Date: April 22, 2022 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 5 -Twins
Oh Michael....
Michael, Michael, Michael.....
Author's Response: is very fun to write.
Date: October 03, 2021 09:12 pm Title: Chapter 5 -Twins
For a short chapter there seems to be a lot here. Future Pam has already been spotted by Past People. And it's Roy, and he is his typical boorish self. Basically yelling at Pam to bring him booze the not even hiding the fact he's got a wandering eye. Great job in painting him as the oaf who Pam really should have grown past by now.
Again Future Pam's thoughts betray her. Almost feels like she's putting together a puzzle piece by piece but the box that has the final picture on it is facedown. However she's smart enough to know how the pieces go together even if the final image is still a mystery. In this case the piece is that while Roy wouldn't realize she's different due to her clothes, Jim would. Jim is the guy in her life who notices the small details that bring her to life. Looking forward to her adding a few more puzzle pieces as she reflects on things further.
Randall is on to things now. That should be fun. Nice way to keep that going.
Future Michael is kind of behaving himself. Granted he's also sick as a dog, though I wonder if that's due to bad pizza or the effects of time travel. I don't remember Harry or Hermione becoming sick to their stomachs due to Time Turner effects. Still it's an effective way to keep the two Michael's apart which could only be a good thing right now.
Also feels like Pam has a little hiding place. Mayhaps a perch to observe other instances from this night? As always looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
The more I write him, the more I hate him and then wonder why oh why did that relationship last as long as it did - (I'll tell you writing her thoughts on that may be harder than keeping up the continuity in a time travel story)
But I think you described it well as a puzzle and I'm excited to share the pieces with you chapter by chapter.
Original Michael had his bout of seasickness in the episode so lets just say this is a combo of the pizza, the time travel, the boat and plot device.
Thanks for the review as always.
1 [Report This]Date: October 03, 2021 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 5 -Twins
You continue to do well plumbing the dark depths of Michael's brain. Because clearly his first reaction to the thought of twin Pams would be the sexual implications, and of course he would think someone might mistake Katy for Pam's twin, and of course this would all, somehow, in his head, turn into a justification for rebellion against Captain Jack. That's Michael to a T.
So we already have one revelation - Roy's wandering eye. Feels like there's a lot Pam could witness tonight that would be a difference-maker.
You did well using the multiple Pams to set up the contrast between Pam and Roy with [ast!Pam's thought about not wanting to engage in their in-jokes in front of Roy and Katy and between Roy and Jim with present!Pam's presumption that obviously Jim was more likely to notice her clothing change than her actual fiancee.
I like that Pam is genre aware here... she's coming to this with a basic understanding of the risks of time travel and it shows, and she's also aware that both in general and in dealing with Michael the chances that this very important night for her will be knocked off course are high. I share her worry... you know, kind of.
I am increasingly desperate to know what's going on with Randall. Although given that he clearly knows something about time travel, maybe however that happened also explains how they were able to get the shot of Dwight...
Author's Response:
Thanks - Michael seems to come natural to me (a little scary, right) but maybe it's because I raised boys who are still not quite adults...or maybe it's that with him as long as its kind of ridiculous (or sex-related or inappropriate) it can work.
Remember the mention of the blue sweater (a little cheat for a loyal reader).
Yes, remember Pam does believe in ghosts and while up until now not time travel, she does have an interest in things slightly mystical (and love her some Harry Potter) so she would be somewhat versed in the rules.
More Randall is coming but really he is a step to - nahhh, I can't - sorry you're going to have to wait - you'll thank me. I hope it will be worth it.
Date: October 03, 2021 08:19 pm Title: Chapter 5 -Twins
I love the idea that Pam thinks Michael is playing hide and seek, lol.
Oh my god if Future Pam catches Roy cheating on her I will scream (in a good way). Can't wait to see what's next...
Author's Response: I think that's the one line he won't cross (or will he?). I really do enjoy the Pam/Michael relationship - glad you do too.