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Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed [Report This]
Date: September 22, 2020 07:31 pm Title: Jim: Month Three

Well, congrats, because you managed to make me legitimately tear up on two separate occasions in one chapter - first with Pam telling Jim she can't watch him die, and Jim's exchange with Cece at the end.

I thought this chapter was really strong in demonstrating how disorienting what Jim is experiencing is - you're avoiding the trap of him just sort of knowing exactly what's happening with his body.

And, as always, in every universe, Jim and Pam can't quite communicate the way they should - very canonical.

Author's Response: I’m glad you liked it. This was one of the hardest chapters for me to write so I’m glad it turned out pretty well. 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 22, 2020 03:26 pm Title: Jim: Month Three

That's dramatic. The stress is really piling on here. Jim wanting to let Pam out of the house, his pride and guilt that she has to take care of him so much. Then of course his guilt that he can't take care of Cece. It's all spinning round in a malestrom. The last bit with him staggering down the stairs with Cece in his arms is particually heartbreaking. Yes he's tried to find some strenght, but there's something very clearly wrong. Hopefully he'll be able to get some help soon.

Reviewer: WanderingWatchtower Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 22, 2020 02:44 pm Title: Jim: Month Three

I am not okay. 😭

Again, you do a fantastic job writing the raw and emotional and it’s very, very good.

Author's Response: Thank you!! Glad you liked it. 

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