1 [Report This]Date: January 27, 2021 09:11 pm Title: Love Never Fails
I've Been enjoying catching up with this story.
I'm not sure when I last reviewed so this may encompass a few past chapters. Bring Michael in was a great choice. He has a way of lightening up every situation but also giving some really great advice (never ever ever give up).
Him mentioning Stanley leading Jim astray was a good line. As was the line about Pams glasses. Very funny. I enjoyed the tease about the baby names although he could've really named them that and I wouldn't have been surprised.
I love the Pamela Beagsly reference. I adore that's deleted scene and the layer you've added that it's a male dog is just great fun
Nice job all around. Looking forward the the rest..
Author's Response:
Thank you so much and glad you've been enjoying.
I've said this a lot but Michael's dialogues were some of the most I've had to write with. I wish I wrote in BFD somewhere.
The glasses, definitely. Still one of my favorite insults in the show. And Pamela Beagsley, I thought to myself, what would make this even more absurd?
Date: January 22, 2021 10:13 am Title: Love Never Fails
I love that Chili's is strictly enforcing the ban on Pam.
That's some solid insight from Michael, and is something that cuts to the quick of why I think it's good that you're exploring this - it makes total sense that Jim would choose Pam over Athlead in a heartbeat, but in real life there would be some regrets over having to make that choice, and Pam's worry about that causing problems in the long run would probably not be so easily dispelled.
I thought the voicemail was a nice touch. This was your strongest chapter yet I think.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
Yes, I actually got the inspiration from a tweet Jenna Fischer a few years back about entering Chili's. I just wanted to incorporate it.
I wanted to Michael to give Jim a reality check because he did invest a lot of his time to Athlead. It's not to say that Pam is second but just declaring it, I don't think it's enough.
The voicemail, I had a lot of fun writing it because I wanted Jim to be emotional but at the same time, go on a tangent because that's normally how drunk people are, they want to seem coherent, but normally their thoughts are all over the place.
Date: January 22, 2021 09:00 am Title: Love Never Fails
The dialog in this chapter snapped and flowed. You had Michael, Helene, and drunk Jim's voices spot on.
Excellent choice on drunk Jim having to leave a voice mail.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I really tried to stay as true as possible to their characters, so I've been doing a lot of rewatches as well.
Date: January 22, 2021 08:33 am Title: Love Never Fails
Love the tough love from Michael. Yes, he's off the walls crazy and rarely has the mental capacity of more than a 6 year old, but he's also very insightful. He's also known Jim and Pam for a long time and had a good seat to their romance. So I think it's great that he says what he does to Jim.
Glad Pam could open up to her Mom too. Feels like they both need it. To let out their feelings and have someone outside their marriage who does care about them to tell them what they need to hear.
Then to have Jim call her right after she hears "have faith in him." I liked that. So as hard as it seems for Jim to have up and left, I think the distance has given them both some clarity and perspective. Looking forward to seeing where we go from here.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! I think Michael has given Jim his fair share of good advice. I still try to make sure he doesn't stray too far from who he is but will still manage to come through for Jim.
I wanted to include that part where Pam's mom wasn't sure if leaving Roy was the right idea because any parent would wonder why she broke off her engagement for another guy. But yeah, Jim had proven time and again that everything he does if for her and the family so she needed a bit of a reminder.
I really enjoyed writing them being apart and having to think things over because it actually allowed to be more open with each other. Of course, they still have to learn how to be honest in person but we'll cross the bridge when we get there.