10 [Report This]Date: March 05, 2007 03:12 pm Title: Chapter 5
I love, love LOVE this story. I can't believe it's only your third one - you truly have quite a talent for this! Every chapter has been amazing. You created a great backstory for Karen, so believeable and appropriate to what we know and what has happened. And the conversation they had in the car coming back from the party was just perfect. So many great lines. I especially loved these 2 from this chapter -
"She’s debating the meaning of ending, trying to make it sound a little less like failure and a little more like progress. It might just be the end of the first bottle feeling but its actually almost working." and "She suspects he doesn’t need something different, never did, he just needs what he always almost had."
I am a true Jammer and can't wait for Karen to leave, but your story has really humanized her (not sure that is the word I need) and made me truly feel so sorry for the siutation she finds herself in. This is definitely going into my favorites! Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Wow. (/Jim. Clearly.) This review was just what I needed and I can't express how amazing it was to read. Thank you so SO much! There have been a couple of times when I've almost been tempted to let the story slide and it means a lot to me to know that you are following along and enjoying it! I completely love Jim/Pam but I was surprised by the people willing to blame Karen for their setbacks, even going so far as to villify her a bit. I'm ready for her part in their story to be over but to me she is just a girl who got in the wrong relationship and is too flawed herself to handle it any better. I'm happy just to have anyone else consider that.
Also, I'm so glad to know you liked the line, "She suspects he doesn’t need something different, never did, he just needs what he always almost had." It was actually one of the first lines I wrote of the entire story! Thanks again for reading and for the review!!
Date: March 05, 2007 09:28 am Title: Chapter 5
No haiku request.
So I will not write in it.
It takes way too long.
I continue to enjoy this. I love this: "and now, apparently the whole office is worried for my safety. Which is just awesome.” I could picture Jim saying that. I love the whole phone buzzing texting going on in the prior chapter.
I enjoy the last kiss description and the taste of regret, as well as Karen drinking wine in her underwear in the dark. (Wow, I hope this was all a Friday night; I think we're all assuming it was. They all need the weekend to sober up and avoid the aftermath for a few days.) I really like the last sentence about Jim needing what he always almost had.
I look forward to the next chapter and have enjoyed getting a possible background of Karen's mindset. Hey, is this the day on Lost when we do Karen's backstory?
Oh, and you can't scare me off by liking my former haiku review - I'm glad you did.
Author's Response:
I can't thank you enough for your consistent reviewing. Seriously, it really helps to motivate me and it means a lot! Thanks!!
I'm split on the Friday thing, because doesn't the office have casual Fridays? I see no casual attire. I want fun!jeans. but I really can't imagine it being any other day of the week. It would be great though if we had a scene of the next day and you see that the entire office has called in sick. Mental health days all around...