Date: July 02, 2021 05:05 am Title: Chapter 3
“Tell me what to do,” he pleaded in a low voice.
Well that hurt my heart.
I think you’ve done a really great job at figuring out how this would look if the tables really had been turned. I do think that Jim would be quick to defend Katy and then throw himself into trying to force happiness after admitting that he wasn’t happy. I mean, we saw him do that with Karen! And I think you write their arguments super well, and have a really great balance of Pam being a little bit bold, but not so bold that she lets Jim know how she feels. Excellent job as always my friend, can’t wait to see how you finish this one up!
Date: July 01, 2021 02:39 pm Title: Chapter 3
Booze cruise! Ahh this was so good - I really enjoyed them actually going a bit further and Pam being more honest with him: it feels very in keeping with the fact that he doesn't seem to have shut her down in this fic the same way Pam did with him in canon, so she might not feel she has to tread as carefully as canon Jim? And I like that it's not just about her wanting Jim for herself, but also genuinely caring about him. And then the complaint to Toby leading to an actual confrontation between them is so well done (again, you could definitely see this happening with a Jim who's more direct than Pam) - and him begging her to tell him what to do is just heart-breaking. As is him standing there watching her go. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: July 01, 2021 02:26 pm Title: Chapter 2
I'm loving how you've remixed some of the canon moments with the rooftop date (Jim's reaction being an awkward joke instead of angry defensiveness feels v Jim: it's interesting to think about how he'd handle things vs how canon Pam did), and then the party - and having it be for Isabel who is *actually* interested in Dwight is so, so good. Her whole exchange with Pam is hilarious. I really enjoyed the flipped bedroom scene - the way you've written them is so lovely (her genuine joy, and pining, and the playfulness - it's incredibly sweet). Also, I like the nod to single Pam maybe living a fuller life with the tickets and mementos in her room. I'm so intrigued by Jim's relationship with Katy, and the interaction with Phyllis at the end. And Jim's little 'fuck' - so on some level he's clearly aware of what's actually going on...
Date: July 01, 2021 02:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love the idea of this, I'm hooked! I really like the way you've written Pam, with her being a bit bolder (especially without Roy dragging her down...), and the progression of her feelings for Jim. Her initially trying to deny those feelings feels very in character too, thank god for Isabel. Also the little hints that Jim maybe (definitely) feels the same way. And having Katy work in customer services is genius! Kelly instantly clocking her as a threat to Ryan really cracked me up. This is so great!
Date: June 26, 2021 11:34 am Title: Chapter 3
It's interesting to see how much *angrier* they both seem with each other in this scenario. The Booze Cruise dialogue is snippier, the confrontation after the complaint (which Pam didn't bother to pull back) is more aggressive. I don't know what it means, but it feels true, and it's striking.
I also thought you did well with using this to shine a light on canon. Like, the way Pam treats and thinks about Roy re-illustrates just how *brutal* this night must have been for Katy.
Date: June 22, 2021 06:24 pm Title: Chapter 3
So even though there was a lot of angst in this chapter, I kinda liked it. I liked the fact that in this world, Pam is able to say more of the things they should have told each other in canon. Of course she's still scared to say the biggest thing, but it's a lot further here than where they were at the same time in S2.
Only one more chapter? Hoo boy, hang onto your hats because it feels like we still have a lot to get through before this is all over. Good job.
Date: June 19, 2021 07:14 am Title: Chapter 2
First, I love the image of millionaire playboy Dwight, and I would like you to write that fic.
Second, I'm verrrry interested in what's going on with Katy. I feel like there's a sense of mystery about what she's really up to we don't really get in canon with Roy, with whom it's depressingly clear to everyone except Pam.
And third, interesting choices with Phyllis here! She seems a lot more actively malevolently in this version of E-Mail Surveillance. What's with that, Phyllis?
Date: June 16, 2021 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 2
So this Pam is being a bit more forward in an attempt to try and hide her feelings for Jim. Sadly it doesn't work, as we all kind of figured.
What's interesting is the lack of Katy and the way Jim responds to the questioning when asked about it. Something tells me there's trouble between those two.
However lots of fun flirty moments at the party. Really kind of fun to get it at Pam's place rather than how we saw it in canon. Also without the cameras present it feels like they have just a little more wiggle room. Phyllis being the same kind of nosy person she is also tracks. She's seen that glint in Pam's eye and has also probably seen the same in Jim's. Looking forward to seeing where we go from here.
Date: June 16, 2021 08:02 pm Title: Chapter 2
Phyllis is such a sneaky gossipy old hen and I love it. I am loving this different imagining of what might be and you’re doing it so well! So often when it’s the girl pining away it can come across as like…desperate? Idk if that’s the right word, but that’s not what is happening here. It feels real and Pam is behaving just how someone who is in love with her best friend would. I can’t wait to see what comes after her overhearing this!
Date: June 09, 2021 08:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
I looove this start! I love when what we know is twisted into something new but kind of familiar but totally different and it will be so amazing to see how you write Pam being the one to be there for Jim and show these little peeks into how much she loves him. You’re so good, Sprinkles! Teach me your ways!
Date: June 07, 2021 09:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well this is a twist to be sure. Pam pining away while watching Jim and Katy be a couple. Especially with Katy also now in the office. This Pam seems a bit more apt to seek out other company than Jim was in canon. Especially with her asking out Roy there basically in front of everyone. Feels like she's playing the "try to make Jim jealous card." Not sure how well that's going to work out for her to be honest, but we'll see where this goes.
Feels like a good set up chapter for the ups and downs that are sure to come.
Date: June 07, 2021 08:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
*sigh* you know I have to bring up the Pam/Ryan comment, right? Why.
Nonetheless, this was fantastic. I love the switched roles, and Katy actually working right in the office is sure to add some extra tension. I can’t wait to see what you do with this, what similarities and differences and twists you bring. I love it!
Date: June 07, 2021 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
I always like this twist - I feel there's a lot of interesting things to say about gender here that this gets me thinking about. Roy trying to appeal to Pam without that shared history is an intriguing idea (although I'm already seeing signs this is going to go about as well for Roy-Katy as it did for Katy-Katy) as is Katy who is a genuine long-term prospect for Jim - not a character we see get a lot of development most of the time. Looking forward to seeing where you go with it.