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Reviewer: WildBerryJam Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 10:20 pm Title: Chapter 1

Really really liked this. It seemed great that Pam finally got sick of waiting and took a chance... which obviously paid off quite well ;)

Author's Response: Yes it did!  :)  Thanks so much for your comment!

Reviewer: ElizabethLynn Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 10:12 pm Title: Chapter 1

I can see this, I can see them just coming together when (when, not if!) Pam finally confesses.  Beautiful imagery.


Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Reviewer: venulia Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 10:07 pm Title: Chapter 1

you have some incredible imagery in this.


Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: LoveFool Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 1

Ugh, this was beautiful...a couple of lines especially were just exquisite:She’s never felt so calm; it’s like a tornado just passed and everyone’s coming out of their houses to peer up at the blue specks of sky peeking through the clouds. And then this too...and she feels something inside her chest smooth over, warm and silky, like paint over flaked bits of plaster. So gorgeous! Loved this!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!  The line about paint and plaster was probably my favorite, so kudos to you for picking it out. :)  Glad you enjoyed the story!

Reviewer: mandy Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 09:37 pm Title: Chapter 1

Just, amazing.  Awesome job, I look forward to reading more from you.  :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Reviewer: stampsgal Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 09:25 pm Title: Chapter 1

This was lovely!  I especially liked these lines: Maybe he didn’t fill her up, maybe he didn’t make her whole, but he was good with his hands and he used the caulk of his presence to keep the wind from whistling through her cracks.

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She can’t do this anymore. She can’t do this anymore. No regrets, she tells herself, repeating it over and over, No regrets no regrets no regrets because the more she says it the less she remembers who she’s always been, the choices she’s always made, the person she was and can’t can’t be anymore.

Thanks for posting this! 



Author's Response: You're welcome!  Thank you so much for commenting, and for picking out your favorite lines -- I appreciate that so much.

Reviewer: shan21 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 09:15 pm Title: Chapter 1

So good. Great insight into Pam. Steaminess factor was incredible.  Is it weird though that I kept thinking, "Ah! Her car's still running!"  Oh well.  An empty tank and a dead battery is totally worth JAM.

Author's Response: Haha. I knew that "I" had left the car running, but I thought the same as you -- it's worth it!  Thank you so much for the comment!

Reviewer: Sheppy Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 09:05 pm Title: Chapter 1

Whew!  ::fanning myself::  Zero to smut indeed!  Well done!!!!


Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: justjaded Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 1

it’s like a tornado just passed and everyone’s coming out of their houses to peer up at the blue specks of sky peeking through the clouds.

 

Absolutely loved that. I'm not sure why, but it just totally and utterly fit the moment so perfectly. You made it sound beautiful, despite things being a disaster before.



Author's Response: Aw, I'm so glad you enjoyed the story!  That line is turned out to be the fan-favorite, too.  Thanks so much for the comment!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 08:40 pm Title: Chapter 1

Love this: six more hours until she can stop pretending to sleep.  I was loving this story when I thought it was going to be a litany of heartache, the journey through craziness and ending in Jim's bed was more than I could have hoped for.  

This just floored me: “I’ve come to tell you,” she says, “that I’m letting you go....and I won’t hold you to anything you said because I ruined it completely..."  That just totally made my heart hurt.  You are my newest favorite author, BTW.



Author's Response:

You know, when I first started writing this, I wasn't sure whether I was going to go for another 'litany of heartache' (nice phrase!) or the craziness, but I've done the former and had much less experience with the latter, so I thought I'd give it a try.  So glad you thought it went well!

And yay, I'm so glad to hear those lines turned out okay.  I liked them, but I wasn't sure how well received they'd be.  And to be on your favorites is just... wonderful.  I'm really, really (in a cheesy sort of way) honored. 

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 08:33 pm Title: Chapter 1

Great story and I agree that it's Pam's turn to lay it all on the line, for better or worse.  "Ya gotta take a chance on something, sometime."

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

Reviewer: GreenFish Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 08:32 pm Title: Chapter 1

Holy mother of God.  What a gorgeous story.  Your descriptive sense is wonderful.  

Author's Response: Holy mother of God, this review makes me laugh!  Thank you so, so much. :)

Reviewer: 69 cups of noodles Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 08:21 pm Title: Chapter 1

Your Pam in this is everything I wish I was.  Getting up in the middle of the night because she just can't take it anymore, going to Jim's house with no regrets...and all the while she's still in character and I believe Pam will finally reach some kind of breaking point regarding her feelings for Jim.

This is seriously amazing. 



Author's Response:

I completely agree, and we just talked about this on TWoP -- it's hard to believe either one of them will go out on a limb like this without having lost it, just a little, or having been somehow pushed into it.  But yes, I definitely think that breaking point will be soon, and there will absolutely be some kind of break.  It won't just happen.

Anyway.  Thank you so much for your (lightning-fast!) review -- I appreciate it so much.

Reviewer: Melanie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 29, 2007 08:16 pm Title: Chapter 1

Wow.  This is really nice.  I love the idea of "no regrets", and what it forces her to do.  Except the running of stop signs.  Not safe!  (Sorry, that's the mom in me.) 

Really fine work.  I can picture this all so well from your words.



Author's Response: Haha, I know what you mean about the stop signs.  I was hesitant to make Pam into such a danger for herself and others, but it was all for the sake of the Jam!  :)  Glad you enjoyed the story, and thank you for your comment.

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