Date: January 01, 2008 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 10
I liked this chapter...especially Pam's walk back to the house. To me, it makes sense that she couldn't move the car...and it ties in with your last chapter about Pam not really being ready to let go.
And Michael...as socially inept as he is, I picture him being different in a situation like this. Much like he was at the end of Business School with Pam, or Booze Cruise with Jim. I imagine his compassion coming out, and that he'll be an unlikely source of strength for Pam (of course I could really be wrong, and you might just play him for comic relief, which would be ok too). :)
Either way, I look forward to the end of the story. You've done a great job, and I'm excited for more!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed this chapter. And, I totally agree. I think Mike will be a perfect source of comfort in this time...of course, he isnt perfect, so there's bound to be some awkward Michael moments.
Thanks for reading. I appreciate the review very much.
Date: December 27, 2007 11:23 pm Title: Chapter 9
Well done. Just letting you know, I enjoy a good deathfic. I can't say why other people don't... maybe most people like happy stuff in what they read. I like reading sad things because they make me appreciate life a little more afterwards.
-SL
Author's Response:
Thank you for such a great review. It's so true....about appreciating life when you hear stories that are about things that you havent technically experienced. Sadly, most people have suffered from a loss and it has affected them greatly....But, if a deathfic like this can speak something into someone about life and the things of this world, then I've done my job, right?
Thanks again. I hope to hear more from you in the future. You're a great reviewer. Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: December 27, 2007 08:34 pm Title: Chapter 9
another beautiful chapter. it's so touching and real.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I hope to complete this soon. THanks again for reading!
9 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2007 05:48 am Title: Chapter 8
I'm teary again, BeckySue. Beautiful chapter. Really great job.
Author's Response: Wow...thank you. I appreciate you leaving me a review. Keep on reading!
Date: December 03, 2007 07:54 pm Title: Chapter 8
I don't know if I would say that I like death fic in general, or that I would seek it out, but I do like what you have got going here! There's only so much fluff and romantic angst a person can take. It's nice to have a different genre. Good work!
Author's Response: Thanks. I hope this is coming along well and that its not just about the death, but about the journey. THanks for reading and reviewing though!
Date: December 03, 2007 07:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
I just caught up with this story...and since you mentioned in your author's notes at the end that most people don't like death fics, I felt the need to comment.
While, as a whole, death fics aren't my first choice in fanfic reading, I do like them to an extent. As you mentioned in your first chapter, it's an exploration of sorts into writing something different, more challenging. Getting into someone's head, and attempting to keep them in character while they are going through something as life changing as losing a spouse is very challenging. And very cathartic in a way, as well.
Everyone reacts differently to intense situations, and I think in writing a fic like this, we tend to project some of our own thoughts and feelings on the subject into the writing. And as long as the main character stays "in character", I think that's very much ok.
I've enjoyed reading Pam's journey thus far, and hope to read more. I applaud you for taking on such a difficult topic, and I'm glad to see you've kept up with it. Well done!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your input! I agree with you....alot of people react differently and put their own twist on the situation. I'm not sure how Pam would really react, but if I found the love of my life and he died after only a short time of marriage, I would be the one to go hide in my room, etc. So, I guess this is about what I would do....but, I hope it translates for Pam well too.
Thank you for your comments! I appreciate it!
Date: December 02, 2007 04:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
i have a lump in my throat and now people are going to ask why I was crying...beautiful writing though...you should definitely think of writing some fluff in a different story
Author's Response: Sorry for pulling out your heart and dropping it into a vat of boiling tears. And, kicking you in the crotch with a frozen sledgehammer. Its just the way it has to be. But, I have the itch for more fluffly things, just not at this moment. So, thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it. Thanks.
10 [Report This]Date: December 02, 2007 04:47 pm Title: Chapter 7
You made me cry BeckySue. It pains me to read this story, but it's so good that I can't stay away. Great job...but I hope you throw us a little bit of happy down the line...
Author's Response:
I'm sorry.....this story does kinda kick ya in the grief bone, doenst it? Welp, I hope to have somewhat of a happy ending... Thanks for reading and letting me know what you think! I appreciate it! You made my day brighter!
Date: December 01, 2007 12:53 pm Title: Chapter 6
wow.
Author's Response: hehehe...thanks for reading.
Date: November 30, 2007 02:39 pm Title: Chapter 5
Gah! OK, if you want honesty BeckySue, I avoided this fic for awhile because JAM is my guilty pleasure and I like it pretty sweet. ;) But this is beautifully written. Just really, really good. I don't know if my heart can take much more but you have done a super job with a tough, tough topic. Kudos!
Author's Response: Wow...such a good compliment. I really hope to keep you reading it....and thanks for even taking a chance on it. I appreciate you reading and reviewing! Thanks!
Date: November 30, 2007 01:11 pm Title: Chapter 5
wow. you got me in tears now.
this is so touching... wow. im just speechless right now.
but this is VERY well done, even if it kills me
to read about a death, let alone Jim's. very well done.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I appreciate it!
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2007 06:23 pm Title: Chapter 5
this is an absolutely heartbreaking chapter. but in a wonderful story way. you know, lol
Author's Response: Thanks. I appreciate the review! More will be up....well, until I run out of chapter...so, keep reading and reviewing! Tell people to come read this fic! I need all the PR I can get!
Date: November 29, 2007 06:11 pm Title: Chapter 5
Such a sad sad sad chapter i really did cry. Especially at the memories part
Author's Response: Wow. Thanks. I didn't know I could actually make people cry with a fic. I've had several people say that. I don't know whether to say sorry or to feel excited that it moved you. So....thanks for reading and keep up the reviews! I look forward to JamLover's comments! :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2007 11:49 am Title: Chapter 4
I need to remember to bring a box of tissues before I read this!
Author's Response:
Hehehe. I hope you're enjoying this! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: November 28, 2007 09:06 pm Title: Chapter 4
Wow i really almost cried at the sneaker's part.
Author's Response:
It's the little things like that that get me. Its heartbreaking.
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
8 [Report This]Date: November 28, 2007 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 4
Poor Pam. I can only imagine her pain. But I can also imagine the pain the kids are going through having lost their dad and now their mom has secluded herself.
And how sweet of EmilyH. to help you with something she unfortunately knows too much about.
Author's Response:
Yes. She's great. It's unfortunate that this happens to kids everywhere....I've lost people close to me but never a parent. And sadly, EH is one of many that I know that have lost their father. This story was inspired by their stories and one story in particular that is near and dear to my heart.
Thanks for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it.
10 [Report This]Date: November 28, 2007 07:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. I love and hate this story at the same time. You really got me with the whole laughing and then the sneakers. So subtle, but so strong.
Yeah. Thanks a lot for making me super dooper sad. The funny thing is. . .I'll be happy when you update. . .just so that I can be sad again. Oh goodness. . .
Author's Response: It's a vicious cycle, really. I too feel sad writing and reading this....and I created it. So, I feel ya. Get ready to feel happy again, because I'll be posting tomorrow sometime. Thanks for reading and reviewing! Keep it up!
8 [Report This]Date: November 27, 2007 08:54 pm Title: Chapter 3
"From the hospital, I drove the long drive home, parked the car, walked into the house and found our bed. I didn’t intend ever leaving that spot again."
You're doing an amazing job letting us see Pam's pain and heartbreak in the most normal of words and actions.
Author's Response: Thanks! :) I try.....
8 [Report This]Date: November 27, 2007 08:47 pm Title: Chapter 2
"It was the only thing that was keeping me going, and yet, it was the very thing that Jim lacked. If he didn’t have a heartbeat, I didn’t want one either."
OK - that truly brought tears to my eyes. Truly. You are doing an awesome job with this incredibly sad story.
Author's Response:
Thanks for pointing out parts that you like. I love when people do that to my work. It truly makes me feel like an author. And plus, it makes me feel really swell!!!
Thanks agian for reading and reviewing!
8 [Report This]Date: November 27, 2007 08:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like to read angsty stories when they're complete so I can jump to the end to see if it ends happily. But since Jim dies in the first chapter, I assume there won't be a happy ending. Seriously though, this first chapter was very well done.
Author's Response: I agree. I like to know if things end happily too...but with this one....its hard to say the ending will be happy. But, we'll see when it comes to that point. Thanks for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: November 27, 2007 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 3
as much as i hate the thought of jim's death, i really like this story. i like the style of pam telling the story in past-tense. and random note: it makes me think of that article that a woman wrote and got a lot of publicity for about how she'd be able to survive the death of one of her children, but not the death of her husband because he was her support. yeah, had to throw that in. looking forward to reading more!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I guess I've never read that article. Crazy....
Thanks again for reading! I appreciate it!
Date: November 27, 2007 07:28 pm Title: Chapter 3
“Pam,” I corrected. I hated that they were using my last name. Why did they have to rub it in?
Guh..... Poor Jim! *insert sad face here*
I love the additions you made about their kids and whatnot. You rock :D This just takes a lot out of me when I'm reading this! So heartbreaking and bittersweet. :(
But great writing BS!
Author's Response: Thanks! I rock because you rock...thanks a million for everything!
Date: November 27, 2007 05:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
I kinda wish Jim had a twin who had heart problems and ran on the trail...as bad as that sounds. Good writing though. My heart aches for Pam.
Author's Response:
Hehehe...I do to....sad stuff....
Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: November 27, 2007 05:25 pm Title: Chapter 3
Awesome writting. I do enjoy the angst/death fanfics. Though on this one I keep thinking there will be a twist somewhere :-)
Keep 'em coming!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the feedback! :)
Date: November 26, 2007 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh wow this story is looking so good. I think you've captured Pam's traumatic state really, really well. I got chills when you described her throwing the lamp at the CD player. Sad, but very good. Please continue!
Author's Response: Hehehe. Thanks! The whole throwing lamp thing is probably what I would do at that moment. It's not really violent but its just the thing that tells someone that they're outta control, you know? Throwing stuff just because they can....so, thanks. I hope to have more up soon. Thanks!