I cant keep picking favorite chapters okay UGH bec this one is now top 1.
That modern family nod crushed me BAD could u also do a fix it for andy and haley?? No?? Ill just take this then thank you much
You handled the end of erin and andy SO WELL it's not funny and the budding of Pete and erin SO WELL
I could literally kiss your brain for the idea of individual promos. Those were absolutely beautiful and ending it with Michael's? I SOBBED OMG!?
the meeting with david and the CALLBACKS you're too god at call backs.
JUST UGH. I love this story so so much in my heart THIS is season 9

Author's Response:

Wow, I really appreciate it!  The promos themselves were my favorite part of this rewrite.  It's odd how they handled the ones in the show, especially the whole Polish angle.  The international angle was neat, though.

Thanks for the review! 

I think you have a good balance of preserving what's funny about this episode and addressing some of the issues with the more dramatic portions. (I'm not going to lie, I'm enjoying the Dwight-Clark dynamic more than I remember doing in canon.)

Obviously the Jam side of this changes a lot

It's really nice to see Andy and Erin get a decent ending - they get to acknowledge what they meant to each other without pretending that they're meant to be anymore.

The more character-focused promos seems like the right call - in addition to feeling more like something a TV network would do to promote a show, it does feel a little more likely to promote some introspection. I thought Pam's reaction worked - obviously she's in a very different place than she is in canon, but this feels very much in line with her comments about how she felt watching the documentary in the finale. The fact that Jim and Pam are not in a good place in this episode drowns out their reaction to seeing every part of their story playing out like this, and I'm glad you gave that more emphasis.

And I'm *very* pleased to see the AARM video being set up, and Jim making progress towards shaking himself loose from Scranton in the end.

Author's Response:

Appreciated!  Out of the two New Guys, I felt Clark got the most development.  He has more of a personality, and I want to focus on the repertoire he has with Dwight, which will contribute to "Livin' the Dream".

Yeah, I wanted to present why people love the relationship to begin with, despite it not being substantial.  They were just a fun pair of friends.  All they needed to be, really.

Yeah, the Denmark trailer was neat but I was also like "...wouldn't Denmark care after the show gained notoriety?"  I just wanted to put a lens on the main characters to show how far they've come.  And the issue with the canon version is Jim didn't have the time to really understand what he was losing because of his job and Pam was so strung-out that she looks at everything through nostalgia goggles, just wanting him home.  And, yeah, I did want to hint at their reactions to the doc in the finale, with Jim's reflective and appreciative attitude and Pam's inner-frustration at her younger self.  These are very valid and in-character reactions.

And the AARM video *was* gonna be set up in AARM, but I figured that it'd be neat if Brent actively broke the rules after seeing the office workers get this strung out and realizing how much his employers actually got away with.  Jim and Pam are his friends and they deserve something after all they went through.  And Jim really did need to move on from Scranton.  He loves everyone there, but it's extremely limiting and not how he wants to provide for his family.

Thanks for the review, as always!