Date: December 11, 2007 10:40 am Title: Chapter 1
Ohhhhh I am so impatient but you can't leave it hanging like this (TWSS). Update soon?
10 [Report This]Date: November 20, 2007 06:30 am Title: Chapter 1
More? Please?
Date: November 10, 2007 12:54 pm Title: Chapter 5
Oh thank god they're okay. Yay, twins!
Date: November 08, 2007 06:44 am Title: Chapter 5
Twins? Wow that was a surprise. I hope Daryll beats up Roy for Jim. ;)
Date: November 07, 2007 11:39 pm Title: Chapter 5
So sad but I love it!
Date: November 07, 2007 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 5
Aww PB&J twins. But thank god that the babies are ok. I was scared that this would get really angsty.
I can't wait for Jim's call to Daryl I hope that it is intense and maybe a little evil. Jim being the man and protector will be good.
Date: November 06, 2007 09:12 am Title: Chapter 4
This is really well done. (beets has 2 e's though) ;)
But please, please, please let the baby be ok. I might lose my freakin' mind if s/he isnt. :(
Author's Response: haha you'll lose your freakin' mind? that's what andy said. and that's where my penname comes from. i don't know if you said that on purpose, but i definetly laughed.rnrni really don't know what I'm going to do for the next chapter. Well actually I think I might, but I'm just afraid that which ever outcome I choose, it will be the wrong choice. so this is kinda tough. One one hand, I don't want to piss the entire mtt community off. But then again, I have to be realistic. You'll just have to wait and see. rnrnBut thanks so much! You rule.
Date: November 06, 2007 07:49 am Title: Chapter 1
Please say that Jim goes with her to the hospital to make sure mama and baby are ok and then gives the *** whoopin' of the century!! Great story. More please.
Author's Response: In the wise words of Jamarama, "karma is a b**tch."rnThat's all I'll say.rnBut thanks so much for the review! Greatly apreciated :)
Date: November 06, 2007 07:30 am Title: Chapter 4
Wow I really liked the long chapter. I liked the joking between Jim and Pam even in such a horrible place and condition. I'm glad you added this in about the ambulance ride.
I wonder what you are going to do with Jim and Roy. The one thing is though that i am kind of scared of is if you make them fight I can only picture Roy winning because he always seemed stronger than Jim... but than again when you are furious like Jim anything can happen.
Good job can't wait for chapter 5
Author's Response: Don't be scared. rnrnTrust me.rnrnI have something in mind. . .rnrnAnd btw, thank you so much for the continuous reviews. They not only make my day, but kind of keep this story alive. Thank you for all the help. The reviews are really handy, both for me and the story!
Date: November 06, 2007 06:10 am Title: Chapter 4
I'm ready for a good a** kicking of Roy but I don't want Jim to do anything too severe to land him in trouble!
Author's Response: Jim's a smart man. You'll see. :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2007 09:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well I'm certainly glad you added that second part to chapter 4. I hope, by the end of the story (which better NOT come soon), that Roy learns one lesson: that karma is a b*tch.
Author's Response: Haha thanks! Me too. He will learn that. I think it's something he should have learned years ago, though. But since Greg Daniels didn't put it in any of the real scripts, I'm just going to put it in mine. For kicks.
Date: November 05, 2007 08:41 pm Title: Chapter 4
Wow, intense! Please tell me Jim kills that mofo?
Date: November 05, 2007 08:21 pm Title: Chapter 4
Hi! I really like the premise of the story, but I wouldn't mind if it were a bit longer. I get so excited to read it but then it seems to stop right when i get really into it. Still cant wait for the next chap though!
Author's Response: Thanks! I actually just changed chapter 4 and it has now doubled at least twice in length. So hope that helps :)rnI have a lot on my mind for chapter 5. It may end up being the longest one. I don't know yet. We'll see.
9 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2007 08:18 pm Title: Chapter 4
While angsty, this story is very well written and attention grabbing overreaction. I'm really enjoying it and can't wait for the next installment.
Date: November 05, 2007 07:12 pm Title: Chapter 4
This was just way too short. I needed an angry Jim, but I liked Jim coming to the rescue.
I was confused about this in the last chapter and a little now: Did Roy smash the picture of him and Pam on Pam's face?
I didn't really understand what he had done.
And I don't have a title for you, but maybe when the story is complete something will come to you. Great writing by the way, I can't wait for the long chapter 5.
Author's Response: Okay. Well basically I edited Roy's attack in chapter three, so I think it should be a lot clearer now. What I had in mind was that he threw the frame at her face, because the rest of her body was covered by the trenchcoat and stuff. I hope it makes more sense.rnrnAnd about the shortness of chapter 4: I'm debating whether or not I should add my next part to the end of chapter 4 or use it to start of chapter 5. Maybe I should put it in chapter 4. . . Thanks for helping me make that decision, haha. :)
Date: November 05, 2007 03:05 pm Title: Chapter 3
Unbelievably complex story. I literally can't wait for more, and it's cruel of you to end a chapter like that to make us suffer. :D
Date: November 05, 2007 10:09 am Title: Chapter 3
:( Can you please update this so I can be happy again? Haha. I like this story, it's good.
Date: November 05, 2007 08:25 am Title: Chapter 1
Yikes, that one got dark in a hurry. I never imagined Roy quite that violent. Hopefully it will brighter up before too long.
Author's Response: I just chanaged chapter three a teeny tiny bit to make it clearer why he was acting so irrationally/violently. BEfore, he said he was hungover, but I changed it just now so that he says that he's drunk. So I guess he's violent because his drunk. Thanks for the help! :)
Date: November 05, 2007 04:48 am Title: Chapter 3
I like this story, but that seemed a little violent for Roy. I know, it's all fiction, blah blah blah, but please don't make him so violent in later chapters. Keep up the good work!
Date: November 05, 2007 03:06 am Title: Chapter 3
Oh my goodness. Poor Pam! Poor Jim! Roy is such an a***hole! I hope Jim can get to Pam in time coz i don't think a little bubba would survive that. Jim would be so so worried bout Pam and baby.
By the bye, Pam probably isn't THAT big if she's only 6 weeks or so.
Jeepers. I hope Roy gets the crap beaten out of him.
Author's Response: oh thanks. yeah I changed it to months just now; that was a mistake. See, I'm seeing if reviewers can kinda be like a big melting pot of mini-betas for me. So thanks for beta-ing, sort of! :)
Date: November 05, 2007 12:40 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm enjoying this. I hope Jim kicks his ass. Although I think you made a mistake in the first chapter - she wouldn't have a big belly if she was only five and a half weeks! Maybe you meant months?
Author's Response: yes I do mean months. ..I just fixed it. Thanks! haha
Date: November 04, 2007 10:30 pm Title: Chapter 3
Ok holy crap! I read the first two chapters and I wasloving the sweet Jim/Pam interactions...thought maybe the Roy thing would be awkward....but wow--I can't believe Jim wasn't waiting inside the lobby to discreetly watch...and where was the security guard from the lobby? Poor Pam and poor Jam-baby!
Hope everything will turn out ok!
Author's Response: Hmm. . I should probably address that. Jim, I mean. Let me take care of that!rnrnPS-- I'm hoping that reviews can act as mini-betas, so thanks for beta-ing, i guess! :)
Date: November 04, 2007 10:18 pm Title: Chapter 3
wow. wow.
wow.
can't wait for more!!
10 [Report This]Date: November 04, 2007 09:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
oh. my. gosh.
ditto, PokerChips. i'm shaking.
This is really nice. Especially for its lack of betaness. But please continue. please please please!??
Date: November 04, 2007 09:02 pm Title: Chapter 3
holy F***. update soon please please please!