Date: June 03, 2008 08:17 am Title: Chapter 1
Beautifully done. Michael is just a bottomless pit of need, but here we see that Ryan is, too, in his way. Very, very nice.
Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you so much! You described exactly what I was trying to convey, and that makes me ridiculously happy. Thanks again for the review, I really appreciate it!
Date: June 03, 2008 08:10 am Title: Chapter 1
Aww, that was strangely, creepily, sweet actually! Michael really does care about Ryan.
Author's Response: Ha, thanks so much! That is exactly what I was going for.
10 [Report This]Date: June 01, 2008 12:03 am Title: Chapter 1
This is a great Ryan portrayal... I think the moment he realizes Michael's man love actually means something to him is a perfect place to set the story.
His cheap cologne smelled like home.
And this is such a telling line about both men. In fact, so good I think you could have even ended the story right there. Nice Job!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! You know, I was actually thinking of ending it on that paragraph, but I wanted Michael to get some verbal love from Ryan for once. Anyway, this was my first time writing Ryan, so I'm glad that it rang true for you. Thanks again!