Date: April 22, 2022 07:35 pm Title: Chapter 2. Strange Trip
Ugh, I loved this! You write Pam EXTREMELY well, and I loved the imagery here of them going back in time! Whoa, this was SERIOUSLY good, Max!
I watched and read a ton of times how it happened in HP and then added some of my own bits. Glad you enjoyed it.
Thanks so much.
Date: October 15, 2021 02:14 pm Title: Chapter 2. Strange Trip
I’m so intrigued at how they are going to get out of this! It was such a well written chapter that the end snuck up on me.
Excellent use of Gaussian, by the way.
The entire sequence of them traveling was so well done and the imagery so vivid that I could see everything so clearly in my mind. Great chapter!
You know how certain scenes come to you - and are written before everything else...and the everything else gets filled in around it? That was the time traveling sequence so I'm tickled you noticed it and could see it.
Time travel does create a lot of limitations but half the fun here is getting them out of it (the other half is the hard part).
Thank you again for such high praise - really does mean so much.
Date: September 17, 2021 10:53 am Title: Chapter 2. Strange Trip
Behind with my reviews. In we go... you've totally nailed the characterisations, especially Michael, in this one.
Author's Response: Behind on my responses so we're even....thank you - Michael is fun to write.
Date: September 12, 2021 02:45 pm Title: Chapter 2. Strange Trip
Ok, I think this is the best possible outcome I could’ve hoped for: Michael and Pam time travelling together! (And Pam-trotter, LOL). I love the way you’ve written Jim’s excitement about the prank - him cupping the time turner like a baby bird as he hands it to her is just a lovely image. And Michael continues to be brilliantly Michael in all of this - ‘Jim’s a wizard?’ and ‘Ahhh, pizza and popcorn. Wow, I’m starving. Time traveling really makes you hungry’ are I think two of my favourite lines here. I also enjoyed Pam standing on her own foot to try to work out if she was dreaming. And the little dig at Roy with him acting like laying the carpet is the most strenuous work he’s done, because…seriously. I really, really can’t wait to see where exactly in time they’ve ended up - I feel like Michael’s confusion with the hours and minutes is going to bite them…
Yes these two will make for a lot of hijinks. Jim's a Wizard was my favorite line too so glad you enjoyed it.
Oh - how right you are, they'll have a lot more time to kill in the past than they'll know what to do with (and lots for me to write).
Thanks again for your reviews - I do love and appreciate them.
Date: September 11, 2021 08:41 pm Title: Chapter 2. Strange Trip
Oh boy! I wonder how far if she messed up minutes vs hours plus add in the Michael factor....
Excited! Love the character work in Pam's head too about Roy and Jim and Michael.
The Michael will come into play a lot in this fic. I'm glad you are here for it.
Thanks for your kind words and excitement.
Date: September 11, 2021 04:59 pm Title: Chapter 2. Strange Trip
YAY!!! I love that it's Pam and Michael who did the time-traveling, I can just see all the amazing opportunities you've set up here.
*The fact was irrelevant because they did not live in the world that JK Rowling created and what he had in his hands was a toy.*
This made me laugh out loud, hahah
Update soon please!
Yes, those two together provides a lot of material and hopefully more opportunities to make you laugh out loud.
Thanks for reviews that make me smile and make me want to get the next update out sooner.
Date: September 10, 2021 06:51 pm Title: Chapter 2. Strange Trip
Michael being easily fooled by a cheap piece of mass-produced memorabilia that Pam is explicitly telling him is a cheap piece of mass-produced memorabilia is just... so very Michael.
I love Pam's very distinct fear of disappointing Jim by screwing up the prank... and how she's sad to let him down while by contrast just worrying about Roy getting increasingly grumpy with her.
"She had to wonder what he did in the warehouse every day if having to lay carpet with Darryl yesterday was that much more strenuous than his regular job of hauling pallets and loading boxes." GOOD QUESTION, ROY. Especially knowing that you napped through part of that!
You did a good job placing us in Pam's head and letting us see through her eyes what their time travel looks like. And Michael immediately and blithely accepting that they actually time traveled was a really nice touch.
Looking forward to the next update here!
I'm so glad you are enjoying it so far... lots to come with a lot more of Michael's Michaelness, Roy's Royness, and lots of new surprises.
Thanks as always for your fast and fun to read reviews.
Date: September 10, 2021 06:37 pm Title: Chapter 2. Strange Trip
So the real plot begins. I love how just exasperated Pam is with Micheal. His child-like facination of the Time Turner is fun to read. He's a guy that likes his toys and he's just about as gulible as Dwight. Makes sense he'd think it was real. We can also feel Pam's frustration with Roy. How he's getting to be more and more irritating, while times away from him seem to be good memories.
Then low and behold they actually went back in time. How far and what will happen from here on out? Well that remains to be seen. Should be a ton of fun for sure.
Also thanks for the shout out for Little warrior's birthday. He's already smashed one cupcake all over himself and has more to come. Should be fun.
Hope it was a fun birthday for everyone.
Well I told you they would and I do hope it is a lot of fun - I sure have been fun writing it when I wasn't getting frustrated with the constraints time travel plots can add to a fic.
Thanks as always for the review.