The mirror image chapters do help in getting each other's points of view on the same events. If I had to offer a minor critique it's that while I'm sure Pam and Jim have very similar thought processes, they are still seperate people who think differnent ways even about similar events. Jim likes sports so having his though processes run via sports metaphor might work. Pam is an artist, flashes of color whirling before her eyes might feel appropriate.

So last chapter could have been described by Pam as starting out in white ice due to feeling frozen in place transitioning to fire red rage as she destroys the kitches, mellowing to low blue as she cries into Jim's chest.

Likewise here Jim might think he's stuck on the sidelines of his own house. Everyone else is out there running up and down the court while he's sitting on the bench. Now since he's up first it's his turn to really get in the game and show Pam he's still got what it takes. But somehow right when he goes to make the winning shot, he's screwed up and sinks the basket but for the other team.

See what I mean? Same events, same people, different perspectives.

Again this is just a suggestion. I did like this chapter in that it gave us Jim's thoughts and his side of the story. Feel free to use or not use anything I've said. Onto the next chapter.

Author's Response: That is an excellent point. I will definitely try to incorporate that!