Date: September 15, 2009 07:44 pm Title: When Life Is Turned Upside Down
oh god, this is heartbreaking... and yet i'm still reading.
one thing: you keep switching from past to present tense.
Author's Response:
Yeah, this story could have used a beta. I reread it recently (I actually did a commentary on it at my LJ), and realized how many little things a beta could have caught. I've constantly thought about updating it, but its such a sad subject matter, its one of those I'm not ready to deal with.
And I've been meaning to tell you thanks so much on all the reviews of my old stuff. Really means a lot, you have no idea!
10 [Report This]Date: June 17, 2009 02:57 pm Title: When Life Is Turned Upside Down
My heart is broken! In a good way, though, because your writing is absolutely fantastic!!
Author's Response: Haha, yeah, that'sa good thing. I think ;)
Date: March 15, 2009 06:13 pm Title: When Life Is Turned Upside Down
Hey, I'm right there with you with the grief/death thing. My friends think I'm strange.. keep up with this.. it's awesome'!
Author's Response: It's fun to think about, and every once in a while I want to return to this theme, but it is really hard to put yourself in that mindset sometimes.
Date: August 01, 2007 04:55 am Title: When Life Is Turned Upside Down
My boyfriend's cousin was killed in a car accident last week. Her two children and husband were in the car with her - she was the only one seriously injured.
I hope reading this story will be helpful to me.
Author's Response: Oh I am so sorry for your loss. I wrote this story about 2 and a half years after my father did (not a car accident though), and writing it was really cathartic. I hope you enjoyed and was a good release for you.
Date: February 12, 2007 08:43 pm Title: When Life Is Turned Upside Down
Emily, seriously you are a great writer. I have a hard time reading this because with every word I feel such a physical grief with it. Seriously heart breaking, but a very very good piece! Wow, you made me want to cry.
Author's Response: Aww, thanks. I really enjoy writing... most times. It was really hard to write it, because, it was so emotional, it hurt.
Date: February 11, 2007 11:31 am Title: When Life Is Turned Upside Down
Wow, this is...emotional. I think you have done a really nice job with the background stuff, and I love the characterizations of the kids.
This is a really minor thing, but you might want to pay attention to your verbs-- you switch back and forth between past and present, and it's a little distracting. I think present tense would probably work really well with the tone of this story, and that's probably why you keep slipping into it :)
Author's Response:
Thanks. I just got the second chapter up (not sure if you read then also). It is really hard to write it sometimes when its as emotional as it is. But, I enjoy it. Rather cathartic I think sometimes.
The verb thing has always been a troublesome part of mine. I try to catch some, but am ususally very unsucessful. I will probably try to edit it some when I catch them.
Date: February 11, 2007 10:05 am Title: When Life Is Turned Upside Down
How can you make Jim die?!?!?!?! A really great story, except for the death of Jim part. It might make me stop reading, but its really good, so I'm conflicted Uhggg! Jim can't die. LOL! I'll be okay, its fiction. :P
Author's Response:
Sorry about that. It is hard. The only reason I wouldn't do Pam is because I can write feminine easier, and like, all of my experience (aka real life, books, reseach) has mainly focused on the loss of a male figure. Therefore, when writing fiction, go with what you know. And what I know is death of a male figure.
Don't worry though, if I do get around to writing more (hopefully tonight) There will eventually be some happy like flashbacks or something. But, yeah, mostly sadness.
Its really hard to write this emotionally. Cause, i swear, last night after I finished, I just felt so drained. I had tears and stuff.
Date: February 11, 2007 09:07 am Title: When Life Is Turned Upside Down
Ack! Tear my heart out, why don't you? And then stomp on it! ;) So sad, but poignant and affecting because it made me feel ill. It's nice to read something that's not all hearts and flowers sometimes, too. Good job!
Author's Response:
I laughed when I read this. I was so... drained after writing this. I mean, seriously, most of the emotions were based on how I felt writing it. I shuddered, I cried, I felt myself breaking.
I always really enjoy fluff and even angst. But, some of (okay, all) of my absolute favorite books really center around a tragedy. And, I am so incredibly interested in death and the grieving process.
I am really hoping to write another chapter tonight, and as long as I feel it is still good, I will post it.