new paramedic or had a student on board there could be a second person in the back attending the patient, so we'll just go with that. So actually not to bad in that regard.
Nice to have Pam's POV on everything here. You captured her feelings really well. Onto the next chapter.
1 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2020 02:48 pm Title: Pam
Really like what you've done with the structure here - the multiple PoVs on the same events. When this is over it's going to be readable as one story and also as two separate journeys through the same experience, which is a really nice bonus.