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Reviewer: tinydundie Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: May 28, 2021 05:21 pm Title: Pop-a Shot and Salty Coke

"It wasn’t so much that she thought the guy was anything special. He was cute in a dorky kind of way, with an unkempt thatch of hair, very much in need of a trim, a wrinkled dress shirt that seemed a little big on him and a dimpled smile that screamed troublemaker."

Oh god, I adored this description. Wonderful.

Author's Response:

Oh yes Jim was Jim long before she knew him, or we knew him. His pranks were basic and childish - it would be a while before they would become more sophisticated (and some of them stayed as basic and childish as salty coke).

So glad you are enjoying this. 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 19, 2020 05:18 pm Title: Pop-a Shot and Salty Coke

So far lots of fun. Pam seems lovely in her party dress. This also seems like it's pre-Roy too. Love that. I really like stories of where Pam and Jim met and hit it off early like this. And the way you've done it is great. Jim pranking the Dwight type character, Pam laughing at it. What great foreshadowing of things to come. Classic prank too. I remember one I pulled back in high school, telling some buddies some chicken wings were Teriyaki flavored when in fact they were the hottest sauce the place had. That was pretty funny, for me that is.

Looking forward to more of this.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the smile.  I can always count on you to read and respond and your reviews always make me smile.

  

 The Adam character has shades of Dwight absolutely since there's always that guy.  

 The classic prank as I mentioned was courtesy of my son. I'm sure he would appreciate the hot sauce one too.  

  Glad you are enjoying, more coming soon.   It's marinating.

Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: November 19, 2020 12:35 pm Title: Pop-a Shot and Salty Coke

There's a lot of great characterization of Pam here. The bit about the dress is so telling - you get to see some of the class stuff going on here as well as Pam's personal insecurity. And I really appreciate that she's using her limited purse space for a sketchbook.

You do a good job making her *feel* 13, too - how dressing up like this is still novel for her and her envy of the girls who seem to have figured out teenagedom.

The way they end up having this mutual friend feels organic and plausible. And I love this dismissive first impression of Jim that turns into them bonding over her catching him playing a prank on a proto-Dwight. Not a very sophisticated prank, but I guess he's still learning. He'll be tricking people into thinking they've committed murder soon enough.

Really enjoying this one so far!

Author's Response:

Thanks Joe (alright if I call you Joe? -you can call me Beth, as that's my real life name)

I was a 13-year-old girl a long time ago so it was a trip to go back in my mind but in reality sometimes I still feel that young - still have bouts of insecurity, jealousy, etc except now I think they call it FOMO. I hope I did a good job making her Pam just younger with her humor, shyness and her secret sass.

As for Jim - he's 13 too so yes the pranks lack the inventiveness and creativity. Love that you call Adam a proto-Dwight - it was too far fetched to make him really Dwight but there's also a type, right. Hope I can do 13-year-old Jim justice in your opinion - had my boys help me with it. 

Glad you are enjoying.

And as always thanks for reviewing. I can always count on getting yours and it always makes me smile.

 

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