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Reviewer: Once Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: December 05, 2020 01:46 pm Title: Chapter 1: Lifted Paint

What wonderful writing.

I particularly liked the extended metaphor of Pam's painting and her opinions of it to show her overall emotional state at this point. Your respect for the readers' full grounding in established characters physical descriptions shines through. After setting the stage briefly and subtly about Jim, his influence in Pam's life seems to hover over this piece. You've conveyed a mastery in the skills needed to be a watercolor artist with the fine points about creating a painting; the details anchor your lyrical writing in reality in a good way.

Ryan's comment about Jim's inadequate wardrobe for Stamford cracked me up. It was a nice touch of levity in a thoughtful piece. Allowing readers fill in Kelly's chatter was an excellent choice. I really liked your depiction of Toby as a competent HR Rep; he does know his stuff.

The character who really shone through for me though was Madeline Shaw. Your compact description of her attire gave me a clear picture of her. Her dialogue showed her understanding of being a starving artist, a teacher/mentor, and businesswoman.

Good onya.

Author's Response: Aw, you’re the sweetest. Thank you! I really appreciate and am heartened by all the details you picked up on. I feel a bit like Pam, watching Michael observe all of the details of her work. 

Yes! Jim is very much a spectre in Pam’s life, both when he leaves and again when he comes back. It’s  a kind of leitmotif in my story so if that came across at all, I’m just really thrilled. And yay, Madeleine! Her existence is a personal tribute to some of the best teachers I’ve had in my life. She’s wonderful and I love her. And Pam needs her, like woah. 

Thank you again!

Reviewer: Merria Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: December 05, 2020 01:01 pm Title: Chapter 1: Lifted Paint

What a great start! Great writing. I’m very intrigued to read where this goes

Author's Response: Thank you, your kind words mean so much!

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: December 05, 2020 10:58 am Title: Chapter 1: Lifted Paint

First of all well done on posting your first story here. That can be intimidating from time to time, so bravo.

I really liked this. You did a great job with the decriptions of everything as well as all of Pam's introspection. Yes this is just a set up chapter, but it's a great one. You really get into Pam's mindset here. Especially with the flashback.

I'm really looking forward to seeing where this goes. The next instalments should be really interesting.

Author's Response: Thank you! I admit I was more nervous than I thought I’d be to post. So silly. Yes, we’ll definitely get more into the thick of the plot in the next chapter or so. But I’m really glad you’re enjoying it and so appreciate you taking the time to write this review.

Reviewer: darjeelingandcoke Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: December 05, 2020 10:32 am Title: Chapter 1: Lifted Paint

This is an interesting concept, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with it. Certainly these two characters who are both really bad at confrontation would benefit a lot from finding their way back to each other without having to take that sort of drastic action, and I'm looking forward to seeing how you play that out.

Pam refusing to acknowledge and deal with imperfections in her artwork, even to its detriment, is very in character and a good metaphor for how she's living her life at this point in canon. And I appreciate the commitment to letting her view the world through art. It's a very specific sort of inner monologue, and one I absolutely believe Pam might have.

I will also note that I'm *really* happy to see you acknowledging the financial challenges that come with Pam's new life and letting them shape the story and her decisions. Feels like something that would weigh heavily on her during a lot of Season 3, and it often remains stuck in the background.

There are a couple of great individual moments here, too - Pam not having considered that Jim wouldn't be there to get her mug off a high shelf is a great example of the sort of little ways he's built into her life.

Welcome to the ranks of MTT writers! We're so happy you're here! Hope to see you continue this soon.

Author's Response:

Thank you, I’m so flattered by your kind words and review. It means so much to hear that I have portrayed these characters and their inner beings in a realistic and believable way. To your comment on Pam’s financial situation: yes! You hit the nail right on the head. And I’m glad that prospect is coming through appropriately in this story.

And thank you for welcoming me, it’s so lovely here! 

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