1 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2020 04:06 pm Title: Chapter 4: Light
"It is as if she has left this negative space specifically for him to fill (and maybe she has)." is a truly amazing line.
Author's Response: Ooh, thanks. I love imagining that first night.
Date: January 24, 2008 06:33 pm Title: Chapter 4: Light
this so makes up for the previous heartbreak. jim is there. the perfect sleepless night. no joke, tears of happiness. because i cry ay anything. specially happy things
Author's Response:
I am very, very pleased that they are tears of happiness! I think they needed a good long night of talking so they could clear the air and move forward. This review is a happy thing! Thank you!
Date: January 14, 2008 12:56 pm Title: Chapter 4: Light
Oh, so sweeeeet - I'm in love with this story!
Author's Response: And it loves you back! Thank you so much!!
Date: January 14, 2008 12:42 pm Title: Chapter 4: Light
I have this vision of a Jim Talking Head, "Pam and I had a long talk last night..." but of course this would be a good long talk, not a "I'm really glad you're here" talk. ;)
This is a really neat first date 'after' fic; this line says it all: "A simple dinner date has turned into a night of revelations, of confession and apology and proclamation." Hooray for this sort of sleepless night.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yes, I don't think Jim will be complaining after this long night of talking. Especially because once they talk through everything, it'll be done. I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter!
Date: January 14, 2008 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 4: Light
Yay! I was hoping Jim would be responsible for a sleepless night in a good way!
Author's Response: Finally, right? Heh. Yes, I couldn't go on with the angst forever- I have fluff in my soul. One more to go!
Date: January 14, 2008 11:11 am Title: Chapter 4: Light
I'm sitting here at work with tears in my eyes after reading this. What a beautifully crafted chapter, nqllisi! I love the idea of her creating "negative space" for Jim to be - that's just gorgeous. I could quote the whole chapter back to you, every word is so perfectly chosen and placed. Just wonderful.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! She was doing so well, but she just needed him to complete the picture, didn't she? Thank you for being such a great champion of my little story. One more to go!
Date: January 14, 2008 11:03 am Title: Chapter 4: Light
Hmm. I can't remember how I worded my comments that got eaten.
I love the idea of it being quiet enough for a yawn to echo. That's brilliant. And thank you for letting them have this talk (and cry and confession and revelation) while sober.
Author's Response: Thank you! And it's funny you say that about being sober, because they were drinking wine in my first draft and it just didn't seem right. So, you're very welcome! Hee. One more to go!
9 [Report This]Date: January 14, 2008 10:32 am Title: Chapter 4: Light
Wow. Really nice chapter, nqllisi.
"It is very, very late- but she is immensely relieved to know that it is not too late." Love that line.
Author's Response: Thank you! It was a very satisfying chapter to write!