Date: February 08, 2021 02:42 pm Title: Better Than A Fairytale
Well done. I very much did enjoy reading this story. Marriage isn’t always perfect and even people very much in love can hit stumbling blocks. Throughout this story you did a great job showing that but how their love got them through. I especially liked the snapshots into the future to wrap it all up. And the pranks were great fun. I could just imagine Dwight trying to make the paper quieter.
Feels great to wrap up a story doesn’t it. But I hope you will keep writing more.
Thank you so much!
Jim and Pam in season 9 was tough to watch but I always felt like it was necessary for them to face these types of challenges, which is why I was so inclined to cover it.
It felt so good to wrap it up. I wanted to write more about this but I felt like I already exhausted the storyline so it felt natural to close it. I'm already coming up with possible stories, so I hope I find the right one soon!
Date: February 07, 2021 10:53 pm Title: Better Than A Fairytale
Lovely way to wrap this up. Them starting out on the journey down to Austin was a nice way to close out their time in Scranton. The trip to visit Michael and Holly was fun too. Especially with the revelations of just how drunk both boys were that night.
However the end there was a hoot. Nice to see that Jim is still pranking Dwight. Some things never and shouldn't change. I'll admit you did have me going for a second with the no wedding ring thing. Glad to see Pam's not a fan of that and puts him in his place.
The speech there is a fitting way to bring it all together. They're both happy with each other and are only getting stronger.
Excellent work for your first story. There were a lot of ups and downs to be sure. However there was also a lot of heart mixed in which was great to read. Hope you'll grace us with some more stories sometime soon.
Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat
(Fortune Favors the Bold)
Thank you so much!!
I was thinking about lengthening each year but I resorted to snippets because I think I pretty much closed everything that needed to be said -- That even in their greatest trials, their love would still remain. So it felt right to finish the story
The part about the wedding ring in particular was my favorite because it brought me back to the time Pam invited Jim to be part of the Finer Things Club and he didn't take it seriously so it blew up in his face.
It was harder than I thought making a story but I had a lot of fun doing it. I hope inspiration strikes soon!
Date: February 07, 2021 06:48 am Title: Better Than A Fairytale
Ha! I love the details you've added to Jim's drunken night in Colorado here. And the failed Jim prank about them getting divorced does seem like the sort thing he might try to pull off.
But mostly I thought that having the actual ceremony he'd envisioned with Athleap, with Pam at his side, was a really nice way to wrap this one up - bringing it full circle.
Congrats on finishing your first story! It was a good concept to explore and a fun way to play with canon. Looking forward to the next one!!!!
Thank you so much for reading the entire story!
With Colorado, I wanted Jim to visit again and I thought what could Michael do to embarrass him further. I've said this before but Michael was such a fun character to write since he can pretty much do and say anything and it will sound believable.
With the divorce joke, I considered it a 10% possibility that it will happen when I wrote this story. So I inserted it as a joke and it really does fit in with Jim especially in front of a camera.
I wasn't supposed to include the ceremony but yes, like you said, it was the perfect way to wrap the story up and it ended the way I wanted it for the two of them. Jim waited for Pam and Pam eventually came through for Jim.
It was really fun writing this because my favorite storyline is their marriage (Season 9 to be exact) and I really hope I did it justice.